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The Djavarga
Society/ Organizations  (Mercantile)   (Area)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-13 12:23 PM
is the D silent?  
ooteenee!!!!!!
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The Djavarga
Society/ Organizations  (Mercantile)   (Area)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-13 02:10 PM
let us see where this imagery takes us

short-dwarf short,
shinning yellow eyes,
androgynous,
commerce minded
sand
desert people
nomadic craftsmen
traveling around in a giant crawling communal dwelling
work with anthropomorphic metallic beings

"I can't abide these Djavarga, disgusting creatures." Go to Comment
The Strange People of Khor Kal'ah
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-13 12:26 PM
They don't have good domesticated men like we civilized folk. What does this say about how civilized men became domesticated? Go to Comment
The Strange People of Khor Kal'ah
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-13 02:57 PM
I ran into the same problem, recently, 100 word subs were derided as being stubs. Go to Comment
The Strange People of Khor Kal'ah
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-13 03:50 PM
Our don't vote, scores are secondary to comments anyway. People don't post here to get gold stars, they post to get feedback right? Go to Comment
The Strange People of Khor Kal'ah
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-13 05:23 PM

why post at all then? why not just write it down and put it on your blog or even just save it to your hard drive. Go to Comment
The Strange People of Khor Kal'ah
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-13 05:55 PM
I have lost tons of stuff with hard drive fails. I feel your pain. But when you, Scras dies and some Ph.D. student working a thesis about your life discovers these spiral notebooks your work will have second life.
Cave paintings would last longer than anything mentioned. Go to Comment
Lifegiver; holy sword of Linn.
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-13 07:22 AM
"Evil will always win cause good is dumb."

A straight up 2nd generation fantasy tool written with self-concious humor and flair. I enjoyed it well more than idea or content alone merited. Go to Comment
Ghorion, the Weaponmaster
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Mountains)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-11 06:23 AM
And advancing evil glacier....damn you Nekron! To the Dragonhawks!


I think for an epic death, you have to have a character that PCs really want to kill. A guy with a lot hit points, floating weapons, and 3-D combat home is obnoxious and challenging, but they will never learn his name. This character has no personality-his brain is rotting. His shield is smarter than he is, and based on the write up I think the personality of the encounter will be dominated by his shield no matter how many weapons this guy may literally pull out of his ass. He has no back story, and it wouldn't matter if he did have a back story because the only facts you see relevant to him are those that relate to the combat grid. Yeah he was one of three Troll Kings of Cloudtseeth, but that only suggests something: it promises a narrative this doesn't deliver. How is this a story telling tool?

There is a lot of information, but no mechanism to transmit those ideas to the player. If this is a really cool boss than how are you going to get your character interested in fighting him before the fight? Are you going to give them the chance to prepare and plan for this battle? Unless some dying Uronothi whispers "You may have won this round, but you will never get past Ghorion the weapon master" or some other heavy handed crap: the players need never learn his name. The structure of the post is really haphazard and reads more like pre-story notes.

To be fair, every one else seems to think this is pretty awesome and I don't need to down vote you. Let us know how Ghorion went over with you players, and if you had to break the 4th wall to unpack the character. Go to Comment
Ghorion, the Weaponmaster
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Mountains)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-15 05:47 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Emote Cube
Items  (Other)   (Cursed)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-02-25 08:46 AM
Isn't Phaidros the name of the Socrates's imaginary companion in Plato's work of the same name? Go to Comment
Art of the weilder
Systems  (Combat/ Warfare)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-13 03:06 PM
"Reminds me of Jedi. I can see axle's point in replacing age ranges with something more character-oriented, but I kind of like that approach..."

I don't write every comment on site, that one was mystic's Go to Comment
Thrall and Yola
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-27 05:44 AM
The description of the coal fire was well paced and pulled me into the story. Go to Comment
The Glenbeard Tunnels
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Underground)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-11 06:49 AM
I like the story alot, but it feels like you ran out of steam towards the end. You give us the broadstrokes of the political military history of the region and how that lead to the formation of the tunnels. You gives us a few specific details about some battle and the personalities that shaped that world. We don't get a clear picture of the "modern tunnels" or the the tunnels that this sleepy little dwarf is asking about. What are the Irondeeps like today? What is it like to ride the subsystem? Could you have some Chinatown like plot where some evil dwarven developer wants to recklessly expand the dwarven tunnels? You have a great prologue. Go to Comment
Ode to "The Temple of Doom"(A tale of Mysantia)
Plots  (Travel)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-04 08:35 PM
You didn't need 100 words.

Indiana Jones, Rope Bridge, Skeletons instead of Thuggee Go to Comment
Ode to "The Temple of Doom"(A tale of Mysantia)
Plots  (Travel)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-04 10:33 PM
You betrayed shiva! Go to Comment
Fox's Dragon Scale Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-13 08:38 PM
This has a lot of possibilities, used a plot delivery device or interesting opponent, if I were to take this armor into a game I would have the Dragon be able to animate without a living host. Thus if the owner dies in the suit of armor, the armor and the corpse would fight on.

I like the writing style in the first four paragraphs but the perspective and intend audience is not clear.

" perhaps previously unseen by the characters" This suggests that this is a metagame discussion of the item. Yet if it is a metagame discussion the best part of the write up, the enigmatic nature of the dragon's motivation and will, becomes moot. Lines like "treated as rune item" also suggest a metagame discussion and do not fit into the narrative which presents us with a narrator who both respects and is in awe of the dragon character.

Nice item though, I enjoyed reading it. Go to Comment
Fox's Dragon Scale Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-13 08:39 PM
This has a lot of possibilities, used a plot delivery device or interesting opponent, if I were to take this armor into a game I would have the Dragon be able to animate without a living host. Thus if the owner dies in the suit of armor, the armor and the corpse would fight on.

I like the writing style in the first four paragraphs but the perspective and intended audience is not clear.

" perhaps previously unseen by the characters" This suggests that this is a metagame discussion of the item. Yet if it is a metagame discussion the best part of the write up, the enigmatic nature of the dragon's motivation and will, becomes moot. Lines like "treated as rune item" also suggest a metagame discussion and do not fit into the narrative which presents us with a narrator who both respects and is in awe of the dragon character.

Nice item though, I enjoyed reading it. Go to Comment
Fox's Dragon Scale Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-13 10:45 PM
Moving on from your intended audience being a GM, (I am just really curious about how people like you perceive the stuff you write.)

"Galafox was not given the moniker "Old Fox" for nothing, and this suit of dragon scale armor is but one example of the dragon's guile."

When you wrote this line do you intended it to be percieved as one GM talking to another, or was it intended to viewed as an observation or conclusion made by some character or personality within the narrative of the game world? Go to Comment
Fox's Dragon Scale Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-13 10:45 PM
Moving on from your intended audience being a GM, (I am just really curious about how people like you perceive the stuff you write.)

"Galafox was not given the moniker "Old Fox" for nothing, and this suit of dragon scale armor is but one example of the dragon's guile."

When you wrote this line do you intended it to be percieved as one GM talking to another, or was it intended to be viewed as an observation or conclusion made by some character or personality within the narrative of the game world? Go to Comment
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