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Doppelganger Egg
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-02 08:41 PM
Good one. The Greater Doppelganger egg presents some interesting social, psychological and neurological problems. If you have all the memories of angry bitter judgemental person, but the personality of a logical happy individual how will you behave? You know the kind of stuff older roleplayers like to play with...

On a meta level could you use the True Doppleganger egg as a save point in Game. If your PCs are dedicated enough, they could make this happen once you enter it into the game world.

"Okay, get your eggs out and touch them before we raid the inner sanctum of Donald the Golden Wind Dragon."
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Mobile Mine
Items  (Other)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-04 05:51 PM
"If that's Olham, then I must be"

At some point we are just have to take for granted that any given sci-fi trope is present in the cosmic era.

Some things to do with this that I have seen in the past and thought where fun

The bomb droid has a 'trigger phrase' that when that phrase is heard the droid explodes. See the line from the P.k. Dick story above.

The Main character/s have to try and talk the bomb into not exploding.

I think this would be fun to play s character that is the bomb. The droid was given a eleborate personality and adaptive intelligence but then for some reason the target was removed. Is there a point to life besides blowing up? Go to Comment
Mobile Mine
Items  (Other)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-05 09:00 AM
I can see that conversation happening,

General to Engineer: "Why did you make Re.alistic D.eterrent D.elivery S.ystem (called ReDDS for short) responsive to alcohol?"

Engineer to General: "I just feel more comfortable working with them after they have had a few drinks." Go to Comment
The History of Humanity in Space
Plots  (Event)   (Multi-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-27 09:22 PM

Solid bit of work, and I like the approach you are taking: lay out the logic of the setting and then put out the details. I think many people work the other way . They start with the glowing axes, the bad guy in pink spandex and the hyper intelligent shades of blue and work backwards to justify the existence of these things.

I too have been using the citadel to work on a galactic sized human civilization. But while there is some overlap, what these ideas and your style of writing reminds me off is Scrasamax and his Cosmic Era setting. His stuff is fairly Earthbound and relatively near future but you should check it out. There might be some overlaps you can exploit and adapt into your setting.

But you asked for feedback

Some things to think about:

How are you can to manage the deep space travel?

What type of tone (i.e. Grimdark, Macho-adventure, Cherry flavored space Opera) do you want to set? *

Who are the five most interesting people in your universe?

Are you bringing characters straight out of mythology like Zeus, Oden, Hercules and/or Shiva?

Pro-tip: If you are looking for lots of feedback and interaction about this, start a forum thread, the comments section can become unweildly.

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axlerowes's comment on 2017-04-08 11:39 AM
I thought this was pretty good, never played magic, but I can appreciate what you did with the setting Go to Comment
7 Mermaids
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-09 10:28 PM

1- I don't know why but "Sporty" really won me over, I chuckled, nice

2-Sea foam baby, Sea Foam

3-have very little mermaid specific stuff about her, I don't want to put all merpeople in the same wet box, but this could be any princess.

4-I am tempted to say build on this, but the concept is communicated pretty clearly

5-that is terrible, but it is an interesting back story, Maybe she hangs on! Learns the language, gains some confidences, starts playing people off each other, and over time her innocent and honest attempts at survival turn to ruthless bitter ambition. Next time those fisherman come to town they find a welcome that is all too warm. Because our little landlocked mermaid is now running that brothel and the gangs of thugs it attracts. She is jabba the hut with seashell bra and a purpose: to net those that netted her.

6-Garrison Keller? Seriously have seen pictures of that dude....half carp at least

7-Gamers love hoarders.

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7 Mermaids
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-09 10:28 PM
what inspired this recent mer-person direction? Go to Comment
Normandy Class
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-05-25 07:52 PM
Say what?
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Normandy Class
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-05-25 08:21 PM
Pretty scattered, could use more descriptions and info focuses on personal interactions with the ship rather than military historical and economical stuff. Go to Comment
Normandy Class
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-05-27 11:36 AM
I don't think I have, at least not enough to have that reference mean anything to me. But are you suggesting that this piece of prose is modeled on the scripts and structure of TV shows? If this did have an accompanying series of images and videos I would certainly see the text differently. Anyway, I got interrupted when commenting on this on Thursday. I do like the little vignette about how the UAC won the bid. That kind of reminds me of the old battle tech readouts. And there is a bit of world building in here. Go to Comment
Liathghorm Salmon, or the Salmon of Knowledge
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 11:57 PM
So what's the range of knowledge sbsorbtion?

This is a fun idea, subtle but dramatic. Go to Comment
Liathghorm Salmon, or the Salmon of Knowledge
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 11:57 PM
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Selan, the Travellers
Society/ Organizations  (Travelers)   (Trans World)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 10:05 PM
Nice one, I'd be interested to see more system/world specific posts like this one. Go to Comment
Billy Feldsham
NPCs  (Minor)   (Domestic/ Craft)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-02 08:50 PM
Good one, I like rambling informal voice you used, it gave the prose some energy and help set a "none too serious" tone for the piece. This guys could be a fun NPC for your PC detectives to lean on occasionally, but this write up could also be the first step for an interesting player character in a modern detective story, super game or light-horror game. Go to Comment
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-18 02:32 PM

I loved this, I'd been hoping you'd write one these personal first person stories of the cosmic era for some time. The above story, more than anything else, puts a pin in the CE for me. If I may pull out one more positive note, I like the way you drew the line out of our current media obsessed and TV socialized culture to your own brave new world. The difference between entertainment reality and reality becomes blurred. Instead of emulating the callow emotions, comic timing and melo-drama of sitcoms, with the help of tech support and directed group think the archo citizens become the sitcom. I've always known the narcissistic hyperbolic emo drama queens would bring us down.

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Triple Chaos, The Stolen World
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Mountains)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-19 09:53 AM
The part about the Rat hanging everybody upside down made me smile. Go to Comment
Tannia Castle-the Outer Limits
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-16 10:15 PM
I with Max in as much as I also feel that this sub is not yet fully realized. It borders on greatness. This is an epic city and castle (miles between the three rings of walls...this is like Constantinople). And what you have here is still interesting, fun and discussion worthy. The public tombs are really cool. I am tempted to go try and jam out a fan-boy post right now.

Here are my suggestions for enrichment.

Split up the bullet point about the plantations into two bullet points. Do one about the plantations, what do they grow, where are the located (are they between the walls), how do they work into the local geography. Do another bullet point about slavery.

Drop the bullet point about Tannia city, because you don't need to tell us there is no information.

Try a couple of block quotes describing discrete scenes from the city (like Scras does in his posts these days)

describe the market more, maybe with an emphasis on geography Go to Comment
Pennsylvannia 'Penny' Brown
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-13 11:17 PM
I like what you have done with Penny here, raised by robots and now hunts robots, she could emotional center of a whole multi-level campaign and would make an interesting frenemy for group of merc types. It is a shame you weren't writing inspector gadget, I would have enjoyed it more. Go to Comment
Avacyia, Bishop of Time, The Stolen World
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Area)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-02-23 10:18 PM
What if you assume all the game logic is true and recognized in your world. Everyone is aware of levels, the disproportionally large amount of capital buried under ground, the numerous conspiracies to rule the world which have a genius chance of success, and the 1in20 odds at which things happen. Have all your in fiction characters aware of this, what would that world look like?

This is fun bit of game setup. I like things with doctrines, orders and such. Makes roleplaying easy when you give the character explicit instructions on how to act and why they are doing it.
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Adventuring Butlers of The Sundered Worlds
Systems  (Technical/ Mechanical)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2017-03-08 09:32 PM
This is fun idea, I feel like you channeled you inner Cheka Man when writing this one. Go to Comment
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