Of all things of yours that I have a read and remember reading this may be the best them. I like how you left certain things unsaid, the fact that her adult life is centered around revenge fantasies focused on her mother. The arc of her snake formation also follows a story of the coping mechanisms associated with emotional abuse. There are also some dark and disturbing tagents in this, that speak very little to the story of the piece (and there is a nice story) but tell us much about the character.
I think you could tighten up a few points (but again minor stuff sir), for example during her first transformation you don't need to tell us she is rattlesnake in the last line. That banal conclusion takes away from an effective and visual paragraph.
This land solidly in my favorite genre, Kyle would be a could opponent for a noir anti-hero or love-hate counter part for superhero themed vigilante. I find it interesting that as cynical as he is he still follows politics. Which most likely confirms his cynicism, but following closely suggests he either develops and feeds of his disillusionment or he hasn't given up hope. Go to Comment
I too like the way it reproduces.
But something that ravages an already ravaged wasteland really does not carry the same threat of destruction as something that comes out to disrupt the hubris of peace and prosperity. The real story would start when the hellebabies make land fall in Sweden or some other country that sat out the war. I like the idea, but this doesn't seem to be the whole story. Go to Comment
I love the conflict origin of this one, that this is channels the 99% rage and the conflicts behind wealth distribution. If you were to add more to this sub, I would tell more the chimera's story rather than to develop the physics of the chimera. Though I do like Omega Draco's ideas.
I really liked this one, I know it is just a list 'facts' but the tone I found fun and the picture made me laugh.
I have tried to make my aggressive love for fantasy flora and fauna known on this website, and this one just titers of the being a really great post. I absolutely love the idea and don't think it needs any more but it has so much potential to add more. Is there a hive mind? How long do the larva live in larva form?
Finally the kaiju genre demands, that right I said it, demands that the monster represent some other type of conflict or fear. Godzilla represented the nations fear of nuclear radiation, King Kong represented a nations fear of......, well Son of Kong represented the guilt associated with that fear. In Kaiju fiction I have read in the past five years monster attacks coincide with more persona- emo -issues. There was one story published in a paying market no less, in which the attack coincided with the progression of main character's mother's cancer, and another in which the giant wolf-chimera seemed to be responding to the bad break-up between a couple of west coasters named Reggie and Gwen. These could certainly be seen to represent the consequence of the rain forest destruction, but if your are going to cook it up you may as well put it on platter.
I think you nailed you summed up the issues with this sub in you own comment. You tell a story sort, you have events, but you don't really have characters, motivations, or a plot. You just have a lot descriptions such...killed by rail gun...killed by plasma cannon and so on. Those don't really do much for the description except outline your vision for how these encounters should play out.
Physic shysics, I think this is great, this tells the story Qualm's origin and outlines how future stories involving Qualm will take shape. I could really see a justice league like unit of super heros taking this on as well. I think CM and the others highlight most what was great about this, but I also like the name. How did it get the name? Go to Comment
I enjoyed reading this thank you for writing it. It reads like the liner to video game or the summary of some late night movie, and in short it is great lead in for a game with a lot of flexible pieces you could spin into multiple plots.
More of a plot really than a society. Go to Comment
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Why are chitinous space turtles bad science? If on present day earth turtles and reptiles as a whole do not produce chitin does that mean that alien resembling a turtle or a reptile or futuristic animal also similar to a turtle could not produce chitin? Go to Comment
Perhaps a simple way to mix these concepts into a game grid would be to put players or characters into a space in which light suddenly moves in an extremely non-euclidien path over short distances. The characters would have to quickly adapt to "seeing" something in front of them that is actually to their left, and things that are moving would appear to be moving around them or disappear from vision. Go to Comment
Was Guznal Skarsnik the one seeking to learn more about cultures? Was the spear supposed a tool to help him do that?
Does the spear "make fish" since you can use it to catch fish in a pool that would not normally have any or do you just wish to keep that vague and mystical. Vague is fine, but if that is the case then you may wish to remove the point about it limiting the the fisherman to five fish per "use". Because what counts as a fishing trip? And if it manifests fish from nothing, than what if the fear of over fishing.
I think you want this write up and the item to be means by which we can get a side long veiw of goblin culture. I like that idea, but I don't think this has succeeded. If you don't want this to be a novel window in the goblin way of life then try taking this up with the 100 word challenge. Go to Comment