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Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-16 10:47 PM
Nice idea, there is a lot left unsaid, about how there would still be a human element to things, in the way of introductions and granting of access to the site. Presenting just the site may confuse some of the more rigid minded people/players that may focus more on the players relationship with site, when really the site is a mean by which the players contact with or learn about their opponents. Yet it keeps the nature of the opponent mysterious, as is common in the speculative fiction genre. It is another lock that has to cracked before you can get to the real threats. Go to Comment
Grandfather Pestilence
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-22 08:43 AM

This is very good, I like the three scenes you have painted in the description of this God or event.  But it also a very ambitious work (to tell short story or relay a fact by presenting the information as myths  and heresay from different sources).   I like everything you done, but when if I use this I will rewrite it give the presentation of this information a stronger central thread.  A over arching narrative to the smaller narratives. 

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D.V. Agina: Modern Rage Mages
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-15 06:13 AM
I was trying to show Dante "storing" up his anger, before calmly leaving to give his talk. I can imagine an RPG setting, were Rage mages would have to rant to recharge their batteries-a built in roleplaying mechanic.

As for politicians, I think you are right rage mages would make awful politicians. Who would vote angry unreasonable men into office?

The United State's current political climate is being dominated by angry ranting men who just use their anger to get more powerful.....the Tea Party may be all Rage Mages... Go to Comment
D.V. Agina: Modern Rage Mages
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-15 08:28 PM
Would he be as angry a man if he didn't go through public school with a name like Dante V. Agina? Go to Comment
Rage Mages
NPCs  (Character Sheet)   (Combative)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-14 08:49 AM

A funny and irreverent look at the upside of anger.....I must expand on it. 

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Rage Mages
NPCs  (Character Sheet)   (Combative)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-14 12:20 PM

I just wrote piece of fan fiction based on the Rage Mages, hope you don't mind, really excellent stuff

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Rod of the Grand Vizier
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 11:33 AM

For a holy item crafted by the members of a theocracy the moral compass of the gods and the relationship of the divine to the item rarely comes into this story.  I dislike the focus on "spells" when discussing divine intervention, but I get the idea behind the item,

"it improves the wizard who wields it but makes the wizard vulnerable to the divine powers of the gods. "  For an item that puts game mechanics first and foremost, it is just okay, not worthy of "fabled place in history"

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Danse Macabre
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 01:25 PM

Again pretty standard stuff, item of great power and evil falls into the wrong hands, there is a red herring and the heros must do battle with the villain wielding the item....but wait all is not as it seems the villain has been altered by the item to become a super villain!!!  A classic really...

But again startibartfast you have done it with style.  Well done. 

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Eye Flies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 01:28 PM

Damn, those are perfect, wish I had em a year ago. 

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Sword of Huran
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 08:40 AM

We get a good idea of the history that person that implemented the the use of the Sword of Huran among the Spellsword Mages wanted to invoke, but we get nothing else.  This another item right up that isn't about the item.   

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The Men of The March
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 09:04 AM

Excellent, this is sweet, it has a varied tone to the write up and a great deal of depth achieved with a conservation of language.  I could see using this as pit stop in Noir-ish style mystery.  The PC may need some knowledge that only a man of the march has and thus have to find him and break his stride at least briefly-maybe wait for eclipse or something.     

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Parasitic Youth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 08:55 AM

Once again we learn that the ticket to immortality is not worth the price of admission.  Indeed the only thing meant to live forever seems to a be repackaging of that old chestnut.    

But it seems to be a novel mechanism, and that is hard to come up with since this story has been told from the angry and scared man-child in Gilgamesh to the ennui ridden vampires (the ones that didn't date high school students). 

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30 Orcish Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-07 02:30 PM
How is that? Go to Comment
30 Orcish Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-23 12:42 AM

Inspired me to write more orc based stuff

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The Troll Leash
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 09:46 PM
"What would stop a human/elf from capturing an orc, and simply forcing/torturing/magically probing him into spilling the secrets of the Troll Leash?"

Got to leave the PCs something to do, but this would make a great RP scene.

Murometz's aspiring mage stands along the wall at the council of mages as they discuss methods for preparing the Regent's Army for battle with the Duke. The job of the pages is three fold learn from example, keep the goblets full and block the drafts. Murometz's young page shivers, rattling the metal tray and metal pitcher in his hands. The noise was louder than he thought and all the mages turn to look at him.


"Why....why....don't you just ask the Orcs how the leash works......."

Hokum stands and draws his arms as if to cast, but stops and a quizzical look crosses his face. The Elven delegation looks at each other sideways and the Arch Mage opens his mouth as if to speak, but instead just nods his head and says nothing. Hokum sits down and says "Very good, thank you" Go to Comment
30 Orc Gifts (for services rendered)
Articles  (Scenario)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 08:44 PM
I get the feeling you rushed this one, a lot of it is "Orc Item" and then you have stuff like "map" and "secret". Those could be from any group, why can't Gnomes or the Jawa's know which mushrooms to eat. I lacks the a true feel of an alien culture. Go to Comment
30 Halfling Holidays
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 03:37 PM
I was inspired by the list of halfling gifts, if you see any word errors please let me know, I would like to hand this out to my group. Go to Comment
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-07 08:40 PM
Then you should lead with that....

This is a very strong idea and we can use this to discuss some basic and detail minded qualities of a good post. I suggest changing the structure of the first paragraph into a more active voice and will clear thesis sentence.
"The Teleportia Citadel is the last bastion of hope in a world over run by the living dead. It is a well designed, well placed fortress that was serendipitously built upon a natural focus mystical energy. It possess a superior defensive position adopt an isolated Mesa, and it has extensive underground caverns filled with facilities and materials."

Or something with more of a hook to it. Also who is writing this, is this a GM describing a gaming tool or do want to write from the perspective of one of your characters. Go to Comment
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-08 06:19 AM
I don't know if it would be "best", but it would make for a more interesting read. Go to Comment
30 Halfling Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 04:00 PM
Really great stuff thanks, your list gives us as much ethnic culture as it does material culture Go to Comment
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