Updates: One monster after another, and mops and buckets Go to Comment

You made me touch the dork part of me that bought the box sets in the 6th grade and the read blue book over and over again. I love this setting, it is bluntly and forcibly written in the GM vioce but I love all the little tweaks you put on the races, kobolds are orcish runts, goblins and dwarves and artificers. Great stuff

"Also, eating vegetables is seen as week. Meat is the primary course on the table for dinner, with perhaps some vegetable on the side or on the meat."

These sentences made me laugh out loud.

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I will check in with you game updates to see how this dude was received and used. I really like any write up that includes something as thoughtful as your intent and design section. Here are some questions you can toss around in your head

If remove the brainwash, or deprogram the character how would he act? Do you consider him to be a victim and if so how will you present that angle to your players?

Who calls him he wraith? Does he call himself this? Is it a title known to a select underworld few?

He would seem to understand human emotion, based on his social skill,even if he doesn't care for it. If he is sadistic though, than he is not indifferent to the feelings of others, indeed the feelings of other is something he would care about, all be it in a negative fashion. Is he particularly disturb or annoyed by those happy people.

Does he have a trusted staff or servant?

Who does he respect or who would he respect, aside from the Locust? Go to Comment

The ordering of the facts in this paragraph is of questionable taste

"When soldiers marched into the city, they were met with gunfire and home made explosives. This prompted McCutchin's infamous line: 'If they were hungry, they would make cake, not explosives'. Most of the rioting had centered itself around the Academy neighborhood, a predominantly African area. This had turned most of Academy and the surrounding areas of Visitation Park, Lewis Place, and the Central West End into an armed warzone/ghetto. The leaders of the riot factions were sequestered in Academy and McCutchin, having spent her last tour of duty in the Congo decided that the best way to deal with this sort of insurrection was a show of irresistible force supported by taking out the leadership of the opposition. "

I am not quite sure where the authors sympathies rest, there appears to be a slightly different tone in the first third of the piece than in last two thirds of the piece. But you tell a compelling story, and as RPG tool this is a piece of back story that could be shared by all PCs, something they could make allusions too.

Overall though this is good "essay" concise and with a narrative construction. Go to Comment

Do you think George Lucas had one of these when he sold SW to disney?

I like Ted, and like Ted, would like to see more. I like the fluff paragraphs...and if not fluff then discuss the narrative goals which requires the setting to possess these features. Go to Comment

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This is a fantastic roleplaying tool. It deserves more of a write up then I am giving it. This sets the narrative of the cosmic era well above a justification for the convergence of genre, nostalgic extrapolations and specific media references that is much of the content. It deserves a longer commentary which I will get to, but a game that sets out to explore these topics is more than a game and it is more than fantasy and escapism. Go to Comment

1. Everything is for Sale

At least until the alien invasion hits and the it is a flat out war for survival. Indeed it is war humanity is alway fighting via proxy. It is obvious that the A.I.s have managed to find ways to wed war and profit but what if war became less profitable. Would M12 allow peace to reign, all be it a profitable peace, if it made the planet more vunerable?

2. Life is Cheap

Yes because M12 has done a cost benifet analysis and found that millions of deaths now will save billions upon billions in generations to come. It is not so much cheap as it already been borrowed against by the powers behind the thrones.

3. Sex is in Everything

Keeps people distracted from the alien invasion...I guess...which has very little to do with sex...unless the aliens are going weaponize sex.

4. Frantic Pacing
-except for the alien invasion and the M12 conspiracy, that is glacial


5. Our Values are Antique

I love that your values stared with home and car ownership...did you vote for Ron Paul?

6.Nothing is real

Except the alien invasion

7.Everything under the surface is horrible

Yes, but as Cheka says it is a necessary evil...defeat the alien threat. So i suppose it isn't completely horrible. Go to Comment

This is clearly written, well formatted and fun.

Are we thinking the pyro's just catalyze stuff to heat it up and catch it on fire, cause the way you seem to describe they are creating "fuelless" fires, which would suggest direct energy...something EMish. Does this mean they can create or channel energy? Could they make beams of light or gamma radiation? Go to Comment

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In a sci-fi setting though people will ask what is that energy. Could these fuelless flames work in a vacuum? Go to Comment

Who is the novel about? Go to Comment

"The Federation is known for it's unabashed militarism, space exploration program and being the first NEG, the pioneer of hypertechnology, and the point of origin for the CogNet. "
Who know these things? Your fictional geo-political summaries would carry more verisimilitude for me if they were less demonstrative and more controvertible. It would be more telling I believe to have two or three informed citizens of Scras's mind sit around and discuss the Atlantic Federation than these primary school textbok style summations that have single point of few for millions of people.

Having the enemy subs having free reign of the ocean provides a great story telling leaver, I like the idea of being able to drop agents from foreign powers in with relative ease. Go to Comment

Well played sir Go to Comment

First, the one has a lot of fun imagery and a punchy bemused wording that I really enjoyed.

"megacorp sprawled like a kraken flailing around the Great Lakes"


"These are not automatically human brains, but some are."

"megacorporation to make all the stuff that people needed, but really didnt need to be marketed, like the afore mentioned asswipe, toothpaste, furniture, and so on"


The format of the wedding limerick also was both accessible and clever.

Fun stuff.

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Also a fun one, I think we just mapped the Kessel run! Go to Comment

Useful stuff, if I were to play a character from there what was the PRC stance on Neo-ethnic group and mystics? Who benefitted from the PRC's formation? Any not able personalities? Go to Comment

Update: Just joined Drunk writer's guild, there is no way this comes out formatted....holding my breath and my drink while I hit submit. Go to Comment

Update: Just joined Drunk writer's guild, there is no way this comes out formatted....holding my breath and my drink while I hit submit. Go to Comment

made few changes, I am okay with it Go to Comment