Paragraph one and two provide us with the authors view of prison and punishment without discussing law. Being that the prison is not going to be a major part of the story do we need this brief and unconcluded pontification of institutional punishment as a function of a complex society. Do we need this to understand the gaols, is the teaser text not enough?Go to Comment
Well no flies on you....just maggots.
I am with mystic and Mourn this is a surprisingly varied and creative list. If I were to write it I would shoot for a greater consistency of tone and perspective. You seem to jump back and forth between the vague verisimilitude of in-game entries and the hard facts presented with a mind towards narrative wiggle room that defines RPG specific content. A comparison of Numbers 12 and 13 is good example of how this write-up lacks a constant tone or perspective.
Still a “fun” bunch of maggots.
This is great, I love shadowrun (hate the system love the setting) and I thank you for opening up the gates of shadowrun specific content. But also Casa de Vulva, this kind of silly minutia is just the sort thing gets the game table rolling. Well played.
I like the tone and I like the way this is written. You present the piece as rumor and heresay about rumors and heresay...so you have achieved a mysterious tone. But beyond on that this offers very little in the way of story.
You say you have stories "Jaroth may take the form of a rogue military general drawing artillery power from a new-found source, or a master thief who's grown weary of picking through the belongings of wealthy humans. He may, in fact, be an avatar or high-ranking cleric of some dragon god, exacting vengeance for some misdeed; or a tormented land baron, cursed to be hunted mercilessly for all time (alternatively, the dragon could be the one who's cursed, forever bound to frustratedly hunt Jaroth, a construct specifically designed to perpetually evade pursuit)."
But then you don't tell us the stories. Yes we could fill in the details ourselves, but then why bother writing this at all?