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Magic System based on Fengshui
Systems  (Mystical)   (Historical)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-02 12:03 PM
First I love that you referenced your source material, would that more people followed your lead in that department when they post non-fiction works on things involving history or physics. Second this is great idea and it is well executed and it adds a depth to magic that is often sorely lacking. In canonical D&D (last time I checked...which was a long while ago) when one casts magic missile there was no explanation of the forces at work that allowed a universe to function that way.

There is an interesting Yin-Yang to this piece though. It is perfect and exciting as it is, but part of what makes it so interesting is that it demands more explanation and work. It could use a human narrative element and more discussion of how these concepts are used hands on. For example could you explain to me step by step how you envision somebody casting a Ren spell? What I like about this is that it takes something that is often treated fairly abstractly in gaming, casting, and grounds it in a metaphysical technology. But the information you present is still a lot of lists. I think placing this all into a single structured write up-either as write up for GM and players or an in world write up would aide in organizing your thoughts.

Overall-i love it-5/5. Go to Comment
Vartanadel
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-14 05:12 PM
I am a big fan of Vartanadel, perhaps its biggest fan. Indeed the Spiked sea is just Vartanadel fan fiction. So know there is much to this and a lot more to the society in your mind. Perhaps you might consider several small write ups. This could be a write up on the Naming. I also realize that this was submitted in a time of transition at the citadel, and perhaps you are not able to give all of your love. I enjoyed what was here, am glad you submitted it, and thinks the culture outlined provides lot of avenues for plot development and allegory. Go to Comment
Vartanadel
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-14 06:34 PM
the double d is a constant theme on this site Go to Comment
Argnid
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-10 04:32 PM
"What are you doing you daft fool, pick up the damn spear!"

Nice! Go to Comment
Pommel Stones Of Vohu Manah And The Breath-takers Mace
Items  (Mystical)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-11 08:15 AM
It because of your catherine spell that I wrote this up, as I worked on a plot using the catherine spell and derivates of the Catherine spell I needed a system by which a spell generated person could carry memory-at least some memory-between summonings. Go to Comment
Trianarianism
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-09 11:29 AM
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Trianarianism
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-09 11:37 AM
This is very intellectual and abstract take on a religion. You have outlined a theological core but given little of the practice of it. Certainly these philosophies of life could be followed by somebody who is looking for direction, meaning or structure-but why make religion out of it?
What do the gods get out of it?
Do the Gods grant powers in your world? If there is no supernatural power associated with this religion what role does it play in society?
Does it effect the moral codes of the land?

I think we really should to write this up as part of a narrative, put this through the crucible of story telling, and see what comes out.

Overall nice one. very cerebral I like it. Go to Comment
Trianarianism
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-09 03:27 PM
I was commenting a what an idea spring board Gossamer had left for you. Writing "you might want to proof read", both brilliant, insightful and articulate. Go to Comment
Trianarianism
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-09 03:35 PM
Well I really enjoy your stories, the one about the smart sword, the serial killer and such all good stuff. I think that stuff, more than listing facts helps to crystalize ideas. Perhaps Bob had a crisis of faith, perhaps Bob is torn between God and Country....whatever. The overall question for everything on this site that is not a story is - Do these ideas revolving around ( in the this case the tri-faith) help you to tell stories? Go to Comment
Trianarianism
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-09 11:06 PM
"axelrowes (might have) suggested"

are my comments unclear? If so I am sincerely disappointed in myself. I will try and make them more pointed and direct in the future.
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Trianarianism
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-09 11:07 PM
I believe in the power and merits of voting and competition Go to Comment
Trianarianism
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-10 04:23 PM
Leaving rambling nonsensical comments is a trap I fall into all too often. I am wary of it.

I like the new story thread. Yeah beaver don't technically eat wood, but they must swallow some wood during all their gnawing, can we really say that the beavers don't eat wood? It adds real hands on feel to the religion and more importantly implies a depth with regard to inner faith conflicts and mores. Shoes forged from nickel and tin.

So let me know if the comments are just nonsense or hard to follow. Go to Comment
My Voting Practices
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-09 08:38 AM
the how but not the why Go to Comment
My Voting Practices
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-10 02:21 PM
Why do you vote?  I am all for the voting and ranking systems, but without your perspective on the nature of site in general and your perceived place in the community we don't get a full picture.  Go to Comment
My Voting Practices
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-10 04:27 PM
so what does a 2.5 mean? Go to Comment
My Voting Practices
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-29 08:48 AM
It does not say why you vote. Even you conclusion say this is how you vote.

Does the voting system contribute positively to the Citadel? Does system of stick and carrots improve the content? What value do you put on the votes that you get?

Could voting system contribute to biased system that excludes certain types of content? Is that a good a thing?

Thanks for playing.

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A Spell Called Catherine
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-06-09 08:59 AM
This is great, let me follow that up with a self indulgent story. I had a similar situation a couple of campaigns ago.One race was summoning humans. So a human could be just minding his or her business and then poof they were summoned to distant land and given instructions by an unknown elf which they felt compelled to obey. The result,  in game, was that the priest character (played by a gamer with no meta-sensisabities...bless him) started to by very concerned for the well being of his summoned creatures. It climaxed when during the final battle of the campaign the priest healed the summoned creature and dismissed him-two things that near gave my meta gamers a stroke. 

I have also always thought that focus of magic on combat to the lack of domestic magic was a little extreme. In a world like the one you present here, in which magic can be sold and has a wholesale, almost mundane, property I would say that once the flood gate of domestic magic is open society's strategies for dealing with problems would change exponentially. Imagine what the psychiatric community could do with charm magics (depression? ZAP!-gone), and would theater even require actors if you had good illusions and summoning spells. Might all of Mendalusus learn that they are all summoned beings!?!?! 

 Ah well excellent stuff...


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Onyx Guardians
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-01 11:10 AM
For a 100 word challenge you wasted your first sentence.


There is an idea here that I would like to see expanded upon; spelling and grammar are passable. Go to Comment
30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-05-15 10:02 AM
This is great idea, really enriches a world. Perhaps deciding on a voice and a theme would give this a little more focus. I am assuming that these exist in a fantasy/iron age type setting. Are you writing this with an in-world voice or meta-voice?

I think a title such as these below would be fun.

"A Traveller's guide to to obscure picto-graphs"

"A catalog of peasant heraldry"

"Commercial Heraldry"

If it is in game/in world voice why is somebody writing this piece?
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Flowers Of Innocence And The Killer Of Undertown
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-05-07 05:51 AM
fixed some typos, no new content Go to Comment
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