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The Men of The March
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 09:04 AM

Excellent, this is sweet, it has a varied tone to the write up and a great deal of depth achieved with a conservation of language.  I could see using this as pit stop in Noir-ish style mystery.  The PC may need some knowledge that only a man of the march has and thus have to find him and break his stride at least briefly-maybe wait for eclipse or something.     

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Parasitic Youth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 08:55 AM

Once again we learn that the ticket to immortality is not worth the price of admission.  Indeed the only thing meant to live forever seems to a be repackaging of that old chestnut.    

But it seems to be a novel mechanism, and that is hard to come up with since this story has been told from the angry and scared man-child in Gilgamesh to the ennui ridden vampires (the ones that didn't date high school students). 

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30 Orcish Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-07 02:30 PM
How is that? Go to Comment
30 Orcish Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-23 12:42 AM

Inspired me to write more orc based stuff

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The Troll Leash
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 09:46 PM
"What would stop a human/elf from capturing an orc, and simply forcing/torturing/magically probing him into spilling the secrets of the Troll Leash?"

Got to leave the PCs something to do, but this would make a great RP scene.

Murometz's aspiring mage stands along the wall at the council of mages as they discuss methods for preparing the Regent's Army for battle with the Duke. The job of the pages is three fold learn from example, keep the goblets full and block the drafts. Murometz's young page shivers, rattling the metal tray and metal pitcher in his hands. The noise was louder than he thought and all the mages turn to look at him.


"Why....why....don't you just ask the Orcs how the leash works......."

Hokum stands and draws his arms as if to cast, but stops and a quizzical look crosses his face. The Elven delegation looks at each other sideways and the Arch Mage opens his mouth as if to speak, but instead just nods his head and says nothing. Hokum sits down and says "Very good, thank you" Go to Comment
30 Orc Gifts (for services rendered)
Articles  (Scenario)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 08:44 PM
I get the feeling you rushed this one, a lot of it is "Orc Item" and then you have stuff like "map" and "secret". Those could be from any group, why can't Gnomes or the Jawa's know which mushrooms to eat. I lacks the a true feel of an alien culture. Go to Comment
30 Halfling Holidays
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 03:37 PM
I was inspired by the list of halfling gifts, if you see any word errors please let me know, I would like to hand this out to my group. Go to Comment
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-07 08:40 PM
Then you should lead with that....

This is a very strong idea and we can use this to discuss some basic and detail minded qualities of a good post. I suggest changing the structure of the first paragraph into a more active voice and will clear thesis sentence.
"The Teleportia Citadel is the last bastion of hope in a world over run by the living dead. It is a well designed, well placed fortress that was serendipitously built upon a natural focus mystical energy. It possess a superior defensive position adopt an isolated Mesa, and it has extensive underground caverns filled with facilities and materials."

Or something with more of a hook to it. Also who is writing this, is this a GM describing a gaming tool or do want to write from the perspective of one of your characters. Go to Comment
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-08 06:19 AM
I don't know if it would be "best", but it would make for a more interesting read. Go to Comment
30 Halfling Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 04:00 PM
Really great stuff thanks, your list gives us as much ethnic culture as it does material culture Go to Comment
Scribblink, Stitcherace, and Rush Fanfic
Locations  (City)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-05 08:25 AM
I agree with Dossta, it needs more, I think you can keep what you have but give us some imagery for the location. Also you need to have a perspective to your writing; who is writing this and why. If it is being written by GMs for GMs than that is fine, but you might accomplish more if you write from the perspective of a person in the game world. As it is now it just a collection of facts (about fiction no less) listed with out narrative or purpose.

Also add some geography to the description. Go to Comment
Heal the Kraken
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:26 AM
I think this is extremely useable, as for the writing do me a favor and rewrite this one sentence

"The parasites were not intelligent beings that directly zombiefied their host to gain power for themselves, they just wanted to feast."

It breaks up the flow of what is otherwise a great submission imo. I love this cause it is flippant, absurd and funny. Krakens are people too....this would have fit so well into my last campaign. The simple, almost children's book type phrasing you use only adds to the tone. Seriously love this. Thanks. Go to Comment
Heal the Kraken
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-01 06:59 AM
I'd forgotten about this one, but I still really enjoy it. Go to Comment
30 Bad Things
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Game Mastering)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:28 AM
After reading this I think I have angered the gods Go to Comment
Random Rush Fanfic
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:38 AM
The Vagueness doesn't bother me regarding the lost Chariot or all that, who knows maybe the gods do silly stuff like make a Chariot out of feathers, glass, air or balsa wood-but why is Ed such a jerk. Couldn't he make copies? Or did the gods intend for the information as to be only read once, like with the Book of Mormon.

Here is an idea, what if Ed didn't really find the letters, what if claims to have found the letters as means to give weight to his ideaology and personal mythos?

So what if the PCs are hired/ordered by the a Big Bad to find the letters, they aren't alone this is kind of like a Holy Grail Quest. All abled men and women of martial talent are ordered by the current power structure to quest for the letters. The PCs find Ed's letters after much trial only to learn that they are blank. Ed may have been a great wizard and scholar, but his career started with a lie. So what do they do? Do they keep questing for the original letters, even though they have no trail to follow, do they inform the world that Ed for all the great moral frame work and influence he was just a fake. The prophet spoke his own mind not the mind of the Gods...that could be a game changer. Or do the PC fake the letters themselves, and take on Ed's mantle.

PLEASE DON'T DELETE this, a lot of people, even veterans of this site delete posts that get poor scores. This hurts the site because it takes away from the dialog that grew from the post. It would be nice to make it more developing ideas than getting gold stars. Go to Comment
Random Rush Fanfic
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-11-01 11:42 AM

It is better. 

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axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-05 02:29 PM
I don't know if it would ruinously expensive.

sorry to pull out such a lame website, but there is other stuff on them out there. Go to Comment
30 Campaign Starters
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-09-29 12:11 PM
I have tried 1-11, 21, 22 and 28. But some version of 18 is generally my standard opening.

This a well put together list and I surprised somebody hasn't done this before. Many of them are in themselves plot or story lines which require that he GM directs the players background a little. You could make a game out of your problem, take a list of character concepts PCs might come up with

Violent, anal retentive and introverted Orcish Swordsman

The Aging Dwarven King looking to find forgiveness or redemption for all the wicked ambition of his youth.

A gnomish wizard who wants to gain a specific prestige class that requires a lot of money.

A brash and talkative young human cleric looking to spread his truth around

A smartass human thief who wants to develop combat her skills and is always looking for a fight

So the players pull these out of hat, now make them a party.....13, 21 and 24 would work, but how do you keep em together? Go to Comment
30 Campaign Starters
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-09-29 03:23 PM
"Most of these use the "adventure finds you" premise, and are intended as a quick way to group the players together. The DM should use these intros to introduce a common objective or common enemy to the players that ties in with the rest of the campaign."

thanks I missed that.... Go to Comment
30 Campaign Starters
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-09-29 03:38 PM
I was being sarcastic, the introduction is fine, the post is fine, you don't need to change a thing. Go to Comment
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Castoria, Land of Shattered Stars

       By: Veretrix

Castoria was once a thriving and prosperous nation, a rich trade center for the surrounding lands. This all changed when, on one fateful night nearly a century ago, the Mist of Eternity rolled in and surrounded the land, obscuring more of the outside world as days and nights passed.

By the time the Mist blocked out the sun, a new light shone during what was assumed to be daytime: The Starpoint Spire, a mysterious place atop Castoria's highest peak in the northern-central region. Some say that there is some sort of building atop the mountain shining the dim "sunlight" onto the land, but it is only ever too bright or too dark to fully make out any structure, not to mention the mountain's immense height.

Not a month after the Spire's light lit up, the stars fell. Flaming rocks and debris from far-flung edges of space plummeted downward onto the eastern region of Castoria. Once the shower subsided, a strange energy from within the fallen stars transformed the eastern lands in what are now known as The Voidwastes, a barren gray land littered with craters and strange alien creatures (these can vary, but I had Pathfinder's Akatas in mind).

To the south, strange mechanism of eldritch origin are again at work after aeons of rest in the Ruins of Kchuthngnl, an ancient city of non-human creation that is estimated by scholars to be no less that five millennia old.

To the west, the once peaceful and serene forest, now known as The Plagued Woods, has been experiencing corruptions of the wildlife and humanoids living there. Some humans have reported creatures that appear not unlike a halfling, except that they can open their mouths to massive proportions to swallow creatures the size of an ogre.

When adventurers and citizens alike try to make an escape from Castoria, they are never seen again, and it is utterly unknown whether they found hopeful sanctuary or agonizing death withing the Mist's depths.

What is unknown to all residents of Castoria is that all of these events occurred because of the actions of a secret but powerful cult loyal to the Elder Gods who call the space between the planes their abhorrent home. The cult still lives on, larger than ever, and their plan is for the alien horrors to incubate and thrive within the dome of mist that now envelops Castoria, so that when the Elder Gods return as the cult's prophecy foretells, they will have an army of blasphemous creation at their disposal that they will use to make war with and enslave the denizens of the Material Plane.

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