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100 Word Submission
Articles  (Fiction)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-09 05:30 PM

I would love to sit down and pick this, apart disaggree with minor points, suggest a removing of the really esoteric stuff that clogs an already esoteric article, on as you point out a fairly exclusive, forum for a people with a very specific hobby.  I found this article in turn condescending, amusing, refreshing and I had one "well said moment" while reading the Aerith and Bob section. Everything you would expect in an op-ed piece.  All in all, I think this article hits it mark, makes it point and engages the reader.  Well done, I accept your 100-word challenge and thanks for again spurring my interest in this cite.    

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The Red Fortress
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-09 05:48 PM

" there is a city within, piled on top of itself, and a city without hiding in it's shadow"


I hope you enjoyed writing that line as much as I enjoyed reading it. 

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The Glade
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Local)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-09 05:52 PM

Fanboydom is about passing baton.  Role-playing is the purest form of the relay race, if the one handing you the baton got to you with purpose and grace, then your race will have the freedom and confidence that you can only get from a head start.  This one is a good start.  

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Rockytop Freehold
Locations  (Fortification)   (Mountains)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-09 05:54 PM

"famous for what?"

That is about as excited as I could get about this post. 

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Power Fist
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-09 05:09 PM

Doesn't adding a picture make this 1,100 words?

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Power Fist
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-09 05:22 PM

But even limited to a 100 words this feels padded.  I would have focused more the athestics of the item and less on its mechanics. 

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The Invisible Trebuchet
Plots  (Crisis)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-09 05:20 PM

This is great, it reminds me of the adventure hooks at the back of the old roleplaying books from the 80s. This one has got flair.  

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The Invisible Trebuchet
Plots  (Crisis)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-01 06:55 AM
more than once? Go to Comment
Levy Sys Mk III Thaumaflare
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-23 09:04 AM

I like these posts that give depth and details to little items.  Things like this don't make your game or your plot but they make the world richer.  Also the more detail an item has the more a PC can take to manipulating it and problem solving with it. 

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Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-13 09:26 PM
Random Castle History Tables
Locations  (Fortification)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-12-23 10:12 PM

This is a fun write up. I enjoyed making a few castles. 

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Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-03-29 09:45 AM
I enjoy the way this is written, you have a number of narrative elements that bring the concepts to life. I echo Phaidros's comments. Go to Comment
Avatar of Pain
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-06 05:22 PM

I assume from EM's comment that this a warhammer unit with warhammer stats and warhammer considerations regarding functions and abilities.  But where is the fun? Where is second dimension?  I am sure some guys could use it, but there is no story, no detail regarding the nature of its power and no hook that makes it any scarier or cooler than its stats and abilities. 



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Avatar of Pain
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-18 03:21 PM
I feel ya that is why I play battetech with paper tokens and A&A piece. Go to Comment
Gideon's Mercy
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-01-31 06:06 AM

I enjoyed reading this.  An interesting follow up story may be how this dagger behaves when used for killings justified by a slightly different moral code.  How would the dagger respond to honor killings and executions?  


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The Ship of Seven Shores
Items  (Transports)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-03-19 09:35 PM
A lovely laxative item, it keeps the players on track and keeps em moving. I agree with Scas and strolen, super powerful and somewhat displaced from archetypal settings...airship, but still like cheka my inner dork wants one. Thanks for writing this up. Go to Comment
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-02-03 08:59 PM
I think you really nailed this one,

the idea of weapons the opens up dimensional gates even briefly has a lot of potential

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Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-03-12 03:02 PM

fun idea, well described item, nice format excellent execution.  If it were me I'd change the teaser to read only: I SHALL PASS, funny line that one. 

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The Shimmering Veil
Items  (Clothes)   (Villanous)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-24 10:42 PM

Oh those middle east boys and their harems, when will they learn that female sexuality is really dangerous and women should use less magical thicker vei......never mind.  

Could this go in the fantasy fabric codex?  I wonder if really focused and esoteric items should be packaged more as plots than stand alone items?   This seems more like a kick off for an unpleasent or uncomfortable situation then an item that can be used or manipulated closely.  What if  a dude wore it or a Gorgon? Maybe a Gorgon could use this to hit some social events.  



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Olla-Taur The White Fang
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-29 06:26 PM

This one has a classic feel to it, and the lore at the end was a nice Fire and Ice themed gaming entry (  I am not suggesting it was based on this, just reminded me of it.  

However since the main body doesn't have a clear narrator it moves a lot towards a list of system stats  and game mechanics.   Which isn't bad, but it didn't fill me with the same excitement it did others.  

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