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Rod of the Grand Vizier
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 11:33 AM

For a holy item crafted by the members of a theocracy the moral compass of the gods and the relationship of the divine to the item rarely comes into this story.  I dislike the focus on "spells" when discussing divine intervention, but I get the idea behind the item,

"it improves the wizard who wields it but makes the wizard vulnerable to the divine powers of the gods. "  For an item that puts game mechanics first and foremost, it is just okay, not worthy of "fabled place in history"

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Danse Macabre
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 01:25 PM

Again pretty standard stuff, item of great power and evil falls into the wrong hands, there is a red herring and the heros must do battle with the villain wielding the item....but wait all is not as it seems the villain has been altered by the item to become a super villain!!!  A classic really...

But again startibartfast you have done it with style.  Well done. 

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Eye Flies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 01:28 PM

Damn, those are perfect, wish I had em a year ago. 

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Sword of Huran
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 08:40 AM

We get a good idea of the history that person that implemented the the use of the Sword of Huran among the Spellsword Mages wanted to invoke, but we get nothing else.  This another item right up that isn't about the item.   

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The Men of The March
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 09:04 AM

Excellent, this is sweet, it has a varied tone to the write up and a great deal of depth achieved with a conservation of language.  I could see using this as pit stop in Noir-ish style mystery.  The PC may need some knowledge that only a man of the march has and thus have to find him and break his stride at least briefly-maybe wait for eclipse or something.     

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Parasitic Youth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 08:55 AM

Once again we learn that the ticket to immortality is not worth the price of admission.  Indeed the only thing meant to live forever seems to a be repackaging of that old chestnut.    

But it seems to be a novel mechanism, and that is hard to come up with since this story has been told from the angry and scared man-child in Gilgamesh to the ennui ridden vampires (the ones that didn't date high school students). 

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30 Orcish Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-07 02:30 PM
How is that? Go to Comment
30 Orcish Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-23 12:42 AM

Inspired me to write more orc based stuff

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The Troll Leash
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 09:46 PM
"What would stop a human/elf from capturing an orc, and simply forcing/torturing/magically probing him into spilling the secrets of the Troll Leash?"

Got to leave the PCs something to do, but this would make a great RP scene.

Murometz's aspiring mage stands along the wall at the council of mages as they discuss methods for preparing the Regent's Army for battle with the Duke. The job of the pages is three fold learn from example, keep the goblets full and block the drafts. Murometz's young page shivers, rattling the metal tray and metal pitcher in his hands. The noise was louder than he thought and all the mages turn to look at him.


"Why....why....don't you just ask the Orcs how the leash works......."

Hokum stands and draws his arms as if to cast, but stops and a quizzical look crosses his face. The Elven delegation looks at each other sideways and the Arch Mage opens his mouth as if to speak, but instead just nods his head and says nothing. Hokum sits down and says "Very good, thank you" Go to Comment
30 Orc Gifts (for services rendered)
Articles  (Scenario)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 08:44 PM
I get the feeling you rushed this one, a lot of it is "Orc Item" and then you have stuff like "map" and "secret". Those could be from any group, why can't Gnomes or the Jawa's know which mushrooms to eat. I lacks the a true feel of an alien culture. Go to Comment
30 Halfling Holidays
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 03:37 PM
I was inspired by the list of halfling gifts, if you see any word errors please let me know, I would like to hand this out to my group. Go to Comment
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-07 08:40 PM
Then you should lead with that....

This is a very strong idea and we can use this to discuss some basic and detail minded qualities of a good post. I suggest changing the structure of the first paragraph into a more active voice and will clear thesis sentence.
"The Teleportia Citadel is the last bastion of hope in a world over run by the living dead. It is a well designed, well placed fortress that was serendipitously built upon a natural focus mystical energy. It possess a superior defensive position adopt an isolated Mesa, and it has extensive underground caverns filled with facilities and materials."

Or something with more of a hook to it. Also who is writing this, is this a GM describing a gaming tool or do want to write from the perspective of one of your characters. Go to Comment
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-08 06:19 AM
I don't know if it would be "best", but it would make for a more interesting read. Go to Comment
30 Halfling Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 04:00 PM
Really great stuff thanks, your list gives us as much ethnic culture as it does material culture Go to Comment
Scribblink, Stitcherace, and Rush Fanfic
Locations  (City)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-05 08:25 AM
I agree with Dossta, it needs more, I think you can keep what you have but give us some imagery for the location. Also you need to have a perspective to your writing; who is writing this and why. If it is being written by GMs for GMs than that is fine, but you might accomplish more if you write from the perspective of a person in the game world. As it is now it just a collection of facts (about fiction no less) listed with out narrative or purpose.

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Heal the Kraken
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:26 AM
I think this is extremely useable, as for the writing do me a favor and rewrite this one sentence

"The parasites were not intelligent beings that directly zombiefied their host to gain power for themselves, they just wanted to feast."

It breaks up the flow of what is otherwise a great submission imo. I love this cause it is flippant, absurd and funny. Krakens are people too....this would have fit so well into my last campaign. The simple, almost children's book type phrasing you use only adds to the tone. Seriously love this. Thanks. Go to Comment
Heal the Kraken
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-01 06:59 AM
I'd forgotten about this one, but I still really enjoy it. Go to Comment
30 Bad Things
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Game Mastering)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:28 AM
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Random Rush Fanfic
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:38 AM
The Vagueness doesn't bother me regarding the lost Chariot or all that, who knows maybe the gods do silly stuff like make a Chariot out of feathers, glass, air or balsa wood-but why is Ed such a jerk. Couldn't he make copies? Or did the gods intend for the information as to be only read once, like with the Book of Mormon.

Here is an idea, what if Ed didn't really find the letters, what if claims to have found the letters as means to give weight to his ideaology and personal mythos?

So what if the PCs are hired/ordered by the a Big Bad to find the letters, they aren't alone this is kind of like a Holy Grail Quest. All abled men and women of martial talent are ordered by the current power structure to quest for the letters. The PCs find Ed's letters after much trial only to learn that they are blank. Ed may have been a great wizard and scholar, but his career started with a lie. So what do they do? Do they keep questing for the original letters, even though they have no trail to follow, do they inform the world that Ed for all the great moral frame work and influence he was just a fake. The prophet spoke his own mind not the mind of the Gods...that could be a game changer. Or do the PC fake the letters themselves, and take on Ed's mantle.

PLEASE DON'T DELETE this, a lot of people, even veterans of this site delete posts that get poor scores. This hurts the site because it takes away from the dialog that grew from the post. It would be nice to make it more developing ideas than getting gold stars. Go to Comment
Random Rush Fanfic
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-11-01 11:42 AM

It is better. 

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A Game of...Saplings?

       By: rickster

(Apologies to GRRM and HBO)

A group of northerners want to bring the Old Gods back to the south. They grow cuttings from the white trees seeking the blessings of the Old Gods on the project, and when the saplings are big enough, they carve faces in them and secretly plant them in forests all over the south, to extend the 'reach' of the Old Gods.

The plan works of course, but the trees are *baby gods*, and behave as such when invoked.

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