that would be a sub worth talking about, but what if we extrapolate from Cheka's idea a bit. As has been pointed before, one of the big differences being a man and a women is that if you are a woman roughly half the population can overpower you and/or kill you with their bare hands. This is not a speculative concern, more than that woman (on a worldwide population level) have been beaten and murdered by their intimate partners consistently throughout recorded human history (with many such events going unrecorded). Did the choir get all that?
Back to the agonizer, so what if your well-meaning social justice warriors decided that the agonizer was the solution to this problem, a way to level the playing field. When a couple forms a commited relationship or an intimate relationship starts (monogamous coupling rarely survives the vision of futurists, Scras is no different) what if instead of rings or keys they exchange agonizer codes. Or perhaps only men get agonizers implants. The agonizer gets implemented with the best of intentions.Go to Comment
Solid bit of work, and I like the approach you are taking: lay out the logic of the setting and then put out the details. I think many people work the other way . They start with the glowing axes, the bad guy in pink spandex and the hyper intelligent shades of blue and work backwards to justify the existence of these things.
I too have been using the citadel to work on a galactic sized human civilization. But while there is some overlap, what these ideas and your style of writing reminds me off is Scrasamax and his Cosmic Era setting. His stuff is fairly Earthbound and relatively near future but you should check it out. There might be some overlaps you can exploit and adapt into your setting.
But you asked for feedback
Some things to think about:
How are you can to manage the deep space travel?
What type of tone (i.e. Grimdark, Macho-adventure, Cherry flavored space Opera) do you want to set? *
Who are the five most interesting people in your universe?
Are you bringing characters straight out of mythology like Zeus, Oden, Hercules and/or Shiva?
Pro-tip: If you are looking for lots of feedback and interaction about this, start a forum thread, the comments section can become unweildly.Go to Comment
1- I don't know why but "Sporty" really won me over, I chuckled, nice
2-Sea foam baby, Sea Foam
3-have very little mermaid specific stuff about her, I don't want to put all merpeople in the same wet box, but this could be any princess.
4-I am tempted to say build on this, but the concept is communicated pretty clearly
5-that is terrible, but it is an interesting back story, Maybe she hangs on! Learns the language, gains some confidences, starts playing people off each other, and over time her innocent and honest attempts at survival turn to ruthless bitter ambition. Next time those fisherman come to town they find a welcome that is all too warm. Because our little landlocked mermaid is now running that brothel and the gangs of thugs it attracts. She is jabba the hut with seashell bra and a purpose: to net those that netted her.
6-Garrison Keller? Seriously have seen pictures of that dude....half carp at least
7-Gamers love hoarders.Go to Comment