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The Demon Mirror
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-08-11 01:59 PM
I want to try this one out.
MJS did you let the PC who was replaced make choices for the demon PC?

Did you explain the demon mirror to them when they encountered the double or did they not know where the imposter came from?

Did they examine the demon mirror? Go to Comment
The Demon Mirror
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-08-11 02:00 PM
Really solid idea, I hope to use it soon. Go to Comment
Locations  (City)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-18 01:59 PM
Everything is fine but this is essentially a one dimensional idea. And I think there is an under lying cultural element that you are not discussing. The attitude of Wheatsword is one of stoic military utilitarianism and discipline. This idea is a relatively modern one, in many cultures and European culture is not exception to this. The Military life was full of pomp. Uniforms were often flashy, military's had cultures, rallies and myths. Even Napoleons armies were slaves to fashion (given they were French), but look at the changes in uniforms and hair style from his invasion of Egypt to the taking of Moscow. But even if your a looking to model this after some ancient Empire such Rome or Inca, both of which maintained large standing armies, you haven't addressed the cultural and social justifications for such sustained and organzines military activity.

I have two sets of questions one set about details and one about the concept. Was Wheatsword the idea of a General or did it grow up economically first? How do they deal with all the rats? What is the major water source for the area, and what of the women? Can you have a military camp without camp followers?
Who are the soldiers; are they young nobles, citizen soldiers, conscripts or mercenaries? How does life at Wheatsword compare to the daily life of soldiers when they are some where else? Go to Comment
Locations  (City)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-10-05 01:50 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Staff of Silence
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-06 12:58 PM
Nice item with a good backstory that really sets it up well. Go to Comment
Combusting Shrews
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-03 01:08 PM
This a damn entertaining read and a fun idea.

I could see these things evolving, what predator would eat and exploding animal.

This post deserves more attention. Go to Comment
The Amulet of Looda Chriss
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-05-12 06:37 PM
I wouldn't quite call this one a rap just yet. Needs more puns, Go to Comment
Danrick's Sword
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-28 06:41 AM
I like the story of the old wizard who lost his mojo. The curse is so subtle that another take on this doesn't actually have any real power, other to make the "afflicted" people blame their misfortune on the person who delivered the curse. Go to Comment
The Evil Brothers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-30 12:16 PM
Essentially, you are saying lets do Hamlet, but instead of starting with Hamlet you start with disney. Then in your proposed set up the PCs aren't Hamlet or even Rosencrantz or Guildenstern, they are hired guns. In essence your proposed set up makes the PCs the audience for this play. That is bad.

I am all for ripping off classic plots, but to really explore the concepts you suggest to explore, than PCs need to be the ones with the conflict. What if one your PCs are placed in Claudius's postion. How do the PCs deal with Hamlet? Could they trust Gertrude not to side with her son?

Or the PC could be in Hamlet's postion. Do the PCs really want to be King or do they enjoy their adventuring life too much? Is this vengeful spirit talking their ear off really a force for good and the reincarnation of their dead father or is he something more evil?

The summary of the lion King's first act and the laundry list of what you see to be the potential conflicts in Hamlet do not specific plot make. Go to Comment
The Evil Brothers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-30 12:17 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The King's Advisor
Plots  (Duty)   (Mini-Campaign)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-30 02:56 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 11:31 PM
I agree with AG on everything...regarding this sub. Go to Comment
The Nutty Professor
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 11:10 PM

Nice plot, I wish I had used it, gender, race and cultural identity switching could also prove quite amusing.  


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The Nutty Professor
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 11:11 PM
yes why is the score so low if you got 2 5s? Go to Comment
Androgari Moor
Locations  (Any)   (Ruins)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-07 04:28 AM

"Hordes of Kedion, who wreaked their path of destruction and chaos upon any who happened to be in the way, in pursuit of as yet unclear goals" The Hordes of Kedion the were the PCs weren't they.

"To be especially feared are the vampiric mosquitoes... unless precautions are taken to prevent it." It is best to use blunt weapons against the undead mosquitoes, slashing weapons can wound the beast and there is nothing more dangerous than a wounded mosquito.

"the illustrious Discipline of Safety, a legion of undead soldiers much more powerful than the creatures around them. " Even more powerful than the mosquitoes?! But I imagine it Also illustrious in whose eyes? I mean do the other less undead see the Safety guys marching by with their 'Green Plus Sign' uniforms and Walk/Don't Walk hand signs and just die from envy. But I guess the Discipline of Safety was a prestigious group ...people were just dying to join.

"...are taken into the center of the Moor by well-prepared and brave souls, all of whom must be attired in Gremos heraldic symbols for fear of being attacked on sight" So the undead fluke worms can see...

I don't know what cheka meant by been done before. I mean if every bug that dies in this area comes back than after a few years the sky over the Moor is going be to a sun blocking cloud of undead swarms. Do the higher undead have some sort of society? Cause maybe you could set some sort of up lifting prison drama in this setting, where the witted undead don't escape but they learn to love themselves again.

Anyway, honestly, thought it was ably written and fully realized. Well done sir.

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Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-08 09:37 AM

I think this is a perfect sub because it set a mark (not high mark, just writing up the Fing awesome crossbow from a video game)  and gives it a story, depth and a links it to a culture.

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Cloak of the Daywalker
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-29 07:11 PM
There is nothing wrong with this per se, I think it is nicely written and if a story requires an uber powerful item than it requires an uber powerful item. Rejecting something just because it is too powerful is silly. We are not talking about board games, or miniatures, we are talking about roleplaying...collective story telling or just plain story telling. On the upside just having these in the game world raises the threat level of the world. I tempted to give this a 5 just to undue all the "Citadel Dogma" comments. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-05 09:24 AM
Well written extra. I think, while her motivations are left open as Echo and Dragon say, they are then discussed in the plot hook area, Go to Comment
Jardan , the Oak Sage
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-09 06:51 PM
This is fun story, reminds me of Moses, the Green lantern, the Blackhood, the Phantom, and others. What I really like about this is how the story justifies the pay off. If you were to write up the fairy mafia with Trent enforcers, people would not buy it, but you story of Jardan takes us there and makes us believe it accept it and see at as a natural extension of the story.

I agree could use some polish, but the goal, execution and style are fantastic. Go to Comment
Lesser Glyph of Change
Items  (Materials)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-08 11:18 AM
I hate random tables in games, but that is just me, I know some people that love them. This post just got run over by gaming snobs at the corner of dogma and bias. It is okay. Go to Comment
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