I get the idea, but the write up is really confusing.
"anything you don't want to keep others away from are kept in this chest." I don't think the word don't should be in this sentence.
In the first sentence of the last "paragraph", I think spy should be plural.
This is a good canidate for the 100 word treatment.
Darkman with a bombstick,
The mysterious stranger,
-hunted by a highly trained cladestine military team,
-traveling from town,
-delivering enigmatic one-liners to bartenders
This has been done and done better. The fact the people think he is the last of undead is kind of interesting, but overall no.
I love this, it is funny, complete, well presented and I love the tone in which it was written. Straight forward and without much flourish or hyperbole-I think that adds to the excellent tone of the piece. I did not vote in the zombie quest, but this post makes me wish I had.
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