All I have to say is... Who gave this less than a 5? Who was it?!
I've been a big fan of this site for a while, and a relatively new contributing member... I love many of the other regulars on this site... but this is without a doubt the single best submission I have read on here. Congratulations, and I hope you continue your excellence.
I must say that as an aspiring writer, my mind is polluted with your brilliant ideas... Now I have to get them out of there so I can come up with my own material... yet, I sincerely doubt that some of this submission will not leak into my own work. You sir, are an artist. Go to Comment
It's definitely a good try, and its fairly creative, but it needs a lot of polish. You really need to spell out the effects more. What if you use it for 30 seconds? Does it still take 4 years, the same as if you used it for 30 minutes? Seems like it would be better as a gradual thing, as in you age a year for every 30 minutes, expressed as a rate instead of a flat number (which equals 48 days per minute, or .8 days per second - Of course you could adjust the rate to clean up these numbers, if you felt like it.) And yeah, it also seems like immortals (or those with really long lives) would get a lot of benefit from this item with little to no sacrifice. If this is not the case, specify that the rate depends on the creatures lifespan, or that it won't work for immortals. Thanks.
Edit: Plus, the grammar and writing style needs a lot of work, too. Go to Comment
This is a good idea... not particularly imaginative, and it could be cleaned up a great deal (spellcheck, Moon! :P), but the concept is a good one. Maybe I'll create a mercenary corp to rival this one! Hahaha! Go to Comment
This a great example on how to flesh out the culture of orcs... or any other fantasy race for that matter. Scras has hit on the essence of creating a realistic and multifaceted tribal culture, and debunking some old and tired fantasy cliches along the way. This sub is an easy 5.0. Go to Comment
Pretty decent sub. I would expect a longer write up given its unoriginal nature, but a good idea nonetheless. (btw, its been done in Sci-Fi as well... you may recall the ansible from Orson Scott Card's Ender books. Almost identical to this.) Go to Comment
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