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30 Legendary Antidotes/Cures
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
olontur's comment on 2010-08-19 06:13 AM
As a long-time lurker in the Citadel, i too found some works i had previously enjoyed a lot!
This is my first vote here and it's a solid 5/5. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
olontur's comment on 2011-12-06 07:24 AM

like it a lot!

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20 Fantasy Prosthetics
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
olontur's comment on 2012-08-18 05:41 AM
24.) Bezoar's hooves

Taken from a huge mountain goat of the northern mountains, this pair of legs have to be sewn to the stubs of the user's lower legs. After the grafting is complete, there is a high risk of infection with mountain fevers, which will typically wear off after a fortnight at most.
The hooves allow the user to navigate rough mountainous terrain with goat-like ease and agility. Even steep inclines can be scaled swiftly and jumps across chasms of 10 feet are no feat for the wearer.

While in town users often would choose to conceal the hooves from superstitious eyes by wearing long flowing robes or pants, but the overwhelmingly strong, goat-y odor cannot be covered by even the most expensive perfume. Go to Comment
The Black Jester
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Political)
olontur's comment on 2010-11-04 07:38 PM

Wonderfully dark and detailed! Only a few spelling and grammar errors, especially in the beginning of the story distract.

I wonder how you could provide a nemesis or antithesis for him, for example a nanny, in a similar situation, but reacting with compassion, forgiveness and love instead of despair and inviting demons...



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The Rituals of Purification
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
olontur's comment on 2017-07-20 01:49 AM
If there was ever a plug and play world breaking device, this has got to be it! Simply fantastic! Go to Comment
The Necronautilus
Items  (Transports)   (Magical)
olontur's comment on 2010-10-27 12:02 AM

Zomby Dick! Loves it!

A possible explanation for the zombies in its stomach is the need for "minions" to tackle ships... Just thought I put in a couple of cents. :)

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The Necronautilus
Items  (Transports)   (Magical)
olontur's comment on 2010-10-27 12:07 AM

Oh, and I think you could easily change it into a huge Nautilus without much effort...

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The God of Small Things
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Defining)
olontur's comment on 2010-10-31 05:03 AM

Like ot a lot!

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Rosahomin, a Sci-Fi take on Dryads
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Forest/ Jungle)
olontur's comment on 2010-10-12 12:19 AM

While an interesting idea at heart, it's not at all plausibly defined. How could, for example, a species with rudimentary understanding of mathematics and physics operate starships, even if provided with all fuel and spare parts? Even economics wouldn't work, as they have no sense of possession...

Their biology after their uplift is just as unresolved.

I think it should be greatly reworked to live up to the great idea that's hiding behind!

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The Chosen of Uep-Hawet
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Country/ State)
olontur's comment on 2012-05-29 02:58 AM
Useful, incredibly so! I enjoyed every bit of it, from the narratives to the plausible explanations.

The tone and setting are refreshingly innovative and new. Will use it very soon! Go to Comment
The Shrew-Haters
Plots  (Mystical)   (Mini-Campaign)
olontur's comment on 2010-09-25 05:23 PM
Scras, this is a perfect example of the fact that it's about execution, not originality! It's convincing, detailed, thoughtful, emotional, intelligent, picturesque and very well written.

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A Poisoner's Almanac
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
olontur's comment on 2012-03-06 05:09 AM

I think something like the Nerve Fire Poison could actually be used in minute quantities as a stimulating drug, or be used when heightened senses are useful, like when on guard duty!

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olontur's comment on 2011-11-15 10:08 AM
S(t)ir Fry! Love it! Go to Comment
Worlds and Planets
Locations  (World)   (Any)
olontur's comment on 2010-09-11 11:53 PM

This is probably the most believable Dead Civilization/World I've ever come across!


As many thumbs up as possible! :D

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Worlds and Planets
Locations  (World)   (Any)
olontur's comment on 2010-09-15 06:49 PM
Even more surpisongly, most insects are herbivores! ;) Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (City/ Ruin)
olontur's comment on 2012-09-18 07:13 AM
A perfect gem of the citadel! Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
olontur's comment on 2011-12-07 02:15 AM

just voted.

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The Papyri of Ptesh Na-Khet
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
olontur's comment on 2012-05-29 07:24 AM
The One Fortieth Scroll: Stalker's Path

The scroll is - perhaps thankfully - partly scorched and reeks as unhallowed pits used to burn the dead of plague. For the most part the scroll has been charred, but the legible parts detail rituals needed to open a gate. To where it is not clear. Notes of a diviner, written on silk and neatly folded in the casket containing the scroll state:

"I cannot describe the terror that resonates from the papyrus and its magics are beyond my skill and comprehension to control. Yet the wonders I beheld when I cast spells of scrying onto the fragile fragments must be accessible to those who wish to control its powers.

As my profession as a diviner of mystic riddles compels me to, shield I my mind from the terrible, the unknown. And the ruins in which I found the scroll laid portents of doom upon my mind.
The vision that was revealed to me was one of terror: I believe 'twas the time and place when the scroll was burned and still I feel the scorching fires whipping at my face and hands, whenever I dare close my eyes without a draught of Dreamless Wine.
I beheld myself in a room and only with great exertion of power could I discern that I was on a tower high above the desert. It was no room indeed but incantations of secrecy and forgetfulness were scribed on the smooth rock floor to foil divinations. Only my powerful spells and the vast expanses of time that lay between me and my vision allowed me to discern that it was a rooftop of sorts, strewn with charred bones. The lay in a pattern, but the details of that I cannot recall. My vision blurred and I beheld just a gate constructed of bones and alight with hellish file. Black, stinking smoke rose in a great plume and darkened the sky. I - or the one who's eyes I was scrying through - strode forward. The fire burned with hellish rage but I faltered not. I felt words being uttered and the fire seemed to send out hungry tendrils for me - him. Through the portal I - he - strode and only now could I see that the garment we wore. It seemed royal and now I felt the burden of heavy headgear and the endless duties he bore as a monarch. Fleeting thoughts of war and destruction and already a landscape was revealed to my vision that frightened both me and the king. Yet he knew it. He had been here before. As scorching as the fiery gate had been, as cold and dark this place was. The king - and with him I - knelt down on the black stone. Before him rose to great height a skull of stone. The skull seemed human, yet it was bestial and the King shuddered in sight of its hideous fangs. Shadows equally frightening and bestial encircled us. From within the skull a terrible voice rang and even while awake I squeal when I remember it. The king squealed too, for I felt how the voice denied all help. Not a word did I understand, but the terror and thoughts of the king still haunt my dreams. The voice promised to destroy the kings lands and take back whatever had been granted. I - or the king - jumped up and ran back towards the gate, my vision ended with pain of fire and fear of death. Sometimes the kings thoughts come back to haunt me and I feel the life of his folk being devoured by the ancient evil beyond the gate." Go to Comment
The Papyri of Ptesh Na-Khet
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
olontur's comment on 2012-05-29 07:26 AM
This is one of my very first additions to the Citadel, please do critic in the harshest way possible! :) Go to Comment
Ye Accursed Codde Piece of Red Hatchet
Items  (Armor)   (Cursed)
olontur's comment on 2012-05-09 03:42 AM

So, is there any urge to smell it???

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The Rhenn Plains are serene and peaceful, beautiful, and quiet as if nothing had ever had happened to it, hiding away it's violent present and past. During some time ago, the countries needed land to fight on, for they did not want war to come to their home, so they chose the Rhenn Plains, Armies met there and men died on the lands, so the land has been empty always. But now there has been set an outpost and they are beset by the goverments wanting to keep it free, will the soldiers of the barracks prevail, or fall trying?

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