I like this, and I am glad I got to read it. It is short, and has the feel of city image post on a smaller scale. I also liked that much of the was communicated by the tone of the piece and the scattered prose of the later paragraphs. This would be a fun place to lead the characters of almost any story. Go to Comment
Using the black arts for good . . .ah that old hat box.
Looking at this old post, makes me think that one could link posts on troupes or themes not just content. I think this post is the simplest form of a classic idea of morality explored with very little detail or packaging. Let say you want to put a message in you campaign about the corrupting influence of evil no matter the context, well this group of "Black Robes" could the carrier of the cliche. I am sure their are other items and society with similarly common and often used messages; the dangers of being a presumptive messiah, the dangers of being taken by the glory of success, the cost of trying to play angles rather than trusting people and so on.
I don't see anything really wrong with this, a lot people critique things as "unrealistic" because they think it won't be as effective as another weapon or concept. These sort of argument ignore that technology is both human and aligned over time. Yeah this may be a crappy weapon, and its use may be a poor tactic, but that doesn't mean it would n't be used. Rather all it means is that the forces of natural selection that drive warfare and invention would eventually phase this out. I also don't think it would be over complicated for fantasy race to make large metal hinge with handles. Go to Comment
A little over brief for a full sub, but I really like the idea. Is that true about Pear wood in chinese mythology, have you seen the Mr. Vampire movies and TV show in which the master uses a peach wood (I believe) sword to fight the undead. Go to Comment
Is her name a play on the word Cornia?
As part of the city, I could see where she'd be useful as part of a noir type campaign, but their just isn't much here. The write up gives you idea of how she might be useful to a person, but almost nothing of the nuances or surprises that interactions with here might bring. A usable but flavorless character. Go to Comment
another 400 words describing his appearance and his inner self (writing the inner self on brainstem driven stoics is a lot tougher than writing the inner self of cerebral drunks)
plus a quote and we had have a publish worthy NPC: something tucked in the back of a supplement. Go to Comment
Came across this via a random link. It is hard to make these side notes stand out, sometimes you just need a write up of a simple place. But this whole thread seems to written with deliberately esoteric tone, which I don't much care for and as far detailed imagery, I know the author has done much more in the past. Go to Comment
These ideas has a lot of promise but it does not build to anything. You have several ideas running through this, but none are that developed.
1)Old city: Great, most cities have an old town, sometimes they are run down sometimes they are the seat of power. So by telling us, "Old City is practically a town unto itself. It has its own little market area, its own water, and its own marshal. The families that live there have lived there for several lifetimes, if not centuries." You tell us nothing we couldn't have extrapolated on our own.
2)The Mayor's office, cute little side note about it. But without a great description of things again it comes to little meaning.
3) The temple, this could be a whole submission. Is the temple still important to people, does it hold a "Pope or Bishop", is the whole Temple used or have sections become forgotten, do the gargoyles live there?
4)The gargoyles: okay the real story here is the link between the Grey Priest, the Mayor and the gargoyles. Maybe if you start with the Grey Priest as insitution, and make the center peice of your old city concept. You could get at the role of the church and the mayor in society, by examining the role of the Grey Prince. You could flesh out the day to day life in Old City and could hint at the views of the gargoyles on the city and humanity. Go to Comment