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Silver Star Campus
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Any)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-18 04:58 PM


I like this - it's a good piece, about an altruistic group of people who aren't out to secretly infiltrate the government and rule the world. It's simple, about an order of people helping people. The piece was well written (only thing that irked me was the "Central Center") but it's a practical, usable submission in all ways, shapes and forms.


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Ars Dracopodemiae
Systems  (Knowledge/Lore)   (Specific)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-27 05:58 PM


Wow. This is quite frankly, amazing.



Cant say anything about it that hasn't already been said. Fantastic work.



 



5/5


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Maternity Blossom
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-09-14 02:40 PM


ouch. Points for originality. Good defining item, and I could see it as a good trick to really mess with a foreigner.


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Maternity Blossom
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-09-14 02:53 PM


Princess Albretta of the Andalonic Consortium is a virtuous lass, a paragon of what a lady should be, in all ways. Physically, she is stunning, with an hourglass figure, long, flowing locks of auburn hair, and dainty, delicate facial features that only the most purebred nobility could offer. She is second to none in the College of the Consortium, first in her class - a shining example of a good student. And she is virtuous - attending all the necessary ceremonies to Vashjar, the local deity.



But perhaps a beautiful mind and spirit are not enough to fight off the alluring call of the physical body. As of late, the princess' gowns fit a bit tigher, as the hour glass has slowly but surely yielded a bubble in the midsection.



The king is furious, for the Duke of Onderhol, who was betrothed to Albretta, has suddenly become adamantly opposed to marrying said Princess, robbing the Consortium of promised prestige and wealth.



Now there is a witchhunt - or, more appropriately, a man hunt. Ten thousand Sovereigns to the one who brings in the culprit. Rest assured, the minor courts have turned into snake-pits. Everyone is looking to frame someone. And they are willing to pay to hear what they want. All eyes are turned to Nefaris, the King's local court Wizard, who is allegedly all seeing. He would surely be able to reveal the perpetrator, for the right price of course.



((and of course, Neferis also has a basket of curious Green Flowers from a far off land. Neferis is responsible for the "impregnation" - but his fraudulent fortune-telling scheme is sure to merit him with a great deal of money.))


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Firebow
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-08-27 03:33 PM


Do want IRL. That's all.



Seriously. Awesome. Weapon.


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The Bone Stitcher
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-09-11 08:06 PM


I'm envisioning something almost mechanical, like out of the Matrix. It's awesomely gory, rediculously over the top,and chillingly frightful, but also AWESOME.



5/5


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Troll Rations
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-10-15 05:59 PM


Solid. Could use a little fleshing out. Maybe the preserved skin of a LIVING troll would be best - after all I doubt the flesh would be doing much regenerating if the troll is flayed after death. I like the mention of alchemy, but it could use a little fleshing out - I want to know more about the process of making it. Aside from a little acid, you didn't say enough about it to quench my curiousity. Could be something good - perhaps I'll come back to it once you extrapolate?


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Sima Ling
NPCs  (Major)   (Religious)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-25 10:04 PM


I for one, like how you mixed eastern, middle eastern, and western influences. Using the latin "Pater" as a priestly title is always a good way to denote a sort of organized religious hierarchy. Using Anubis as a venerable death god, is recognizable by just about anyone who has taken a world history class.



I also like the old idea of a venerable death god, rather than a satanic death-worshipping God, where the clerics give aide and comfort to the relatives of the deceased. It's a refreshing trend away from the typical fantasy view of death worshipping priests from whatever "Temple of doom" is around, who bathe in the blood of their kidnapped sacrifical virgins. 



I like it. 3.5/5

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Chrysalis
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-09-10 01:42 PM


Not enough for a full adventure, in my opinion, but well fleshed out, very detailed and would make for a very interesting side quest. I'm sure a nearby mage would pay good money to get a glimpse at such an interesting phenomenon, or at least a piece of it's stone incubator.


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The Great Gate of Calast
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-17 07:22 PM


I wish I could say something that hasn't been said already. A very good submission I think. I like the big golden eye - I can't help but think of big, bronze clockwork gears turning the inside the gate as numerous locks open and deadbolts slide away to swing wide the doors. Perhaps it's just me, but I feel almost attached to the poor thing, it's almost humanized by it's failure and depression. I can only imagine what a good source of information such a gate might be to the PCs, as it sees everyone who enters the city.


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The Great Gate of Calast
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-06-17 07:58 PM
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The Piecewise Librarian
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
hylandpad's comment on 2011-10-19 09:00 AM


I really like this hand. Sad, indentured and friendless, at the whim of every beck and call of a maniacle sorcerer, waiting to be rescued, A veritable disembodied palm of a damsel in distress!


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