Hmmm..I think the Grey scribe is an interesting character. The juxtaposition of the gruesome details of his appearance with the mention of a practicality is a good touch. One can imagine the maggots eating at him to be apt metaphors for the emotions eating away at his soul. The reminder of the Scribe's grovelling'( can I assume that?), menial nature in the last paragraph sums up the character well. Overall seems an excellent candidate for a creature that would alternate between self-deceptive loyalty and betrayal. Not unduly offensive in my opinion... Go to Comment

Hmmm..i thought it was ok. Maybe to similar to the normal world for my liking with stuff about copyright haha and non-death penalty etc. The idea is pretty cool though Go to Comment

hehe it sounds pretty good.. the description is really thorough, I wonder if any part was inspired or informed by 'Warrior's' behaviour? Go to Comment