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The Troll Leash
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 09:46 PM
"What would stop a human/elf from capturing an orc, and simply forcing/torturing/magically probing him into spilling the secrets of the Troll Leash?"

Got to leave the PCs something to do, but this would make a great RP scene.

Murometz's aspiring mage stands along the wall at the council of mages as they discuss methods for preparing the Regent's Army for battle with the Duke. The job of the pages is three fold learn from example, keep the goblets full and block the drafts. Murometz's young page shivers, rattling the metal tray and metal pitcher in his hands. The noise was louder than he thought and all the mages turn to look at him.


"Why....why....don't you just ask the Orcs how the leash works......."

Hokum stands and draws his arms as if to cast, but stops and a quizzical look crosses his face. The Elven delegation looks at each other sideways and the Arch Mage opens his mouth as if to speak, but instead just nods his head and says nothing. Hokum sits down and says "Very good, thank you" Go to Comment
30 Orc Gifts (for services rendered)
Articles  (Scenario)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 08:44 PM
I get the feeling you rushed this one, a lot of it is "Orc Item" and then you have stuff like "map" and "secret". Those could be from any group, why can't Gnomes or the Jawa's know which mushrooms to eat. I lacks the a true feel of an alien culture. Go to Comment
30 Halfling Holidays
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 03:37 PM
I was inspired by the list of halfling gifts, if you see any word errors please let me know, I would like to hand this out to my group. Go to Comment
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-07 08:40 PM
Then you should lead with that....

This is a very strong idea and we can use this to discuss some basic and detail minded qualities of a good post. I suggest changing the structure of the first paragraph into a more active voice and will clear thesis sentence.
"The Teleportia Citadel is the last bastion of hope in a world over run by the living dead. It is a well designed, well placed fortress that was serendipitously built upon a natural focus mystical energy. It possess a superior defensive position adopt an isolated Mesa, and it has extensive underground caverns filled with facilities and materials."

Or something with more of a hook to it. Also who is writing this, is this a GM describing a gaming tool or do want to write from the perspective of one of your characters. Go to Comment
Locations  (Fortification)   (Plains)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-08 06:19 AM
I don't know if it would be "best", but it would make for a more interesting read. Go to Comment
30 Halfling Gifts (For Services Rendered)
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 04:00 PM
Really great stuff thanks, your list gives us as much ethnic culture as it does material culture Go to Comment
Scribblink, Stitcherace, and Rush Fanfic
Locations  (City)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-05 08:25 AM
I agree with Dossta, it needs more, I think you can keep what you have but give us some imagery for the location. Also you need to have a perspective to your writing; who is writing this and why. If it is being written by GMs for GMs than that is fine, but you might accomplish more if you write from the perspective of a person in the game world. As it is now it just a collection of facts (about fiction no less) listed with out narrative or purpose.

Also add some geography to the description. Go to Comment
Heal the Kraken
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:26 AM
I think this is extremely useable, as for the writing do me a favor and rewrite this one sentence

"The parasites were not intelligent beings that directly zombiefied their host to gain power for themselves, they just wanted to feast."

It breaks up the flow of what is otherwise a great submission imo. I love this cause it is flippant, absurd and funny. Krakens are people too....this would have fit so well into my last campaign. The simple, almost children's book type phrasing you use only adds to the tone. Seriously love this. Thanks. Go to Comment
Heal the Kraken
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-01 06:59 AM
I'd forgotten about this one, but I still really enjoy it. Go to Comment
30 Bad Things
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Game Mastering)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:28 AM
After reading this I think I have angered the gods Go to Comment
Random Rush Fanfic
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-04 09:38 AM
The Vagueness doesn't bother me regarding the lost Chariot or all that, who knows maybe the gods do silly stuff like make a Chariot out of feathers, glass, air or balsa wood-but why is Ed such a jerk. Couldn't he make copies? Or did the gods intend for the information as to be only read once, like with the Book of Mormon.

Here is an idea, what if Ed didn't really find the letters, what if claims to have found the letters as means to give weight to his ideaology and personal mythos?

So what if the PCs are hired/ordered by the a Big Bad to find the letters, they aren't alone this is kind of like a Holy Grail Quest. All abled men and women of martial talent are ordered by the current power structure to quest for the letters. The PCs find Ed's letters after much trial only to learn that they are blank. Ed may have been a great wizard and scholar, but his career started with a lie. So what do they do? Do they keep questing for the original letters, even though they have no trail to follow, do they inform the world that Ed for all the great moral frame work and influence he was just a fake. The prophet spoke his own mind not the mind of the Gods...that could be a game changer. Or do the PC fake the letters themselves, and take on Ed's mantle.

PLEASE DON'T DELETE this, a lot of people, even veterans of this site delete posts that get poor scores. This hurts the site because it takes away from the dialog that grew from the post. It would be nice to make it more developing ideas than getting gold stars. Go to Comment
Random Rush Fanfic
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-11-01 11:42 AM

It is better. 

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axlerowes's comment on 2014-04-05 02:29 PM
I don't know if it would ruinously expensive.

sorry to pull out such a lame website, but there is other stuff on them out there. Go to Comment
30 Campaign Starters
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-09-29 03:23 PM
"Most of these use the "adventure finds you" premise, and are intended as a quick way to group the players together. The DM should use these intros to introduce a common objective or common enemy to the players that ties in with the rest of the campaign."

thanks I missed that.... Go to Comment
30 Campaign Starters
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-09-29 03:38 PM
I was being sarcastic, the introduction is fine, the post is fine, you don't need to change a thing. Go to Comment
30 Campaign Starters
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-09-29 12:11 PM
I have tried 1-11, 21, 22 and 28. But some version of 18 is generally my standard opening.

This a well put together list and I surprised somebody hasn't done this before. Many of them are in themselves plot or story lines which require that he GM directs the players background a little. You could make a game out of your problem, take a list of character concepts PCs might come up with

Violent, anal retentive and introverted Orcish Swordsman

The Aging Dwarven King looking to find forgiveness or redemption for all the wicked ambition of his youth.

A gnomish wizard who wants to gain a specific prestige class that requires a lot of money.

A brash and talkative young human cleric looking to spread his truth around

A smartass human thief who wants to develop combat her skills and is always looking for a fight

So the players pull these out of hat, now make them a party.....13, 21 and 24 would work, but how do you keep em together? Go to Comment
30 Campaign Starters
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-01 07:34 AM
I think most groups that have been playing together for a while will make characters as group. But I am sure we have played a night or a couple of campaigns with "random" groups. And with random groups you often have people joining who to play a specific character or may have different vision of game play than the other people at the table. Some people would shy away from this or dismiss the unruly gamers as power gamers or failed actors, but what when I saw this post I saw it as a call to arms. Perhaps even the beginning of a manifesto, DOSSTA HAS SAID TO US THAT WE AS GMs NEED NOT TURN A PLAYER AWAY. WE SHOULD REJECT NO CHARACTER CONCEPT *that fits reasonably well into the mechanics and genre our specific game*

I don't see any trouble with these starts other than they may not be the right start for your campaign. But these are just starts, without the characters it may be hard to flesh out. Thus I again offer a challenge, a game if you will, we fill a hat with 60 character concepts and then we pick 5 and pick a "start" then we write an exposition that reasonably connects all the characters without significantly altering their backstory. Go to Comment
The Tower of Light
Locations  (Fortification)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-09-29 12:19 PM
With the revolving door afterlife in many game worlds, this could used as a in game tool to "really" kill somebody. The threat of death by this device or the potential to use this device themselves could constantly be hanging over the PCs. It is nice brief description and purposely vague, i like that.

Also what if the people don't die, what if they end up at the base of another tower thousands or millions of miles away, only this tower is damaged and lies largely in ruins? Go to Comment
The Tower of Light
Locations  (Fortification)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-09-29 02:56 PM
Escaping from the Tower of Light could be the brightest feather in the cap of an accomplished rogue or escape artist. And what self respecting brigand needs foot holds to scale a wall? Go to Comment
The Tower of Light
Locations  (Fortification)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2011-05-30 11:18 AM
These types of comments really burn my toast. I am bothered when the critique focuses on how some aspect of the write up is unintuitive to the reader, and thus the reader labels it is unrealistic. I ask anyone who begins a comment with the line

“Any ruler would make laws against such magic”

or “mages, being naturally distrustful”

or “Couldn’t this be undone by a simple dispel magic incantation”

or any such line that adds new information as part the argument to consider three things.

First almost every write up on this site reflects a single moment in time. Even bad or unsustainable ideas have their day. Perhaps all the flaws you see in the item or system are valid. These are things that can be exploited by the PCs or suggests an instability which adds drama to the item.

Second, treat the write up as cannon. When you drop it into your own game, you can and will change things. If somebody says that Ogres are running into battle with giant scissors, then they are. Even if giant scissors are the least effective piece of military hardware since blue body paint, it is a “fact” in the universe of the post.

Three, I think suggesting new information to include in the use of the idea is fantastic. Expanding on the idea is also fantastic. But adding new information to justify criticism is banal and short sighted. So to state that “wizards and mages would”, is adding new information. It is making a conclusion about the nature of people in the world or the setting of the post. I enjoy posts more when, instead of trying to analyze the post in terms of my prejudices and experiences regarding speculative fiction, I try and glean information about the world in which this post exists.

Finally to authors about to respond to such comments; just remember that all cement is wet until it meets the PCs. So don’t get all up in arms about what the item or monster “actually does”. (though this main seem to contradict point two, I just speaking to the limitation of this medium) Focus on what you want it to do, and what it is you wanted to communicate. I feels odd to say this, but all that exists as far as the site is concerned, is the write up and linked write ups.

There is my four cents.
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