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Maric the Orator
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
necromancer's comment on 2007-07-16 09:21 AM
Well to be honest he's a character im goin to use in a story im writing so he isn't really meant for a game. Go to Comment
The Order of Dalraaen
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
necromancer's comment on 2007-04-08 12:41 PM
I love this god! I'm definatly going to make some use of this guy. Go to Comment
The Truth War
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
necromancer's comment on 2007-03-25 11:19 AM
Thanks guys. I know the elves I was describing in this sub are really based on greeks, while the human empire is roman.

I didn't go into much details on the characters because they are really unimportant. Dozus was right in this respect.

I like the idea of a war of ideals and not nations, which I think are more interesting by far. Go to Comment
Star of Rage
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
necromancer's comment on 2007-03-03 11:22 AM
A really nice idea and a flexable one as well. I have an idea of the stars spreading like a virus, making an army of berserkers. What it there was a sort of cult that forcefully implanted the parasites? All in all an excelent submission. Go to Comment
Cult of Terat
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Regional)
necromancer's comment on 2007-02-26 09:27 AM
I think this is a brilliant submission. You've fleshed out the subject really well and your idea if solid and adaptable. It could be implimented in other worlds easily.

I am curious though. Do the cultists fight with other armies or do they just fight any military force they set eyes upon. Would they act like mercenaries? Go to Comment
The Kankreest
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
necromancer's comment on 2007-02-17 12:45 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Undertown Killer
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
necromancer's comment on 2007-02-17 09:00 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Piash Nildar
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
necromancer's comment on 2007-02-01 03:14 PM
Ok I admit you might have one or two good points, but there are so many ones that are just nit-picking and without the bad ones to make you comment seem long and arduous, frankly you got nothing.

First off yes I do need to go over my work and I forgot because it was late, in future I will always use spell. This time I simply forgot. No need to use bold on words either, you get too worked up about these things.

I do not leave steps out, if there seems to be a gap it is because nothing interesting happens during that time.

The empire is important to the setting, and it is not only there to make the story too complicated for you. If I only put in the bare minimum you'd be very annoyed and the story would suffer and become thin.

The description was not called physical description for a reason. It just describes the character as he is now. Also you said something to the effect that the 'Straining' was part of the history and should of been part of the description (It seems you became aware of you mistake here and either forgot or couldn't be bothered to fix it). I did not want to reveal this until the end of the description and it was an integral part of the story of his history.

The adoption thing shows your confusion as well. The village did not take him in, the fletcher did, and how does having two fletchers make the village huge. Alinon took him in because his wife died with his unborn child. And they don't hate him enough to just dump a baby on the side of the road or whatever you were suggesting they would be inclined to do.

He entered the contest at first to earn respect. 'This kid' by the way was going to get into the senior contest when he was old enough.

Your point about the fair is unfounded, in a small village everyone was at the fair and the alleyways aren't full of street gangs. This sort of thing happened only because Gazni wanted revenge.

Oh and finally that fuss you made about the human and elf description is, for lack of a better word petty. I'm sorry it if it seemed I was patronizing you (oh wait no I'm not) but I described humans from the point of view of someone that lives in world fantasy world as I'm sure has been done countless times. But I also wanted to show the differences between the two races.

Maybe its time you thought before you write and lose some arrogance. Go to Comment
Piash Nildar
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
necromancer's comment on 2007-02-01 03:27 PM
Updated: Spelling and grammer has been updated. Go to Comment
Piash Nildar
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
necromancer's comment on 2007-02-02 07:31 AM
yes i do admit I was a hotheaded when I wrote that reply. I found the advice about spelling and grammer and reading it out loud is sound advice, but i still think Moon took things a bit to far hear.

Be that as it may I am really sorry as I took this way too far. Go to Comment
The Urac-Ar - a new look at goblinoids
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
necromancer's comment on 2007-02-03 06:38 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Alun
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Country/ State)
necromancer's comment on 2007-01-31 06:11 PM
At first i thought this race was a cliche, but through your details you've made it your own. Go to Comment
Village People
NPCs  (Extras)   (Agricultural)
necromancer's comment on 2007-02-19 12:13 PM
This is a pretty good scroll. The idea of everyone being interconnected really brings it to life.

Has anyone considered doing a plot submission about the village? I think it would be a good idea Go to Comment
The Loru Valsharris
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Forest/ Jungle)
necromancer's comment on 2007-01-31 06:03 PM
Great, its rare to see something so origional. Go to Comment
30 Brigands
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Combative)
necromancer's comment on 2007-04-09 08:06 AM
Sweat idea Go to Comment
Abadra Siege Barrel
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Magical)
necromancer's comment on 2006-09-22 06:43 PM
your item is silly but I think you have a good idea in it and i think you should continue posting these things. Go to Comment
30 Pirates
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Criminal/Espionage)
necromancer's comment on 2006-09-22 06:49 PM
Great. The pirates are not so serious which fits in with normal swashbuckling, light hearted adventures.

Well done Go to Comment
30 Princesses
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Political)
necromancer's comment on 2006-09-16 10:34 AM
Sweet Idea. Though I suppose Moon is right. Go to Comment
30 Necromancers
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Mystical)
necromancer's comment on 2006-09-16 10:11 AM
Brillient I espessially love the Sarcomancer, I could see a new post there Go to Comment
Bridge Shadow
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Any)
necromancer's comment on 2006-09-22 06:28 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
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