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Sir Frederick Herman Welker
NPCs  (Character Sheet)   (Combative)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-10-13 03:44 PM


I agree with Dossta you get a good view of the characters surface, but there is not enough of the deeper stuff.  You learn nothing intimate about the character that makes you think you know that guy any better than the guy standing next to him. I think if you are writing this for a player the character has to have tinge of personality.  We get that he is arrogant, distant and emotionally dissconnected, but is there something more to him.  I am sure you had some other details in mind about this guy aside from his favorite colors. 


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30 Talking Magical Weapons
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-10-04 06:33 AM


 As a list the idea comes across as silly, obvious and heavy handed. The word play and alliteration are cute.  Yet I still think this could be a useful addition to a GM binder, unless the players are presented with a catalogue of colourful weapons the nature of these items would become apparent over time, and thus imbued with more subtlety.  But again you may have silly or magic heavy campaigns or more "classic"  juvenile  games in which each players carrys a pallet of legendary weapons with titles such as knasty knife or leacherous lance. 


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Dame Michell Indira Blake
NPCs  (Character Sheet)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-10-10 07:40 AM


 



I agree with Echo, a PC write up section could be fun and useful. I have a run a lot of games with pre-gen character concepts for the players to choose from. And more mainstream role-playing (i.e. Solve the murder parties) generally work from pre-gen character system. So I think Echo has made a good call here.



 



As I read this I thought the character seemed immediately familiar and thus accessible.  Of course that is what you get with genre fiction, is derivative character and plots.  I am not a literary scholar but I would bet that the scholars have at least agreed that one of the signatures or inventions of gothic/Victorian literature was the empowered yet elegant woman.  (Not liberated mind you, but at least empowered) It would be interesting the chart the evolution of this archetype.  In that same vein I suggest adding the character a habitual correspondence with a confidant of some sort: a sister or aunt.  A player needs to find a voice, and in a character with such manner and reserve the spoken lines are only going to be the surface of a much deeper thought process.   She needs an audience for inner thoughts, it could be a sister or an aunt or in this case even a spirit or bound demon.



 



For example when the Dame meets the other members of her team say the smarmy South American hypnotist, the “savage” tracker from Greenland, and the young disheveled French expert on “wireless” electricity, it would give the player something to latch on to if instead of just thinking of the Dame’s opinion try to imagine how the Dame would describe these characters to her sister. 


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The Unhinged Prince
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Political)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-10-16 11:25 PM


I thought the intro story was fantastic, it was a little inaccessable written as transcript on sound rather than a discription of sound and at time confusing, but I think that was part of its strength.  For the often banal and direct world of roleplaying, most creative risks in write up of support piece such as the intro rarely play off.  I think it worked in this case. 



 



Running this character as NPC could also present quite a challenge.  In roleplaying it is difficult as a PC or a GM running an NPC to play a character with a great deal of internal dialog or conflict.  But the details you provide would be a great aid in trying to run such a character.  Roleplaying is already surreal, we you bring in more surreal stuff into you threaten to tip the balance away from  something the whole group can hold on to.  But the amount of details you have the character in this post would be very help in bringing such as unhinged character into the game.  the irony is that it easier to bring vague and ephemerial stuff into the game when you have the details of the vague and ephemerial stuff down pat. 


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The Door of Heaven
Dungeons  (Underground)   (Traps)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-02 06:27 AM
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Mercurial Chain Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-09-01 04:47 PM


Great useable item, concisely written with a clear explaination. Reminds of the villian's sword in "The Brotherhood the Wovles"


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Classified Genetic Material
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-08-25 07:45 AM


In one now famous shadowrun campaign from the 90s, when the anti-heros reach the room with the CGM, they find a thousand pound cow.  The cow is the vehicle for the CGM and they have to lead the cow through firefights and make stealth escapes with cooperative thousand bound beast that can neither scale walls or fit in a standard size automobile.  I am more or less with Hylandpad on this, if this is a submission on McGuffins or sci-fi hand waiving then it could use some more build up in those areas.  There is odd mix of specific and generalities in this that negates much of the value.  This could be interesting lead into to a discussion on these topics. . .



 



One thing we fanboy/rpg types have in common is that we often don't enjoy media for the content alone, but rather we see the speculative fiction, high concept and high design ideas as jumping off point for own ideas.  (This isn't just me, there is a whole doctoral dissertation written around that very thesis).  Thus I could see this being enjoyed as a story primer.  But as actual tool for direct use in gaming, it doesn't offer much, at least nothing not already covered in Cobra's quest to make Serpentor, the TMNT origin story, 12 monkeys, and another of other stories.    


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NPC Characteristics
NPCs  (Extras)   (Artistic/Performance)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-08-10 08:49 AM


Damn useful list, I agree with Dossta's idea about sub lists.  But you have already done the hard part for us typing all of these out. Thanks


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NPC Characteristics
NPCs  (Extras)   (Artistic/Performance)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-08-15 04:28 PM


The headings are nice, so game systems publish whole books of character generation tables (Traveller...I am looking at you).  These tables must fill some innate need gamers have to let dice rolls describe the universe. 


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Law of the Hammer
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-29 08:47 AM

Strolen, am sure these aren't fun things to post and that people must look to you full fill a role that you didn't ask for or imagine when you started this site.  Thanks, seriously, for stepping up and asking for a higher standard of the site that carries your name. I

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The Ten-Second Story
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-28 07:13 PM


I thought this was good and it always nice to read an idea I am on board with, but I more on board with Scrasamax on this one in expecting some gimmick, trick it or meat to it.(as soon he finds out I am board he will be swimming to the next port).  Yet you make a good point and give us a few examples on how to implement that point.  


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The Badger Patch
Locations  (Area)   (Forest/ Jungle)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-13 11:16 AM
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Silveressa's Voting Practices
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-07-28 02:37 PM


BANG!



IRONY,



the rating system described above  evaluates subs based on their ability to add fresh material to genre items and their usefulness in relation to the game.  



Thus the literal message of this sub is that a sub that expands the gaming universe of the reader is a good sub.  Yet this sub does not do this, it dives right into the meta content of this website.  



For a post that is all about the author, it lacks self awareness.   A self aware aside sometimes distracts from posts that are pieces of fiction or ones that are trying to make a point, but this post is all about you. It doesn't even have an argument or a purpose. It is already self aware, no need to cut corners.



Perhaps Pieh was commenting on when said it may be effecting his vote.  Maybe this is so apparent to everyone that pointing it out just seemed banal, but if so I didn't catch an intended irony in anyones' response.


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Silveressa's Voting Practices
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-07-29 08:41 AM
Did you down vote my comment? Your intention did not elude me and you should know that. I believe that you are upset by comment and being condescending and dismissive. Will you own that?

I am saying that the literal message of your post regarding the value of posts and how that system would rate this post smacks of irony. I think it is funny. I didn't speak to the value of this post, but I hoped my comment might give you something reflect on and to consider even more why you vote the way you do. Are you saying that you don't see your post as ironic?

As your question, I don't remember Mourngrym's similar sub, but if I had to pick a favorite meta-sub it would cheka's 30 ways to be a good strolenite. And in that case I liked it more for its organization and pastoral qualities. Yet its does get at some of the mores of the website, which I would have found useful years ago. But was it Mourngrym that said "if you read something comment on it." Go to Comment
The Leech Cloth, or The Cloth of Souls
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-03-03 06:39 PM


I am shocked: this is really heads and shoulders better than most of the RPG stuff I have ever read.  The item is what it is and so what, as Lagantha might say, but the prose just flows so easily and your tone is so conversational that it draws us in.  A good read.



I would like to link this to the fantasy fabrics codex if you don't mind. 


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The Philadelphia Shipyards
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-03-02 06:21 AM


There is just so much good to say about this one, ships are already romantic things and very personal things.  I have been working on a ship scrap yard like the ones in Alang India.  But after reading this I realize what I had left out.  Each of these ships could be post, the plots could be a post but instead you give this whole thing all intertwined.  



 



 



 



http://docspace.ca/film/Shipbreakers


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The Philadelphia Shipyards
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-03-03 09:24 PM


 



The Golitsyn (SECRET SUNKEN STEAM SHIP FROM CZARIST RUSSIA!) (try saying that three times)



In 1863, during the height of the American Civil War the Russian Atlantic and Pacific Fleets wintered in the Union Ports on the North America.  Like all things Russian, the gesture was significant but the exact meaning was enigmatic.  The Lincoln administration spun it as a sign of support for the Union cause and as counter weight to the threat of French and English intervention on the Confederate behalf.  Others have suggested that Russia believed itself to be on the brink of war with England and France over the question of Polish sovereignty and wanted to prevent their fleets from becoming ice bound or blockaded. While most of the Russian Atlantic fleet laid anchor in New York, one ship, the Steam frigate Aleksandr Mikhailovich Golitsyn, arrived in Philadelphia. Whether the Golitsyn had an official mission to Philadelphia or was “separated” from the fleet during the crossing will never be known.  Confederate spies had learned of the Golistyn’s approach and decided not to let Russian influence go uncontested.  Considering what the Golitsyn was carrying it is also possible and likely that other parties had found a way to influence the Confederate agents towards their own end.



The day after he (According to the author's memory of Tom Clancy novels, Russian ships are always male) set anchor, Confederate saboteurs boarded and blew the boiler on the Golitsyn.  The ship, most of her crew and all of her cargo sank in less than a quarter hour.  The Golitsyn’s presence and its sinking was kept a secret and never officially acknowledged by either the Union government or the Russian Admiralty. The Lincoln administration did not wish to advertise the success Confederate saboteurs.  The Russian Admiralty was not truly interested or capable of becoming involved in an American Civil War and did not wish to deal with the consequences of acknowledging an isolated act of aggression against their forces by the Confederacy. Today the half buried wreckage of the Golitsyn sits under the decaying remains of the Philadelphia Shipyard’s “younger” retirees.  But thanks to his cargo, the Golitsyn has not entirely been forgotten.



In the 1800s pogroms against Jews in Russia and Eastern Europe had been on the rise.  Immigration of Eastern European Jews to the United States had also been on the rise. The USA of the 1860s presented an interesting problem for the Jews, true there had been a rise of anti-Semitism manifested by General Order Number 11 and wide spread scapegoating of their communities all over the North.  But there was also hope, Lincoln had over turned Order Number 11, they allowed Jewish Chaplains into the military and there was always the promise of the American Constitution that a man was free to have his religion. It seemed clear that even after centuries of living side by side the Russian masses were never going to accept Jews as true countrymen.  It was decided that one of greatest treasure of the Eastern European Jewish Communities would be smuggled out of Europe and into the United States.  The captain of the Golitsyn agreed to carry the treasure to the United States and this treasure is still with the Golitsyn’s wreckage.



The Golitsyn was carrying the Golem.  After the Golem’s creation in Prague it was moved secretly around Europe, staying mostly dormant (met), only occasionally be reanimated to protect communities but he was always a power too great to be wielded by flawed mortal men (maybe if they had let women study…).  If the Golem is brought up from the wreckage he can be animated by changing the inscription on his head from met to emet.  After that he will serve to protect his master and his family from any perceived threats. Let us hope the calligrapher speaks Hebrew.



  There was also a survivor of the Golitsyn, a Russian-Jew, who hid his identity and settled in Philadelphia. His family has quietly passed the story of the Golitsyn and the Golem down for generations.  Plus there are still rumors (in circles that gossip about Jewish mysticism) that the Golem was smuggled to Philadelphia in the 1860s, but these rumors have forgotten the Golitsyn.



There is also another connection to present time in the form of an hourglass.  The Golitsyn still used watch hourglasses and when the boiler blew the mid-shipman in command of the deck watched his life and the sands of the watch hourglass drain the simultaneously.  That glass survives to this day and still has air in it. If it ever comes free from the wood and rot binding it, the hourglass will float to the surface.  The Mid-shipman’s spirit or psionic shadow is linked to the glass. Whoever, finds it will be haunted until at least some piece (the hour glass counts) of the Mid-shipman and his young lover (who was also a sailor on the ship) are brought up and returned to their home city of Perm (third class mail would be fine).  

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The Philadelphia Shipyards
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-16 04:51 PM
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The Leech and the Mud-Puddle
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-28 09:43 PM
I really enjoyed that little folk tail. Go to Comment
Ether and Ethereal Magicks
Systems  (Mystical)   (Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-21 11:04 AM
This is great, it is concise, consistent in tone, complete, well paced and interesting. Go to Comment
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