Do you think in the cosmic era the Seibertronians hold sensitivity forum where they say stuff like "I am not a Transformer, I am not a Terminator, I am not a computer, or Soong Android but I AM A PERSON DAMN IT!!!" Go to Comment
This is perfect. You had an idea that is novel as far I know: cat book, you wrote a character of minor depth and sympathy (the cat book lady), you gave a slde long view of a society and a world....really really perfect. Go to Comment
Of all things of yours that I have a read and remember reading this may be the best them. I like how you left certain things unsaid, the fact that her adult life is centered around revenge fantasies focused on her mother. The arc of her snake formation also follows a story of the coping mechanisms associated with emotional abuse. There are also some dark and disturbing tagents in this, that speak very little to the story of the piece (and there is a nice story) but tell us much about the character.
I think you could tighten up a few points (but again minor stuff sir), for example during her first transformation you don't need to tell us she is rattlesnake in the last line. That banal conclusion takes away from an effective and visual paragraph.
This land solidly in my favorite genre, Kyle would be a could opponent for a noir anti-hero or love-hate counter part for superhero themed vigilante. I find it interesting that as cynical as he is he still follows politics. Which most likely confirms his cynicism, but following closely suggests he either develops and feeds of his disillusionment or he hasn't given up hope. Go to Comment
This is the best retelling of the source material for the cosmic era I have yet read. It is damn shame something like this gets less respect than list of 30 thing we already know. This genuinely subversive and clever. My only compliant was the reference to mostly white males. Is race as it was defined in the 1980s still really an issue in the cosmic era? If so what does "white" mean in that time. If you wanted to communicate something about the ethnic nature of a group, white males might something when discussing a present day group. but I don't know what it means in the cosmic era. Or does AC want to bring back old school racism and sexism as well? Go to Comment
I too like the way it reproduces.
But something that ravages an already ravaged wasteland really does not carry the same threat of destruction as something that comes out to disrupt the hubris of peace and prosperity. The real story would start when the hellebabies make land fall in Sweden or some other country that sat out the war. I like the idea, but this doesn't seem to be the whole story. Go to Comment
I love the conflict origin of this one, that this is channels the 99% rage and the conflicts behind wealth distribution. If you were to add more to this sub, I would tell more the chimera's story rather than to develop the physics of the chimera. Though I do like Omega Draco's ideas.