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Veglins
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Underground)
sverigesson's comment on 2010-05-21 08:12 PM
This is great. Goblins are old hat, but fung-oblins with creepy racial dreams and instinctual engineering and masonry skills? That's just badass. Go to Comment
sverigesson's comment on 2010-04-22 06:50 PM
I like this. Mostly because Twilight just strikes a nerve deep down in my cockles. Down with the vampire menace! Go to Comment
To Be A Decepticon
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
sverigesson's comment on 2010-04-15 05:23 PM
This, though geared toward a Transformers setting, is something that can inspire villains of all persuasions; technological, organic or otherwise. I think these are important things to think about when creating an antagonist. These do not say "Mwahaha, I am so evil!" They believe they are doing the right thing, and through strength, deception, and conquest try to bring about a better (in their eyes) world. Indeed, stories are often one sided. How often do we hear the good guys bash the "evil empire" and never get the other side of the story? What if the rebels really are just that: radical terrorist organizations trying to overthrow a strict, militant, but otherwise benevolent government who is trying their best to rule justly and put bread on its citizens' tables?

Good things to remember. Go to Comment
Chapter 6: The Sabatallee
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-10-23 07:27 PM
This is truly a great write up for a culture. I would give it a 4.5 or 5, but there are numerous grammatical errors that drag it down slightly, so it gets a 4. Keep it up, and I hope to hear more about this land of Parna. Go to Comment
Alexis the Vampiric Priest
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Criminal/Espionage)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-09-27 07:39 PM
A priest who is forced to become what he hates the most. Hilarity ensues. All in all, one of the less stereotypical vampires I have seen over the years. Plus, he doesn't get shiny in sunlight! Very good sub, and worthy of any game, especially one where the church and vampires clash as a major conflict of the setting. Go to Comment
Ianna the Were-Mosquito
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-09-21 07:13 PM
This is very nice, Cheka. Of all the were-creatures, the Mosquito would seem unlikely, but the ties to bloodsucking and disease make it work all the better. I like that at first she used it to exact vengeance against those who wronged her or her loved ones, then gradually slipped into using it for her own personal gain. It could get a tiny bit more fleshed out, and the plot hooks could be a little more thorough, but all in all a solid sub. Go to Comment
Fireblood Elixir
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-09-17 06:38 PM
After reading your past submission on something like this, I can say this is a great improvement. For a group of badasses for whom a few serious third degree burns is no big deal, this could be a great boon. Very flavorful and useful. Might find its way into an alchemy based story I'm working on. Go to Comment
The Sorcerer's Art
Systems  (Mystical)   (Defining)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-06-30 07:15 PM
This is an excellent magic system, as it limits the sometimes "munchkinny" powers of wizards. After all, historically, practitioners of magic primarily gained power through deals with spirits, demons or, with a little bit of arabian flair, "djinni". Well done. Go to Comment
An Adventurer's best Friend
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Other)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-06-26 12:40 PM
I'm gonna agree with Murometz on this one. Spectacular in every way. Only giving you a 4.5 because it's only half of a 30! Well done, and I hope you add more to this post soon. Go to Comment
Dynas the Traveler
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-06-09 08:15 AM
I like him. A little crazy, but useful. I would like a little bit more info on some of his adventures though, and a few more plothooks, maybe. Go to Comment
The Deathstick
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Cursed)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-06-08 06:16 PM
Alright, I'll bite.

I like this. It's not spectacular (and Harry Potter already has a wand called the Deathstick, FYI), but it is solid. The plot hooks are predictable, but okay, and there is just enough detail (and knowing about the other Ma-O subs helps). Go to Comment
Clock-Man
NPCs  (Extras)   (Domestic/ Craft)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-09-28 10:33 PM
I love this. One issue--this keeps reminding me of a cross between HK-47 from Star Wars: KOTOR and Andy from the Dark Tower. In other words, I can't help but think of him as harmless on the outside, but harboring a sinister purpose below the surface. Fortunately for you, this makes me like his potential even more. Plus, the system of telling time is just too good to pass up. Go to Comment
Mercenaries' Code
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (General)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-05-27 02:41 PM
RGT, I've been reading a lot of your recent posts, and I must say, you are quickly becoming a rising star here on the Citadel. This is a well thought out evolution of a long standing warriors code, and it, like your posts on your Gods, is beyond excellent. You get a 5 for your continued great work! Go to Comment
The Book Keepers
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (City/ Ruin)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-05-24 07:38 AM
I like this. It could be expanded upon in some areas, but the idea is thoughtful and well presented. For your first post, a very solid sub. Congrats, and let me welcome you to our fold. Go to Comment
Anchor Spirits
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Water)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-05-19 09:32 AM
I think this is wonderful. Certainly provides a sensible explanation for all of these legendary ships with supernatural abilities that are floating around. I imagine this could also be extended to airships, or in a suitably magical sci-fi campaign, spaceships. Very nice, and a 4.5 to you, sir. Go to Comment
Redpools
Locations  (City)   (Swamp)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-05-19 09:43 AM
Well said, Scras. This is a beautifully thought out city... the combination of salt and cattle industries is a well planned, natural seeming progression of a city's ecomonic growth (this, coming from an economist, so well done). I particularly like the plentiful numbered footnotes corresponding to different sections of the writeup. Very nice! Go to Comment
Spirits of Tradition
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-05-19 09:49 AM
Good idea. I was a little confused at first regarding the method of how exactly this works, but a good post nonetheless. It could be tweaked a tiny bit, but over all, a good sub. Go to Comment
Charles Blackridge-The Dreamer
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Knowledge/Lore)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-05-07 04:44 PM
I think its great precisely because its TV showish... and maybe a little because I thought up a character just like this myself, and I simply love the detail and quirky bits. Definitely a 5/5. Go to Comment
Psychic Cell Phone
Items  (Computers)   (Cursed)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-04-28 05:29 PM
The idea of a cellular phone with magical powers is an interesting idea for a modern type game/story, but I just wish some parts of this were fleshed out a little better. Go to Comment
30 Gangsters
NPCs  (Extras)   (Criminal/Espionage)
sverigesson's comment on 2009-04-27 08:30 AM
This is a nice addition to the 30s on this sight. A few minor grammatical mistakes here and there, and some of the entries could stand to be fleshed out some more, but all in all, I enjoyed reading this. Go to Comment
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