All I have to say echos what has all ready been said. Why would these students attack? If the fire cannot grow, then how can it go beyond the spark-on-wood stage? And so on. A way to fix the how the fire grows would be to have a small spherical stone you put into the fire when it's where you want it. And maybe, to keep it from sustaining forest fires and forges, perhaps give it an area of effect. At least, that's what I would do.
Another comment I would like to make is how it works. Alchemy is the process of creating something without magic, with a completely natural process. I don't see how something without a healthy dose of magic could sustain a fire.
I love this. The writing style was great. It fleshed out this particular tribe of orc well. Everything about it was well written. The one thing that I think would improve it slightly would be orcish combat. After all, you can't have orcs without fighting, and you mention raiding in several places. Do they use ambushes, or just a mass charge? Yes, I understand that you polished off your old notes, but how about adding to them? Go to Comment
Actualy, it doesn't. The orcs could have evolved isolated from the other races, like behind a mountain range or across the ocean. Then their cultures and ethnicity would be wildly different. Go to Comment
Why not simply throw equipment onto the list? The party archer could use a sheaf of arrows the ogres didn't need. The party warrior could use a back up sword in case he loses his club. Even a pile of torches could be a good treasure, especially if the bottom level lacks lighting. Go to Comment
Could it make you beautiful, if you left it instructions of what you wanted to look like? If you could command it, you probably could do something like that. I know you write that it nothing is made beautiful, but with careful instructions, you theoretically could become beautiful. Go to Comment
I would've voted lower, but there's this cat sitting in my lap right now, and he's staring at me with his big blue (with hints of red beneath the benevolent outer layer) eyes, and I just can't help but vote higher. No idea why this is. :)
In all seriousness, Gathrack is a suitable entity in the game world, especially as a pet to the party's lawful good cleric. Or the neutral meat-shield fighter who has lots of influence over the lawful good cleric. Go to Comment
A useful tool. Would it work on paper, or perhaps papyrus? I assume it would, since both are plant-based. So these, if fire wasn't on possible (stealth mission with guard right over there, and you have to destroy the top secret documents here), could be useful for destroying letters and stuff. Go to Comment
I like SE's comment. Especially when considered from the modern Strolenite perspective.
Beyond that, you've shown that thought has gone into this in but a couple of lines, which is solid writing. It might be a little sparse, and lack flavor text, but still good. Showmanship and flair are always excellent skills. Go to Comment
Its a good idea, but little more than that. I'd like to see more details, mainly reasons for him being pusillanimous. As it is, there's really not much to him. So what if there's a random twig-break behind the party? Unless there just so happens to be a massive bear just out of sight, the only thing that would probably happen is that the party would poke around in the bushes, shrug, and leave. Go to Comment
I like how she's useful, but in a limited way. She'll certainly help the party as an early warning beacon for attacks of the undead sort (or help by tracking down pie). Is there a reason that she's alergic to the pie? Is she allergic to the blueberries in the pie, or a certain ingredient within the dough, or what? Go to Comment
Is the snow permenant? That is, will it last until it melts, or will it disappear the next day, leaving no trace of its existence? If it did disappear like that, the farmers would still be happy. Go to Comment