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Normandy Class
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-05-27 11:36 AM
I don't think I have, at least not enough to have that reference mean anything to me. But are you suggesting that this piece of prose is modeled on the scripts and structure of TV shows? If this did have an accompanying series of images and videos I would certainly see the text differently. Anyway, I got interrupted when commenting on this on Thursday. I do like the little vignette about how the UAC won the bid. That kind of reminds me of the old battle tech readouts. And there is a bit of world building in here. Go to Comment
Liathghorm Salmon, or the Salmon of Knowledge
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 11:57 PM
So what's the range of knowledge sbsorbtion?

This is a fun idea, subtle but dramatic. Go to Comment
Liathghorm Salmon, or the Salmon of Knowledge
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 11:57 PM
And a vote Go to Comment
Selan, the Travellers
Society/ Organizations  (Travelers)   (Trans World)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 10:05 PM
Nice one, I'd be interested to see more system/world specific posts like this one. Go to Comment
Billy Feldsham
NPCs  (Minor)   (Domestic/ Craft)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-02 08:50 PM
Good one, I like rambling informal voice you used, it gave the prose some energy and help set a "none too serious" tone for the piece. This guys could be a fun NPC for your PC detectives to lean on occasionally, but this write up could also be the first step for an interesting player character in a modern detective story, super game or light-horror game. Go to Comment
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-18 02:32 PM

I loved this, I'd been hoping you'd write one these personal first person stories of the cosmic era for some time. The above story, more than anything else, puts a pin in the CE for me. If I may pull out one more positive note, I like the way you drew the line out of our current media obsessed and TV socialized culture to your own brave new world. The difference between entertainment reality and reality becomes blurred. Instead of emulating the callow emotions, comic timing and melo-drama of sitcoms, with the help of tech support and directed group think the archo citizens become the sitcom. I've always known the narcissistic hyperbolic emo drama queens would bring us down.

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Triple Chaos, The Stolen World
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Mountains)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-19 09:53 AM
The part about the Rat hanging everybody upside down made me smile. Go to Comment
Tannia Castle-the Outer Limits
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-16 10:15 PM
I with Max in as much as I also feel that this sub is not yet fully realized. It borders on greatness. This is an epic city and castle (miles between the three rings of walls...this is like Constantinople). And what you have here is still interesting, fun and discussion worthy. The public tombs are really cool. I am tempted to go try and jam out a fan-boy post right now.

Here are my suggestions for enrichment.

Split up the bullet point about the plantations into two bullet points. Do one about the plantations, what do they grow, where are the located (are they between the walls), how do they work into the local geography. Do another bullet point about slavery.

Drop the bullet point about Tannia city, because you don't need to tell us there is no information.

Try a couple of block quotes describing discrete scenes from the city (like Scras does in his posts these days)

describe the market more, maybe with an emphasis on geography Go to Comment
Pennsylvannia 'Penny' Brown
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-13 11:17 PM
I like what you have done with Penny here, raised by robots and now hunts robots, she could emotional center of a whole multi-level campaign and would make an interesting frenemy for group of merc types. It is a shame you weren't writing inspector gadget, I would have enjoyed it more. Go to Comment
Avacyia, Bishop of Time, The Stolen World
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Area)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 10:18 PM
What if you assume all the game logic is true and recognized in your world. Everyone is aware of levels, the disproportionally large amount of capital buried under ground, the numerous conspiracies to rule the world which have a genius chance of success, and the 1in20 odds at which things happen. Have all your in fiction characters aware of this, what would that world look like?

This is fun bit of game setup. I like things with doctrines, orders and such. Makes roleplaying easy when you give the character explicit instructions on how to act and why they are doing it.
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Adventuring Butlers of The Sundered Worlds
Systems  (Technical/ Mechanical)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-08 09:32 PM
This is fun idea, I feel like you channeled you inner Cheka Man when writing this one. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-14 09:06 AM
This has an old school feel to it, made me think of cheaply bound books, loose leave paper, pencil shaving and lightless basements alight with the rattling of dice. I appreciate the straight forward tone you kept consitent through out and in a campaign or story these unfriendly folk with strong vices and a penchant for hiring mercs are perfect encounter and plot device fodder. Go to Comment
30 Mountain Encounters
Locations  (Continent)   (Mountains)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-15 06:29 PM
I enjoyed reading this, I think I have personally used at least half of these in my young gaming days. Go to Comment
Dolen Luth
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-08 09:39 PM
No bad for item that serves games mechanics first and foremost, as a wise Strolenite once wrote"from every uber saga and god killing sword we (the citadel) need ten of these ready to use items" Go to Comment
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Sentient)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-05 07:28 AM
This is a lovely piece of world building, I like the mix of straight talking discussion and in world voice. This post did a lot to paint the cosmic era as vivid, layered and living world inhabited by real people.
Do they have show rooms for these or trial agreements? A Viagra mod? Go to Comment
Mech Bazooka
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-10 06:46 AM
I like the idea of mechs picking up and then discarding weapons, plus a more flexible weapons profile is better for gaming, this does both those things Go to Comment
7 Blades of the Ocean
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-04 07:23 PM
This was fun, I like that you get a glimpse of merpeople culture and history, the weapons have nice, classic six stats, d20 feel to em Go to Comment
7 Blades of the Ocean
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-04 07:26 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Blind Spot
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 10:22 PM
This was the most commented on story submitted for the second ePub. Everyone agreed it was a solid story but lacking in emotional development, detail and an ending deserving of all the build up. I think you got a lot of good feedback on this one. Go to Comment
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 10:27 PM
This a well written little story, clear and very quick and efficient on the character development. Go to Comment
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