Meh, didn't want to create a story where one did not really exist. The focus was on the creature. I gave it enough of a back-story that if you are asked by a player you can explain where they came from. Go to Comment
Wasn't sure if this was a serious question...figured I'd answer it anyway.
I always figured Golems don't need to see...they sort of rely on their superiors for instruction. I'll leave that for the GM's...might be interesting to have it lose you if you stand right in front of it Go to Comment
The idea was that there was some code built into the imperfections. As someone who spends a lot of time with computers, I felt there had to be some form of programming built into the gems... Though enchanted gems that call to each other work just as well. Go to Comment
Before I start, I did not judge you based on grammar. I saw what you were trying to say and I am going off that with my voting.
With that said, there a few places that were hard to read. After the third paragraph, the lore behind it seems to fall apart due to the grammar and you seemed to rush through to the ending.
As for mechanics...
I'm a little confused about what happens when a female puts the armor on. If the armor shows no love to women (sexist scumbag armor) then why will the woman not immediately feel inclined to take off the armor and not need the ritual? Furthermore, seems kind of harsh to have the armor be an instakill based on gender.
Otherwise, I really like it and plan on using it as a hook if it has a way to fit into the story. I will update you if I do. Go to Comment
It all depends on when they meet her. It is only when she becomes bored with one method that she moves to another, like her garden. If early on, she is still using traditional methods. It isn't until she is older that she tries experimental things, like mixing hope into the screams by setting up SAW like scenarios where prisoners think they can earn their freedom.
What I mean to say by this is that she really does not have a signature torture method, or wouldn't really. Go to Comment
>The one thing I'm not sure of is how she manages to get away with so much. With all the witnesses to her arena, including the ones who decided never to come back, her level of cruelty must at least be whispered about.
Except for the two occasions mentioned, she comes across only as an old woman who enjoys entertaining. In her setting, gladiatorial matches are not that uncommon, and hers are a unique pleasure.
In hindsight, I suppose this is a rather large jump to assume, because it does not take place in Ancient Rome. That said, many fantasy setting have gladiators.
As for prisoners: not many people are going to follow up on those. Maybe the family would ask, but I don't think it was too uncommon for prisoners to die.
Tl;dr: Most don't really see the cruelty, and PC's would have to do quite a bit of digging to find out about anything weird. Go to Comment
5/5, but I am slightly curious about the frozen prison. Barring the mortality rate, it will be as if they never went to prison. The prisoners would not be able to tell the difference between 5 minutes and 500 years, and in fact may prefer to be frozen as long as possible to see better technology.
A possibility is that there is a traditional prison, and when they fill up they create a "queue" of frozen inmates waiting for an opening, so they still have to serve there 20 years and may also have to have 100 years pass before they do it. Go to Comment
Gave it 3.5/5, because it is a "Good Solid idea" with a little extra added. I liked it. Knowing very little about guns, it all seems to make sense to me and I can't think of any way to make it better. Go to Comment
well, it could be abused, but only if the PC's figure out that it works for weapons, too. And only if they fight their way past the giant Pillsbury Doughboys every time they want to harden a sword. Go to Comment
Elves are not actually aloof. They are actually extremely family-based and insular, and often intermarry inside their families, making them uncomfortable around those not of their family. Therefore, they shield themselves behind pretended aloofness and coldness until they are comfortable in others' company.