This is a good article, makes me want to write some Okelai about a cosmic era family. I love the shout you gave to Gengis Khan...the most successful human male since Adam.
This is really well written, the voice is solid, the asides are kept as asides...really nice article, nice format, and most importantly fun ideas.
1) Cybertronians: how does family work with them, do they have souls (should I be worried about Starscream's ghost and can Arcee and Springer have a babybot?)
2) Value of children. I read a lot of history, and one the conceits that most historians make is the we must assume that people loved their children in the past just as much as we do now. While I am sure this is true, I think this looks over the fact that I think modern western society may value children more than historical western society. We rarely hear about "bad children", but we do hear about bad parents. Question, how much does the society-full recognition that their are different cultures in the CE-value children. Where do they put the weight of family responsibility?
3) Education and Career Choices: I may have missed this, but does the Monolithic and personalized education program attempt to respond to the perceived economic needs of the society. For example if the society needs welders (not likely in the CE, but bare with me) do the VR teachers try to push more kids to technical programs and away from academic or creative careers. How much choice does one have in choosing a career assuming you have the talent? How good are the educators at predicting and directing career path based on the pyscho/genetic analysis of the student?
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Ah! That had a refreshingly classic feel. Made me want to dig up some graph paper, pencils and a copy of the monster manual. I enjoyed the none-to-serious tone and I liked the straight-taking unaffected voice.
Enterolans, nice one, I hope the PCs packed a lawn gnome*.
Oubliette has always been a disappointing word for me. It is just a hole in the ground! But the way Oubilette rolls of the tounge makes me think magical puzzle box, chamber of secrets or torture room. What is the etymology on that one?Go to Comment
These would be a great tool if you wanted to have a scooby-doo adventure to your CE saga. The players capture the phantom with a sack of flour, dry ice, fun house mirrors and a remote guided semi-intelligent tranquilizer darts (it is still the cosmic era). They then rip off the phantoms mask and ....nope that was his face.
I do admire the way this piece was written with the little asides and in world voices. It is a solid piece that is more about how this technology is integrated into the world and less about the technology itself: a good thing that. Nice merger of an item post and a world building post.
Couldn't you have Fascia that employs minimal or almost no software? The brain should do most of the interpretation of the sensors. I know a little bit about how vision works at the neurological level. I could either discuss this with you or point you to some references.
Some odd sentences:
The image of the faceless controllers guiding swarms of aerospace fights, mecha squadrons, and commanding gun and missile batteries.Go to Comment
This is fantastic, I completely enjoyed reading it. The voice you used gives us another lay of information on top of the list of facts: we get to see these people in context. Plus the sinister considerations of the narrator add a layer of risk, suspense and intrigue to the piece. The structure is also excellent. Well done makes me want to read more.Go to Comment
I like this little write up. The interview log was fun to read, and while brief I thought that worked as is. I thought the descriptions given in the first person thought bubbles italics were quality. This is an idea seed with some little artistic flourishes. By why the term Genome computer? These types of computers have very little to do with the Genome and Cheka wouldn't be disappointed.
Also what do vending machines look like in the cosmic era? And children, is there a post about families and childrearing in the cosmic era?
Overall I am not sure the idea is developed enough. This is more like a foot note in some larger story Brain's in jar and machine man hybrid. That could have been a 100 word post. I feel like you were going for something larger here, maybe some world building or an atmospheric piece. We get a little mood stuff (which is good) and some world building references to the Tyco convention, a proper noun and the reveal in the CE there is something rotten in Antartica.
recommendations along these lines of brain/machine hybrids and/or brains in jars
There was an adventure story in Galaxy's Edge Magazine Issue 7 (amazon 3.99) called Pallbearers. It was about armored suits and their pilots. The crux of the story was one suit's "Dummy System" and the injured pilot in a suit trying to over come the dummy system.
For real old school dudes (Max) The Ship Who Sang by Anne McCaffery is about a brain in a jar in a ship, and her struggles with grief, art, love, loyalty and all that stuff.
For old school Horror there was Whispers in the Darkness, by H.P. Lovecraft. (A whole shelf full of brains in jar).
Finally in comedy, Steve Martin's movie "The Man with Two Brains"
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This is fantastic. It is filled with desirous and vibrant story telling and roleplaying opportunities abound. I also adore the material aspects of the piece, the little sacred mirror thing, excellent touch. Makes me want to write fan-fiction about one of these guys.
I think the voice works. But if I were to step from this a bit, I wonder academically how another voice would have played. When did fantasy writing get wedded to this this gothic, passive and almost vedic style of writing? It works here because I think we expect this sort of long sentence passive voice style of writing for this type of work.Go to Comment