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Samahhi; Sama's Word
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Campaign Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-10-13 10:59 AM
This is awesome, this all a cleric type character needs. And by reading these short blurbs an image of a culture begins to form. This is great work. Go to Comment
Blossom of Rage
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-03-02 04:15 PM


"And every cowboy sings a sad sad song"



Two things really got me excited here, one was the post, I am not going to dissect it cause it hits the mark perfectly. Yes you could build on all this, write up the culture associate with the plant, and all that but I like that you hit the mark so well.  The second thing that geeked me was that there is a Sybiotic Plant free text.  



This was/is great thanks.


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Blossom of Rage
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-03-02 04:16 PM


Symbiotic Plant Free Text



 



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Anodyne Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-23 06:27 AM


This is a lot like Gideon's Mercy, with the snake on the hilt and similar powers.  These swords could be fun items and you put some cultural weight behind them which is very nice. 



Some Edits



 



IN POST “the Duke though the man to have given him a playful jab to the midsection before he moved on the market.”



 



I think “though” should be “thought”



 



IN POST “Gnoccio was such a boisterous, and often touching of others type of person.”



Slightly awkward transition here, so we must assume that Duke had this opinion of the Gnoccio.  May I suggest moving the order of information around like this



"The Duke was acquainted with Gnoccio and knew him to be a boisterous person and gregarious person; often roughly touching or slapping others in fun.  As Gnoccio departed the Duke thought the man to have given him a playful jab to the midsection the man, until the Duke staggered and was shocked to find his silk doublet soaked with blood, and a 14-inch gash starting just above his groin and stopping just short of his ribs.



Or change it all together so that we are clearer about the nature of the Duke and Gnoccio’s exchange.



IN POST “so sure was he of his own style, he though his foe incompetent until he himself stumbled.”



I think so should be capitalized and though should be thought. Also I think it would be help to put some transition in here to note that you are no longer talking about Tekene in general, but are now discussing the specific duel in which he died.



 



iN POST “He would then dispatch those he had contract to kill with a quick thrust into the heart, leaving the to simply die whilst still dreaming”



I think there should be an a before contract or “those he had been contracted to kill”



 



But again, nice item, useful and fun, the cultural weight behind it (weapon lore) makes the post much more intereting than the item alone.

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Anodyne Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-23 08:59 AM
PM returned.
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30 Criminals
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Criminal/Espionage)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-04-17 10:10 PM
I agree with CP and moon, this is weak sauce, still useable, just not a very sophisticated tool. great for people that don't like to read and prefer just to scan text. Go to Comment
Iacon
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Country/ State)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-14 04:31 PM
Damn good. It smacks of the Terror in france with the new intellectuals killing all the old intellectuals.

The Peasents: Not being educated in a secular fashion, the peasentary is unable to imagine a world with out religion. And with the science of the day not being able to give all the explainations that we take for granted the people again begin to see supernatural hands in things such as illnesses, bouts of insomnia, and the weather. But instead of praying to the old gods, they have begun to pray to the Wizard Frost. And indeed a less than chivilrac Bard has been traveling the rural settlements claiming to be a Disciple of the Wizard, and delivering seromns outlining his will. The PCs are charged by the Wizard himself not only with tracking done the Bard but dissmissing any claims of the Wizards divine status. Go to Comment
Hamako the Black
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-04-10 01:56 PM
This has a very nice fable quality to it, and would be an interesting minor subplot. Go to Comment
The Grinder
Dungeons  (Other)   (Rooms/ Halls)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-12 05:22 AM
Well I learned a little about the Kayeed. Go to Comment
30 Knights
NPCs  (Extras)   (Combative)
axlerowes's comment on 2009-03-17 02:59 PM
After just reading 30 firemen I was extremely underwhelmed by this one. Just few bits of flair could have made this a great resource, some heraldry , more talk of fighting styles, description of the mounts or family background.

I'd really like to see this redone. Go to Comment
30+ Kings
NPCs  (Extras)   (Political)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-03-24 09:23 PM
The is a long list of rulers with little expansion on or exploration of the rulers or the governments they created. I enjoyed the quick review of mytho-historical characters, and while it is tempting to argue your view of Mussolini or whether a Plato, King could be disinterested in politics and still be interested in being a good leader, those are only disagreements of phrase or word choice. Your points are made clearly Go to Comment
30+ Kings
NPCs  (Extras)   (Political)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-31 07:17 AM


The Baron:



This King took an oath loyalty to another King before he conquered his current Kingdom. He is still a landed Baron in another Kingdom, responsible for taxes and duty bound to obey his King. But he is also a King in his own right and the interests of his two realms may come into conflict.

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Fort Port
Locations  (City)   (Water)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-21 03:30 PM
Very nice, if your are playing/running a tightly regulated feudal society the PCs would love to slide into such an unregulated center of commerce. Go to Comment
30 Police Officers
NPCs  (Extras-Horde)   (Criminal/Espionage)
axlerowes's comment on 2012-02-29 05:13 AM


It is nice to have these all on a well formatted list.


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Time-Wine
Items  (Potion)   (Non-Magical)
axlerowes's comment on 2014-03-30 08:00 AM
First of all great item for problem solving PCs and a great plot device for stories with a farce or comedy bent. I can't believe nobody thought of it sooner! I also like the way you took an item and integrated into your world. Thanks,

*lies on the floor in the utmost humility*

Please forgive me for pointing this out, but 'varieties' is spelled wrong in the first paragraph. Go to Comment
axlerowes's comment on 2012-12-28 11:14 AM
love the teaser Go to Comment
Stop Buying All That Crap!
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-13 11:19 AM


So what is this going to be about?


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Fountain of Goats
Locations  (Ruins)   (Desert)
axlerowes's comment on 2010-10-06 03:26 PM
I love reading things that strike me as completely original, I know this post has already gotten a lot of love, but I will give it a little more.

How did you come up with this? Go to Comment
Spirit World
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Defining)
axlerowes's comment on 2013-01-06 02:47 PM
I really like the ideas behind what you are describing here. Though the description lacks a personal touch, more like a description of a description. But this is great platform for new ideas and different directions. Full disclosure, i have not read the user submitted ideas. But I think this is sweet idea, smoothly realized. Go to Comment
The Silenced Ones
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
axlerowes's comment on 2006-09-14 02:47 PM
They can eat, but can they drink. Might you find these tortured souls hanging out alongside distilleries or vineyards?

Also what of their written works, wouldn't their stories be full of secretes of the realm. Or could they keep up a correspondence with memebers of the living world. Could one these thing live a life entirely through written messages; letter, journals, graffiti etc? Go to Comment
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