Strolen\s Citadel content. 
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-05-26 11:04 AM
I think this whole post could use a little restructuring or clarification.

This sentence: " Any gown woven from Moonsilk will be so translucent that it will reflect the moonlight, hence the name "Moonsilk"."

Why the suggestion that reflecting moonlight is a special quality? Can't any reflective surface reflect moonlight? Or are you suggesting that silk resembles moonlight?

I would also suggest putting the sound making abilities at the begining of the presentation. That seems to be a major feature, I know you following a format...origin, appearance, and special abilities. But you could just toss something into the teaser.

I think this could be useful item though, any thing that creates noise, turns kinetic energy into sound or really any tool....would find a use in the hands of a problem solving player, a flashy creative-type player or trap building players. Go to Comment
Holding Back the Night
Plots  (Mystical)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-02 06:59 PM
This a simple classic setup, and I think it is great. Go to Comment
Woolragon, Druid-turned-Poacher
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-07 03:23 PM
Really solid and well written piece. It gives quite a bit in just a few lines. Which is good. Go to Comment
The Seven-Fold Flame
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-17 08:42 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-26 11:18 PM
Fluff text as compared to what? The facts? Fluff compared to the fourth wall stuff in which you are speaking directly to other writers or GMs? Is it fluff because it has perspective? How would you describe the voice or perspective used for most RPG fiction? This is something that deserves further discussion. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-26 11:20 PM
I like this one, I like the tone of the God, the minor details about its role in society, I wish there was more fluff though. Go to Comment
30 Uncoventional Weapons
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-02 06:42 PM
 Is describing how to stab somebody with chopsticks helpful? Posting the following

"11. Sash
A clothes strip that goes around one's waist, an ancient version of a belt

Can be used as a whip, a garrote or more creatively, to trip an opponent up."

borders on condescension.

However what makes this an interesting post and not a completely useless ramble are the little options after each post. I found many of those quite clever

"The beads on the abacus will automatically change positions to reflect the total number of kills that its current owner has made with this weapon." was quite clever.

Also Moonlake's post starting with meteor hammer and ending with blood droplet is quite interesting. I would like to see those expanded on. Go to Comment
Old Drozhenen
Locations  (City)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
axlerowes's comment on 2015-01-27 06:18 PM

This hits on everything a sub should when it seeks to be part of world building. (well maybe not everything, but the style and attitude is right) This a nicely a woven submission that offers lot of information and facts. But what make this much more than a dry list of facts is that it described how those things are woven together. We get a flying weapon, we get a city of dour prigs, we get the important points of the city, we get a story of adventure from the city's past, we get a window into a religion and we get the busy travelers guide to NPCs...all wrapped with a bow on it.

We also get a ALOT OF PROPER NOUNS and GIGANTIC SENTENCES. I guess I don't know the setting that well but being hit with lists of names that aren't really relevant kind of pulls me out of the submission each time.

One thing that tickled me was that the idea of an animated weapon was not something immediately accessible to me. I got it eventually that this weapon files around and hits things with magical force, but at first I was just befuddled as I tried to figure out what you meant. Then later you chose to define guard everyone on the citadel is sure to know what an animated weapon is but guard hounds might be a little abstract.

"....unerringly sense when evil-doers, hooligans, or other undesirables trespassers are afoot. Men have been peeled off the very walls the mornings following night-time break-ins, crushed into pasty, flesh-bags filled with rattling and broken-bones. "

I can tell you enjoyed writing this.

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The Never Ending Hallway
Dungeons  (Any)   (Traps)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-10 04:24 PM
Why you should always carry chalk. Go to Comment
An Ordinary Flashbulb Camera
Items  (Other)   (Villanous)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-17 05:28 PM

This is fantastic!  It makes me want to run WoD campaign.   

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30 Quick NPC Personalities
NPCs  (Extras)   (Travelers)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-09-18 06:46 PM
Nothing new, but like most lists it is very helpful to have it all put together and accessible; as it is here. It my not fit the closed circuit definition of what regulars think a 30 should be, but I still think the list has increased useful and I like it. Thanks. Go to Comment
The Temples of Stoneholt
Locations  (Area)   (Underground)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-03-17 01:31 PM
Very nice on its own and as taken as part of larger group of submission it is even better.

Things like this could be used for the PCs to set a trap for the their enemies or as a hard to get to hideaway.

Yet, not all locations need to be a nexus of power, and there has be explaination for all this massive tunnels and underground structures that are found in so many fantasy game. So again nice Go to Comment
30 Mecha Pilots
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-08-01 07:53 PM

Of all the 30s this may be the most useful. Specialized to a sub genre yes, but that is what makes it  useful.  The Fountains of Youth was entertaining, but the only way you would use is it you or a player built around it, 30 Bards ... yeah if you find all your bards being the same, but you likely won't use all 30. However in the mech genre, the pilots are supposed to be personalities. The story telling troupes generally present mecha engagements as grand scale duel, or "small unit big guns" combat.  But lets not kid our selves the first thought is generally about the mechs, then later... maybe a pilot. (I know there is somebody out there who has played a secession of battletech in which it was all character development and subtle wit, but I am speaking in broad strokes).    I could see running a battletech campaign and using half this in day to flesh out a company.  Of course the player may not even talk to the pilots but the point I have these personalities on the shelf if they decide to.    

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30 Mecha Pilots
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-27 08:36 PM

Must not have had an HoH vote on deck the first time I read this. 

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Ring of the Pure
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-03-20 04:05 PM
Seems to be a gag item. In fact playing with this could be quite fun. I imagine a seasoned warrior played with Gaelic style rallying his genre-typical party (a rainbow tribe of pan-ethnic hero archetypes) before a battle.

"Right lads, let us give these Orc's a spanking they won't soon forget"

*the cleric drops his mace and the Amazon's rear-end goes so numb she falls off her horse*

What if you are a voyeur. When you try to set up your little sadistic dramas (i.e. Claude Rains' French Captain in 'Casablanca' or Aaron Eckhart's super salesman in 'In the Company of Men') do you go blind or retarded?

Why not make it more than sexual. You could have somebody's jaw go numb when they try to eat meat.

I think it could use more. Go to Comment
The Star Hammer
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-02 08:42 PM
Nobody picked on the heat shield and the thrusters. That heat shield would have to be incredible to keep that iron stable as it moved towards the star.
Would the gravity pull it directly to the core or more in limiting orbit towards the core?

At any rate if Star Trek can have de-evolution, why can't another Sci-fi set up have a star hammer?

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How to Write Fictional Military Hardware
Articles  (Character)   (Gaming - Genre)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-01 05:55 PM
I can see using this as a checklist when you have written up a description the "missile frigate you really want your Jedi to command". How could your GM refuse you.

These submissions are like the list shows on VH1, it is well organized, linear and clear, but not novel or original. Plus even if you disagree it just makes the material that much more interesting to you.

Excellent submission...preach it brother. Go to Comment
How to Write Fictional Military Hardware
Articles  (Character)   (Gaming - Genre)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-11-09 08:40 PM
what I meant was not the format you are using is like a list, but the merit you assign to the format is like list show. Any material that presents meta-information, falls into that category. People like meta-information because they can toss it around apply to various things and disagree with it or embrace it without learning anything new and having pastoral type experience with the stuff they did already know. Still I liked the sub though. Go to Comment
How to Write Fictional Military Hardware
Articles  (Character)   (Gaming - Genre)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-09 12:31 PM
Roddenberry Writes I
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Game Mastering)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-14 03:18 PM

You were not wrong Scrasamax

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The desert is a curse from the Water God upon the wicked people who live in the South.
Said people offended the Water God in some way, and so the Water God placed water-trappers, bizarre, water-sucking beings, in the soil, and within years, the wilderness became a desert.
Thus, the desert folk shamans have special powers that allow them to find water-trappers so that they can be dug up and their water harvested.

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