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axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-19 09:29 PM
This is useful...maybe it would be easier to maintain in the forums. Go to Comment
Amazons and Orcs
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-06-29 05:19 PM
I enjoyed reading this thank you for writing it. It reads like the liner to video game or the summary of some late night movie, and in short it is great lead in for a game with a lot of flexible pieces you could spin into multiple plots.
More of a plot really than a society. Go to Comment
How I Vote
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-06-18 06:06 AM
Why are chitinous space turtles bad science? If on present day earth turtles and reptiles as a whole do not produce chitin does that mean that alien resembling a turtle or a reptile or futuristic animal also similar to a turtle could not produce chitin? Go to Comment
Daggers of Torxes
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-01-06 12:25 PM
Not bad, the daggers create a nice little forced plot hook should a PC be wounded by one. Plus i like things with a story to them. Go to Comment
Non-Euclidean Architecture: Part 1
Systems  (Architectural)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-29 08:22 PM
Perhaps a simple way to mix these concepts into a game grid would be to put players or characters into a space in which light suddenly moves in an extremely non-euclidien path over short distances. The characters would have to quickly adapt to "seeing" something in front of them that is actually to their left, and things that are moving would appear to be moving around them or disappear from vision. Go to Comment
Skarsnik Nil
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-06-06 05:21 PM
Was Guznal Skarsnik the one seeking to learn more about cultures? Was the spear supposed a tool to help him do that?

Does the spear "make fish" since you can use it to catch fish in a pool that would not normally have any or do you just wish to keep that vague and mystical. Vague is fine, but if that is the case then you may wish to remove the point about it limiting the the fisherman to five fish per "use". Because what counts as a fishing trip? And if it manifests fish from nothing, than what if the fear of over fishing.

I think you want this write up and the item to be means by which we can get a side long veiw of goblin culture. I like that idea, but I don't think this has succeeded. If you don't want this to be a novel window in the goblin way of life then try taking this up with the 100 word challenge. Go to Comment
7 Things I've Learned
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-08 10:50 PM
Well said Go to Comment
The Seating of the Stuffy Dinner Party Guests
Dungeons  (Any)   (Puzzles)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-06-02 03:33 AM
I actually used a dinner party logic problem in game......6 years ago...damn...

anyway one player really loved it, two players didn't mind it, one player thought it was like homework. I love writing it and I have enjoyed Draco's write ups. Go to Comment
Gaming on a Budget
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-05-31 06:03 AM
Kate Manchester, Kimberly Shay and Dionysus....has anyone seen these three together, could they be the same person? Go to Comment
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-05-31 06:22 AM
I think we should leave this one up, it speaks the reply is more telling than others. Go to Comment
The Truth about Dragons
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-05-31 06:27 AM
Is this some form of performance art?
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Online Roleplaying
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-05-31 06:00 AM
Wow, stolen and not well is the wounded warrior Dionysus, Kimberly Shay? Has somebody emailed Kimberly Shay Go to Comment
Justice Served
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-05-31 06:51 AM
Indeed! The paste feature does work!
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Death of a King
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-05-31 06:09 AM
Honestly, I wonder if this is some sort of test of citadel community. A new user appears with an earnest line about being a writer and then posts work seemingly from a bunch of other writers and focuses much on the feedback. Are they checking to see what goes into a vote? Are they picking stuff written by rivals? Or this is just straight theft to achieve some on-line affirmation? On-line plagarization for no profit or real word gain....what is the point? Further study is warranted.

But yeah..... CHALLENGE Go to Comment
Lady Evica
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Religious)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-03 04:40 PM
This is a great idea, a demi-goddess the converts to another religion! Her reasons for converting to faith are all rooted in vanity and all her kindness is tempered by pathological narcissism. Great stuff for 3rd and 4th generation role-playing games. It is held back by its blunt prose, excessive "I am so clever" winking at the reader stuff, an emphasis on combat or physical encounters over characters and oh so many tangents. It is like you couldn't find your voice in this one.
But over all great idea, lots of fun details, I really like the plots as well, just a ton of possibilities. Go to Comment
T/S Bomb
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-05-19 08:27 AM
Cute, you paint a nice scene of the battle, as always suggestive of more, and there are some fun phrases dropped in. Go to Comment
Replacing A Traitor.
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-05 10:02 PM
I haven’t finished this yet, and I am a little off put by the violent sex stuff. I will wait until I am done to decide if this is just self-indulgent pornography or something of a real story. 
I do agree with Dossta that if this is just a justification for misogynistic fantasy than it doesn’t belong here. And I do think that the difference between a narrative that is about sex and narrative that exploits and sensationalizes sex can be defined. But graphic sex alone or overt sexual content is not reason enough to dismiss something. I think a challenge should be pointed and articulated. 
I can think of several books that are about sex, “Son and Lovers” (D.H. Lawerence), “Women” (Charles Bukowski) and to a lesser extent “Still Life with Woodpecker” (Tim Robbins) that are not pornography. In the realm of Sci-fi/fantasy the steamy sex scene has its place. For example in the novel “Altered Carbon” (Richard K. Morgan) there is very graphic description of sexual encounter between women who genetically engineered to secret drugs from her mucus membranes, the hero and the A.I. that runs the hotel they are staying at. I bring up this case because much of the sci-fi emersion was brought through in that sex scene, and we see how the technology of the time changed sex. I would bring up George R.R. Martin, but sometimes (particularly in the last book) I think he does cross the line into really gratuitous sexual content. In the book “Outlander” Diane Gabaldon the heroine learns that violence gets into every part of medieval Scottish society including sex and marriage. I think the use of that sexual content to communicate a story or a setting should be addressed and we should also assess whether that content is respectful to the subject or whether it is exploitive and clearly insensitive enough to be widely insulting.
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Replacing A Traitor.
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-03-14 06:06 AM
I finally finished is not an easy read. The prose is blunt and repetitive. But much the story is dedicated to graphic and unrealistic sexual scenarios. There are some nice details about a steam punk world, but the literal message of the story...the one championed by the narrator is that the evil self centered pragmatism of the queen is justified. There are some hints that the brainwashed main character knows things are wrong, but there is little she can do because the sexual spell she is under.

Towards the later chapter errors in word use become more frequent.

I don't know if this "belongs here" or not but a lot of the content is detailed sexual encounters that don't move the plot along. I get that the main character's seduction is kind of the plot, but do you need all the details about where fingers are going and such? I'd say much of this is pornography. Go to Comment
Deepbend Maximum Security Prison
Locations  (Fortification)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2018-04-06 08:18 PM
this is well presented and clear, it could use a little personality, maybe some history, notable innimates, a couple of vignettes or something more Go to Comment
Familiar Elementals
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-03-21 10:05 PM
I really like this one, I can't believe nobody thought of it before. A simple concise write up. Go to Comment
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War of the Roses as a campaign plot. Two noble lines converge somehow, each line thinks it has the rightful claim to the throne. Deciding this long ago was handled by some divine intervention, requiring both houses to come together at some point. They aren't so willing to get together this time. Civil war, or a new king?

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