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Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-08 08:08 PM
or spell seibertron with a C Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-11 09:31 PM
Do you think in the cosmic era the Seibertronians hold sensitivity forum where they say stuff like "I am not a Transformer, I am not a Terminator, I am not a computer, or Soong Android but I AM A PERSON DAMN IT!!!" Go to Comment
CIC Cryodetention Center 19
Locations  (Fortification)   (Underground)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-09 08:58 PM

This is well done, a nice read with a constant tone that suggests an informative handout. I like the asides that suggests things about the culture of the prison's work force. Go to Comment
Settings of the Cosmic Era
Locations  (Other)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-12 04:22 PM
This fantasticly excuted a world view of the creative mind at work. I love the setting visual, theme mood, format. Go to Comment
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-08 06:35 PM
This is perfect. You had an idea that is novel as far I know: cat book, you wrote a character of minor depth and sympathy (the cat book lady), you gave a slde long view of a society and a world....really really perfect. Go to Comment
Holoke Carter
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Domestic/ Craft)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-06 05:30 PM
Of all things of yours that I have a read and remember reading this may be the best them. I like how you left certain things unsaid, the fact that her adult life is centered around revenge fantasies focused on her mother. The arc of her snake formation also follows a story of the coping mechanisms associated with emotional abuse. There are also some dark and disturbing tagents in this, that speak very little to the story of the piece (and there is a nice story) but tell us much about the character.

I think you could tighten up a few points (but again minor stuff sir), for example during her first transformation you don't need to tell us she is rattlesnake in the last line. That banal conclusion takes away from an effective and visual paragraph.

Thank you sir, Go to Comment
Holoke Carter
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Domestic/ Craft)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-06 07:04 PM
already read it three times today Go to Comment
Holoke Carter
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Domestic/ Craft)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-08 10:53 PM
Soul Gazing
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-09 09:54 PM
a nice at bat! Go to Comment
HAS Endeavor
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (Area)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-01-08 09:07 PM
I was amused, nicely written, I enjoyed it. Go to Comment
UH-57 Whippoorwill
Items  (Transports)   (Non-Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-06 12:15 PM
This makes me we want to play with it. I am interested, cause I am shameless dork, in seeing your in game stats for this item. Go to Comment
The River of Sorrow
Systems  (Mystical)   (Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-12 03:21 PM
Nice one, well executed, I like the shifting tone and use the line you have walked between specific and mystic. Go to Comment
The Maze and the Labyrinth
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-13 04:46 PM
huh, well I will be, did not know that.
I'd be curious to get a poll of the gamers to see how many gaming groups actually enjoy solving mazes. Go to Comment
Not Sure What To Do?
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-12 08:43 AM
This a very positive and encouraging advice sub! Go to Comment
Kyle DiGlado
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-09-23 12:46 PM
This land solidly in my favorite genre, Kyle would be a could opponent for a noir anti-hero or love-hate counter part for superhero themed vigilante. I find it interesting that as cynical as he is he still follows politics. Which most likely confirms his cynicism, but following closely suggests he either develops and feeds of his disillusionment or he hasn't given up hope. Go to Comment
Amerikka Command
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-10 11:04 AM
This is the best retelling of the source material for the cosmic era I have yet read. It is damn shame something like this gets less respect than list of 30 thing we already know. This genuinely subversive and clever. My only compliant was the reference to mostly white males. Is race as it was defined in the 1980s still really an issue in the cosmic era? If so what does "white" mean in that time. If you wanted to communicate something about the ethnic nature of a group, white males might something when discussing a present day group. but I don't know what it means in the cosmic era. Or does AC want to bring back old school racism and sexism as well? Go to Comment
Amerikka Command
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (World Wide)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-10 04:53 PM
Good answer, it just re affirms in my mind that there is a lot here above and beyond a cobra reboot. I love smart satire, thanks for this Go to Comment
The Hellephant
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-08 09:57 PM
I too like the way it reproduces.
But something that ravages an already ravaged wasteland really does not carry the same threat of destruction as something that comes out to disrupt the hubris of peace and prosperity. The real story would start when the hellebabies make land fall in Sweden or some other country that sat out the war. I like the idea, but this doesn't seem to be the whole story. Go to Comment
Chimera Prototype Mk-XXIII
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-08 10:05 PM
"Put that in you pipe and smoke it, John Galt!"

I love the conflict origin of this one, that this is channels the 99% rage and the conflicts behind wealth distribution. If you were to add more to this sub, I would tell more the chimera's story rather than to develop the physics of the chimera. Though I do like Omega Draco's ideas.

The teaser was awesome. Go to Comment
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