I think the amount of effort on this sub is amazing, but I'm afraid there are a few issues that prevent me from being able to properly appreciate it.
1. This report, by its very length, defends itself against the risk of being read. -Winston Churchill
This submission appears to cover too much ground, and there are things that are not really necessary.
In general, submissions here should be game system agnostic - the character sheet should in my opinion, be omitted, or perhaps contained in a linked stub.
This also extends to the detailed discussions on alignment - state it simply and if you want to have a major discussion on alignment, perhaps an article or the forums.
The item descriptions, while wonderfully details, are rather long for what are basically standard items with a bit of unique details. Maybe one or two items might deserve such treatment, but not all.
2. Bold should be used sparingly, it appears to cover the entire submission which defeats the purpose. As it is, it promotes eye strain and makes me really not want to read it in detail. - It seems to be a broken Bold tag, I'll see if I can fix it.
Again, the amount of detail and effort is amazing, but it is a very intimidating read and a lot of it unnecessary to describe an NPC for others to use.
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I'm holding off a vote for now - it really needs to be severely pruned down.