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Golden Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
mrcelophane's comment on 2014-03-24 12:48 PM
Meh, didn't want to create a story where one did not really exist. The focus was on the creature. I gave it enough of a back-story that if you are asked by a player you can explain where they came from. Go to Comment
Golden Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
mrcelophane's comment on 2014-03-24 01:49 PM
That makes sense. Thanks for the input.

If something come to me I'll add it in. I do not want to force it though. Go to Comment
Golden Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
mrcelophane's comment on 2014-03-30 01:35 PM
This was going to be one of the first things I added if I did add anything...now I'm fresh out of new ideas for it. Good job :P Go to Comment
Golden Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
mrcelophane's comment on 2014-03-30 09:54 PM
Wasn't sure if this was a serious question...figured I'd answer it anyway.

I always figured Golems don't need to see...they sort of rely on their superiors for instruction. I'll leave that for the GM's...might be interesting to have it lose you if you stand right in front of it Go to Comment
Bird Brains
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
mrcelophane's comment on 2014-01-26 03:35 PM
The idea was that there was some code built into the imperfections. As someone who spends a lot of time with computers, I felt there had to be some form of programming built into the gems... Though enchanted gems that call to each other work just as well. Go to Comment
Overly-Attached Chainmail
Items  (Armor)   (Cursed)
mrcelophane's comment on 2014-01-25 06:51 PM
Before I start, I did not judge you based on grammar. I saw what you were trying to say and I am going off that with my voting.

With that said, there a few places that were hard to read. After the third paragraph, the lore behind it seems to fall apart due to the grammar and you seemed to rush through to the ending.

As for mechanics...

I'm a little confused about what happens when a female puts the armor on. If the armor shows no love to women (sexist scumbag armor) then why will the woman not immediately feel inclined to take off the armor and not need the ritual? Furthermore, seems kind of harsh to have the armor be an instakill based on gender.

Otherwise, I really like it and plan on using it as a hook if it has a way to fit into the story. I will update you if I do. Go to Comment
Lady Delores Briggs
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-20 04:16 PM
It all depends on when they meet her. It is only when she becomes bored with one method that she moves to another, like her garden. If early on, she is still using traditional methods. It isn't until she is older that she tries experimental things, like mixing hope into the screams by setting up SAW like scenarios where prisoners think they can earn their freedom.


What I mean to say by this is that she really does not have a signature torture method, or wouldn't really.  Go to Comment
Lady Delores Briggs
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-21 01:11 PM
Just printed out the page and started editing again. While there are some that were missed, a good majority I remember seeing and either forgot to fix or did and forgot to save.

Either way, thanks for the input. Happy to see I was able to score so high even with so many grammatical errors present Go to Comment
Lady Delores Briggs
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-28 03:04 PM
>The one thing I'm not sure of is how she manages to get away with so much. With all the witnesses to her arena, including the ones who decided never to come back, her level of cruelty must at least be whispered about.

Except for the two occasions mentioned, she comes across only as an old woman who enjoys entertaining. In her setting, gladiatorial matches are not that uncommon, and hers are a unique pleasure.

In hindsight, I suppose this is a rather large jump to assume, because it does not take place in Ancient Rome. That said, many fantasy setting have gladiators.

As for prisoners: not many people are going to follow up on those. Maybe the family would ask, but I don't think it was too uncommon for prisoners to die.

Tl;dr: Most don't really see the cruelty, and PC's would have to do quite a bit of digging to find out about anything weird. Go to Comment
30 Prisons
Locations  (Fortification)   (Any)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-18 02:25 PM
5/5, but I am slightly curious about the frozen prison. Barring the mortality rate, it will be as if they never went to prison. The prisoners would not be able to tell the difference between 5 minutes and 500 years, and in fact may prefer to be frozen as long as possible to see better technology.

A possibility is that there is a traditional prison, and when they fill up they create a "queue" of frozen inmates waiting for an opening, so they still have to serve there 20 years and may also have to have 100 years pass before they do it. Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Trans World)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-18 02:37 PM
Enjoyable read on the way to Church this morning.

Interesting that PCs can be placed inside any era of this Religion and it still can be a dominant force. Go to Comment
The Shield of St. John
Items  (Armor)   (Non-Magical)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-19 03:56 PM

It's a solid idea...just missing some sort of flair that would make me score higher. 

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The Shield of St. John
Items  (Armor)   (Non-Magical)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-19 04:41 PM

Added an extra .5

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30 More Gladiators
NPCs  (Extras)   (Combative)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-16 10:41 PM
Every entry, while short, is amazingly descriptive for its length. It is very tempting to make 30 full entries and link them to this page.

For that, 5/5. Could not have done this any better. Go to Comment
Corpsemaker
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-18 04:17 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Tyrant of the Mind
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
mrcelophane's comment on 2013-08-19 03:46 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Deathapple Trees
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
mrcelophane's comment on 2008-05-08 05:17 PM
Very interesting...Never really thought of a tree someone...unless it fell on them of course.

Why is this a scroll? Go to Comment
Kalashnikov AK-217
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
mrcelophane's comment on 2008-04-29 12:24 PM
Gave it 3.5/5, because it is a "Good Solid idea" with a little extra added. I liked it. Knowing very little about guns, it all seems to make sense to me and I can't think of any way to make it better. Go to Comment
Oven of Unbreaking Edibles
Items  (Tools)   (Cursed)
mrcelophane's comment on 2008-03-24 08:38 AM
Ahem

LOL

Ahem

4/5, but missing the silly Freetext. I woke up early on my last day of Spring Break and was in a bad mood till I read this. Now I'm gonna be thinking about this all day. Go to Comment
Oven of Unbreaking Edibles
Items  (Tools)   (Cursed)
mrcelophane's comment on 2008-03-24 03:07 PM
well, it could be abused, but only if the PC's figure out that it works for weapons, too. And only if they fight their way past the giant Pillsbury Doughboys every time they want to harden a sword. Go to Comment
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