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The Evil Brothers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-30 12:16 PM
Essentially, you are saying lets do Hamlet, but instead of starting with Hamlet you start with disney. Then in your proposed set up the PCs aren't Hamlet or even Rosencrantz or Guildenstern, they are hired guns. In essence your proposed set up makes the PCs the audience for this play. That is bad.

I am all for ripping off classic plots, but to really explore the concepts you suggest to explore, than PCs need to be the ones with the conflict. What if one your PCs are placed in Claudius's postion. How do the PCs deal with Hamlet? Could they trust Gertrude not to side with her son?

Or the PC could be in Hamlet's postion. Do the PCs really want to be King or do they enjoy their adventuring life too much? Is this vengeful spirit talking their ear off really a force for good and the reincarnation of their dead father or is he something more evil?

The summary of the lion King's first act and the laundry list of what you see to be the potential conflicts in Hamlet do not specific plot make. Go to Comment
The Evil Brothers
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-30 12:17 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The King's Advisor
Plots  (Duty)   (Mini-Campaign)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-30 02:56 PM
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NPCs  (Campaign)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 11:31 PM
I agree with AG on everything...regarding this sub. Go to Comment
The Nutty Professor
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 11:10 PM

Nice plot, I wish I had used it, gender, race and cultural identity switching could also prove quite amusing.  


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The Nutty Professor
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-23 11:11 PM
yes why is the score so low if you got 2 5s? Go to Comment
Androgari Moor
Locations  (Any)   (Ruins)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-07 04:28 AM

"Hordes of Kedion, who wreaked their path of destruction and chaos upon any who happened to be in the way, in pursuit of as yet unclear goals" The Hordes of Kedion the were the PCs weren't they.

"To be especially feared are the vampiric mosquitoes... unless precautions are taken to prevent it." It is best to use blunt weapons against the undead mosquitoes, slashing weapons can wound the beast and there is nothing more dangerous than a wounded mosquito.

"the illustrious Discipline of Safety, a legion of undead soldiers much more powerful than the creatures around them. " Even more powerful than the mosquitoes?! But I imagine it Also illustrious in whose eyes? I mean do the other less undead see the Safety guys marching by with their 'Green Plus Sign' uniforms and Walk/Don't Walk hand signs and just die from envy. But I guess the Discipline of Safety was a prestigious group ...people were just dying to join.

"...are taken into the center of the Moor by well-prepared and brave souls, all of whom must be attired in Gremos heraldic symbols for fear of being attacked on sight" So the undead fluke worms can see...

I don't know what cheka meant by been done before. I mean if every bug that dies in this area comes back than after a few years the sky over the Moor is going be to a sun blocking cloud of undead swarms. Do the higher undead have some sort of society? Cause maybe you could set some sort of up lifting prison drama in this setting, where the witted undead don't escape but they learn to love themselves again.

Anyway, honestly, thought it was ably written and fully realized. Well done sir.

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Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-08 09:37 AM

I think this is a perfect sub because it set a mark (not high mark, just writing up the Fing awesome crossbow from a video game)  and gives it a story, depth and a links it to a culture.

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Cloak of the Daywalker
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-10-29 07:11 PM
There is nothing wrong with this per se, I think it is nicely written and if a story requires an uber powerful item than it requires an uber powerful item. Rejecting something just because it is too powerful is silly. We are not talking about board games, or miniatures, we are talking about roleplaying...collective story telling or just plain story telling. On the upside just having these in the game world raises the threat level of the world. I tempted to give this a 5 just to undue all the "Citadel Dogma" comments. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-05 09:24 AM
Well written extra. I think, while her motivations are left open as Echo and Dragon say, they are then discussed in the plot hook area, Go to Comment
Jardan , the Oak Sage
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-11-09 06:51 PM
This is fun story, reminds me of Moses, the Green lantern, the Blackhood, the Phantom, and others. What I really like about this is how the story justifies the pay off. If you were to write up the fairy mafia with Trent enforcers, people would not buy it, but you story of Jardan takes us there and makes us believe it accept it and see at as a natural extension of the story.

I agree could use some polish, but the goal, execution and style are fantastic. Go to Comment
Lesser Glyph of Change
Items  (Materials)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-08 11:18 AM
I hate random tables in games, but that is just me, I know some people that love them. This post just got run over by gaming snobs at the corner of dogma and bias. It is okay. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-05 04:21 PM
The introduction to the novel "Jitterbug" perfume comes to mind. This is the kind of thing that role-playing as a story telling media was meant to embrace. A bunch of people sitting around a table don't need to get overly attached to or overly serious about the events and ideas (though only telling the story once can make the content a little guarded). Go to Comment
Sicillia the Griffin Tamer
NPCs  (Minor)   (Natural)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-09 07:28 PM
When loki's parents look back at his academic failures and set backs I wonder if they curse the citadel. "Damn you strolen we could have had another ornithologist in the family!" Go to Comment
The Everlasting Cantine
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-09 07:24 PM
Well you have to put the drop of lava in there..that can't be easy. But other stuff molten gold...I have known PCs that would lame this up all day.

Nuttin wrong with it-big mojo, small is all contextual Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-10-04 02:56 PM
Clever, I hope I can use it. Go to Comment
The Road
Locations  (TransWorld)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-10-30 03:46 PM
Nice enough idea. Go to Comment
Dead Silk
Items  (Clothes)   (Cursed)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-17 02:06 PM

Oh this is a good one, we get a cursed item, we get a dangerous spell, we get a gory little story, we get some NPC ideas and we get them all tied together is nice neat little bundle.    

It could see this as a plot device,

Mages are dying all over the court, some think a magical attack, others a curse of the gods (or their judgement) but it is really the pocket silk has somehow found its way to magic academy.  I picture a final fight scene on a windy tower with the silk blowing in the wind, the PCs trying to grab it safely, the vengeful mage hater trying to let it go or maybe an ancestor Mulgar.  

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Return To Me
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-22 01:17 PM

a nice small scale ghost story, complete and very well written.  

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Troll Rations
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-10-16 07:08 PM

 As alchemy was very much a magic and emotional take of chemistry.  I don't know if this is alchemy, this seems more like bringing an element of Sci-fi into the fantasy setting. Which certainly is fine in some settings, but this seems to be based on a clear vanilla D&D troll.  I would be interested to hear what this community has to say about the realism, physics and chemistry versus the themes of a game.  For example clever players may use mend spells to take the natural cracks out of a material such as flint to make it super hard and and sharp.  Does this fit with the theme of the game.

At anyrate nice idea, simple, compact back story and easy to slide into a game.  You stick in some other animal if you don't like trolls, hydra rations or something.




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