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The Seven-Fold Flame
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
manfred's comment on 2009-02-07 03:47 PM
I like it as well. But somehow it seems incomplete, like a page torn out of a book. Certainly usable and easy to transplant elsewhere, it would be still nice to learn all the other details.

Is the Seventh Fire able to heal? Go to Comment
Kazimiera
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
manfred's comment on 2009-02-07 04:38 PM
Like the stuff in italics as well. An avatar worth using. Go to Comment
Quickfoot Quagmire
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mercantile)
manfred's comment on 2009-02-07 04:59 PM
I'd actually say his boots have become magical on their own (one too many magical wines poured into them), or some lesser godling blessed him for a timely delivery of the right alcohol.

Good one! :) Go to Comment
Order of the Iron-Shod Boot
Society/ Organizations  (Combative)   (Area)
manfred's comment on 2009-02-03 03:50 PM
Harsh men with a harsh fate, you have to respect their bravery - or understand their desperation. The cruel writing here is admirable.

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Raise the Stakes
Covertly, the Brotherhood has to attack their powerful neighbor, who until now avoided the fray, having an agreement with the Duke. But he keeps a large army close, which could be provoked into action by a few well-executed crimes of war, or if the Duke's units would trespass the border. Done wrong, it would only expedite the defeat. Done right, the conflict would escalate, perhaps even buy freedom to this small patch of land. The chances are terrible, but sometimes there isn't anything else to try. Go to Comment
Deacon Rogue
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
manfred's comment on 2009-02-02 03:49 PM
Not that bad. I wonder about that chance moment with the Bishop though - was it really an accident? Go to Comment
Kosuranda, Princess of Albatrosses
NPCs  (Character Sheet)   (Political)
manfred's comment on 2009-02-02 03:10 PM
This one's actually funny! Princess Chaos in all her beauty. Meet her and weep. :) Go to Comment
Runaway bride
NPCs  (Character Sheet)   (Travelers)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-30 07:59 AM
A nice minor NPC, she could provoke a little family drama (did that 'true love' woo her for other reasons?) and even be turned into a fledgling adventurer.

I like that she relies on her dog to learn about people, a good detail. Go to Comment
Helk the Hatchet
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-30 07:53 AM
Yeah, it's an okay NPC. The "falling in with a marauding horde" sounds a little improbable, perhaps someone from the group recognized him, or he was recommended to do it before by his "friends" from the jail, if there is such a thing.

And we wanna know about those hatchets. :) Go to Comment
Close Encounters of the Planar Kind
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-29 03:44 PM
Yep, it is a very fun and usable plot! You could even have a whole school of magic with that. Go to Comment
Princess Amelia, Princess of Lovebirds
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
manfred's comment on 2009-02-01 02:29 PM
That aside, where does she get all those love potions from? Who's the supplier... and could the person have an ulterior motive in fueling her naive attempts to everyone love another? Go to Comment
Emotion 17
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-26 06:02 PM
Yes, that was actually intended that way, the "you know what I'm talkin' about" assumption. Is it too confusing? Go to Comment
Emotion 17
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-27 04:15 PM
That does it - out with ya! :) Go to Comment
Emotion 17
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-27 05:27 PM
The chippers are not really 'evil', they just want to bring happiness to everyone. That makes them scarier.

And they are not exactly a cult - while cooperating eagerly, they somehow failed to create all the necessary trappings, literature, philosophy, or organize around a leader. But yes, someone could definitely use the Emotion to such a purpose. Go to Comment
Twin Lotus
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
manfred's comment on 2009-02-14 06:04 PM
After reading the history in fine detail and legend, the short part on their powers almost disappointed me. After reading the part again, it was suddenly clear. (Note that Roleplaying notes are still a part of the Magical Properties, since there is no real roleplaying involved - you either have the right body type or you don't.)

Does the spirit or essence of the creator, that dwells within the hammers, have any impact on its use? The penalties at use are given by its make, but is there something else? There's no need to another bonus against enemy X, what if, say, the hammers gently glow, after being recited an ancient poem the smith loved? Go to Comment
Edward Bailey
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-27 04:27 PM
An okay person, some polish would be nice. He could serve as the contact to the 'drylanders' for the merpeople, after they learned to trust him. Go to Comment
Fumbler's Cuffs
Items  (Other)   (Cursed)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-27 02:46 PM
Now that is cute! Just the perfect way to make the prisons safer (and earn some cash for the lesser enchanters).

Maybe the spell was cast with a phrase "until you weep", or something like that... making tears and salty water the countermeasure. Go to Comment
Natasha Tchakov
NPCs  (Major)   (Technical)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-21 04:27 PM
She also fits neatly into the brilliant evil mastermind archetype. I'm not saying you should make her one, but it would be extremely easy to frame her for something like that. Speaking of... does she have some enemies? (If she doesn't, the company may have.) Sometimes it's the quality of enemies that tells the most about a man - or a woman. Go to Comment
Natasha Tchakov
NPCs  (Major)   (Technical)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-27 02:34 PM
Understated and solid, that is a good summary, a character that will hold a part of the plot. I would still point out, that she is easy to frame for some major evilness, so the PCs may need to investigate her for this reason as well.

Perhaps there is something in her work she would love to achieve - the perfect non-lethal stun weapon, the ultimate gun detector, anything - she should dream of achieving something exceptional.


I like that you have left out her mother's name. It tells a lot. Go to Comment
Roleplaying books
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-27 04:24 PM
I think as well some of these deserve expansion; at the same time, the 'roleplaying' components should be kept separate from the content, to make it easier to slap them on other books. 'Cause hey, we've got tons of other books already! (And I'm too lazy to create more.)

So these are more 'modifiers' of existing books than books themselves. Go to Comment
Roleplaying books
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
manfred's comment on 2009-01-28 02:35 PM
That hurt. Go to Comment
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