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Peto Specimen, The Bleeding King
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-20 07:54 PM

What bumps this up for me is the contradictions and problems that the NPC and his current situation presents.  He is a revolutionary and rebel who has found himself a leader.  We need more NP characters like this one.  Many NPCs "make sense" and would be stable and self contained until PCs are thrown into the mix. This NPC is on an unstainable path.  This NPC has a story cause you know he can't last.  Also the phyiscal details are over the top and extreme.  These are kind of physical details that help a spoken word medium like roleplaying.  


I think there some broken links and formatting issues that make the post a little incomplete. 

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Shaltier Gremtre
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-06 03:35 PM
Is death very fluid to those people? Do you need to start comments with "Consider this"?

I agree with what everyone else said. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-01-21 08:46 PM

This is an exceptional submission. I found the overly wordy and passive voice in the "scripture" sections difficult to read but it was rewarding. I think the interweaving of this and the consistent and high fantasy tone set by the language and pacing is perfect.

I am very curious of what you think of this submission now.

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So you wish to be a Bard....
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Players)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-06-19 07:51 PM
Fun, even without the intro it reminded me of Chaucer. So I think you hit the mark. Go to Comment
Concerning Bears
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-26 02:33 PM

I love bears


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Concerning Bears
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-26 02:42 PM


"Bears are unique in that they are slow predators, unable to mount impressive bursts of prey catching speed. "

That is statement is not true here on earth. For about 100 yards a grizzly bear, for example, can run up to 30-35 mph (look it up).  How fast is the average horse moving at a gallop? 

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Concerning Bears
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-27 05:43 AM
A horse that tops out at 50mph is a fast horse. I would say 35 mph is a fast horse. How long does it take one of your a horses to reach a speed of 35 mph? Go to Comment
Concerning Bears
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-03-05 09:27 AM
So would you consider these horse that can hit their top speed in a few stride capable of impressive bursts of speed? You wish to make distinction between ambush carnivores and animals that chase their prey over distances, what are examples of these? For how long can a cheetah chase its prey? Do other other forest hunters such as tigers or jaguars mount impressive burst of speed? When writing nonfiction pieces such as this should we include references for the facts we are reporting?

However, I agree, based on my limited knowledge I don't think a bear would attempt to or succeed in running down and attacking a healthy race horse. Go to Comment
The Way
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Historical)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-10-13 11:47 AM
Interesting read, but Pariah is right it does not lie far from the Judeo-Christian belief system which I think could be fun. It will allow you to explore a strong monotheistic presence in your setting and this way tie the setter closing to medieval europe. But since it isn't exactly Christian it will allow you more flexability in the rpg world. Go to Comment
The Haunted House and The Undead Sheriff
Plots  (Hired)   (Mini-Campaign)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-10-05 02:35 PM
Well it could that this is not that great a quest. I have been thinking about this since I typed it up the other day, and I have never been really happy with the way it ran in gameplay. I always chalked that up to the fact that it was run as early "go to" adventure with a new group, but I have noticed so general short comings of the adevnture.

First the PCs take a long journey that ends where they started. This is rather anti-climatic in nature, because the middle part of the quest is essentially a trip the hardware store.

The primary villian is muddled. The Shadow as a villian doesn't have enough personality to make defeating him a real joy.

The moral ambiguity of final conflict can divide the players rather than unite them. The last time I ran this some the PCs killed a number of peasants to stop the undead sheriff. This really pissed off some of the other players, and served to divide the party.

Finally very little is gained at the end of the quest. An old woman gets her house back, but the PCs get very little. Go to Comment
The Haunted House and The Undead Sheriff
Plots  (Hired)   (Mini-Campaign)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-10-05 11:18 PM
Well I don't mean to say it is bad or useless. But I have run it a few times, and it is a really simple idea stretched out with a lot of filler. There are ideas I may want to transplant into other things, but I still think the long journey in a circle is weak. Go to Comment
The Haunted House and The Undead Sheriff
Plots  (Hired)   (Mini-Campaign)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-06 04:52 PM

Update: This is one of my least favorite things I have ever written. I wonder that in 7 years time if I will look back at my writings I enjoy now and be as embarrassed. I tried to fix it up, but I think it is just a weak idea.

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40 Thieves Guild Missions
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-10-03 03:49 PM
Nice format, useful list, you could even put the PCs on the other side of this, playing law enforcement officers. Go to Comment
The Knight of Glass
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (City/ Ruin)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-10-05 11:33 AM
I liked that he could be defeated by evidence or arguement. (very Capt. Kirk) And this is a nice take on the old stain glass golem idea. I am interested to know if you envisioned his face as being expressionless and if so how fluid would the exchange of expression be?

But were the descriptions of Sir Dicks sexual abuse of the clergy really necessary? Go to Comment
Imperial Nomar Bracers
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-30 03:21 PM
I thought about the title a bit more than I should have, and I decided "Nomar Bracers" wouldn't be specific enough, any bracer worn by a Nomar citizen would be a Nomar Bracer. But if it something someone is inspired to correct, I am open to another title.

As to putting game mechanics first, this is entirely true. Go to Comment
Imperial Nomar Bracers
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-03-02 06:39 AM

I knew somebody once posted this quip about the desire ratio of ready to use items and uber-sagas. I should have remembered it was you. I think of this comment always when I read magical items.

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The Sword Blooddrinker
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-28 11:21 PM
The story of Senek seems more fun than the item. But as you said in the end, what makes the item special is that it was Senek's. Can you link this to other posts? Go to Comment
Ye Alehouse of ye Ruddye Draggon
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-29 12:39 PM
This is a really fun submission, and I like the demonic creatures impersonatting archetypes of girls we all knew in high school. Everytime, you start gaming for the day it takes a bit of exposition for everyone to get into character. This would be a great place to remind everyone that "hey it is D&D time". If I use this I will take your advice and inter-weave this into a larger quest. Go to Comment
Ylithain, the Drowned Queen
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-25 10:20 AM
Damn good, I have a bard this will be perfect for. I only hope I can do justice to the idea when I run it.

Have you run this idea in a game yet? And if so do you have any suggestions as to how the mechanics of this character and the setting worked. Go to Comment
Dwarven Steelbows
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-23 04:45 PM
A nice weapon, it is a great mix of utlitity, style and attitude. Three things that every good heroic roleplayer will focus on, and the history of the item is nice touch that will make owning such a weapon as PC more enjoyable. They could also become collectable items. It makes me wish my group had a focused archer. Go to Comment
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