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The Pack
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (City/ Ruin)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-20 08:34 PM
Update: Out into the world. A building block for a larger submission. Go to Comment
The Pack
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (City/ Ruin)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-21 08:25 AM
I'm open to questions - I had not really planned fleshing these folks out much more then they currently are as an outworldly threat appropriate to where I was going to use them. Go to Comment
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-22 01:56 PM
Its a good description of the locale, and usable. The Tattoo link is a bit of a stretch - its a minor detail that does not sit at the core of the sub - its maritime nature is more so.

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Ms. Carlyle
NPCs  (Minor)   (Technical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-20 02:21 PM
This has strong Fallout feel, and of course I love it.

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Agency 17: Illegal Search and Seizure
Plots  (Hired)   (Campaign)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-19 08:50 AM
This is an odd one for the series - there does not seem to be any sinister motivations.

Perhaps the drugs _are_ being seized for 'destruction'. They are destroyed, but end up being used as precursors for some other material.

Good details!

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The Azul Deck of Shadows
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-19 08:31 AM
I have always loved the deck of many things, and Tarot cards, and so this sub is greatly appealing. The use of images is excellent.

Goss has commented on the same thoughts I had on that paragraph.

Save or Die is traditionally associated with the Deck of Many Things, so I have no aversion to that - you draw you takes your chances :)

All and all, really good. Welcome back to the ranks of the posters AG!

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Subdermal Monitor
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-19 08:47 AM
Not bad, though it really needs a clearer description. It implies it with the title and dances about it, but I think it needs just a little more description. I at least needed to think about it a bit to properly visualize it.

Mental picture shows a guy with his forehead flashing - "This Space for Rent"

And of course, this development is one step away from providing limited chameleon power.
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Fort Hard
Locations  (Fortification)   (Other)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-18 10:34 AM
I assume that upon creation of this trap there was also created a book/scroll detailing the Release spell. Cool item! Go to Comment
Trace On System
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-18 09:18 AM
Good and in keeping with the Cosmic Era Vib. I would not want to get hit by a tazer wearing these...

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Augmented Disposition Tattoos
Society/ Organizations  (Mercantile)   (World Wide)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-15 02:03 PM
I like the idea of the enhancement, and that the tattoo serves to mark what procedures have been done, but it feels very superficially tied to the tattoo.

The sections also seem a little jumbled - for example the NPC portion just does not flow for me. I think I get the style you are presenting, but it seems to be somewhat split between being serious, and humorous ( Unaltered Humans Against Tattoos), with more towards the silly side. The summary/intro went in a nice, somewhat dark direction but the other sections dropped the tone.

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Locations  (Country/ State)   (Plains)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-14 01:57 PM
An odd hybrid Monarchy/Republic, sort of like the Magna Carta going in and out of effect from time to time. A good nation with lots of details.

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The Swamp Wraith
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-13 09:55 AM
Very good! There was a little confusion at first as to who was talking to who, but this is a a great post! Go to Comment
10 Magic Tattoos
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-13 02:00 PM
Bah, Lead Balloon Award winner here. Go to Comment
10 Magic Tattoos
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-16 02:15 PM
I plunged deep to get this many. Down with the tryanny of the 30! :)

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Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-12 07:43 AM
I was going to say the same thing Muro!

This is really cool, and use of images is excellent.

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Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-12 09:49 AM
Not bad, though it earns its Silly freetext :)

I have to agree with Gossamer - given how witches are generally treated, kids would not need to disappear before the pitchforks came out...

In response, the Japanese Dogwasps were created...

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Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-06 08:27 PM

Update: Something quick to try and get the ball rolling...

A bit of a close homage to Alice in Wonderland, but I think it may still have some value.

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Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-07 04:54 AM
Altar of Vazzaz
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-07 09:20 AM
A neat location, though I'd add addition restrictions on preventing continual use.

Perhaps the liquid she desires is a moving target, based on a schedule known only to her clergy and other devote followers.
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Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (City/ Ruin)
valadaar's comment on 2013-11-07 08:32 AM
Another of your product-ready posts - it looks like a page out of your awesome Cosmic Era source book.

Great job!

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