I enjoyed this one, solid idea and original details. A good launching point for future explorations of the people and the setting.
With great humility and acknowledge of mine lack of proof reading: I think this sentence came out wrong
"Though they are seen in the great cities of man where they come to play and trade as urbane - if somewhat strange - the rural towns along the edges of the Great Tangle." Go to Comment
I have inserted lots images in the past, check out my old post ;), but when I have done it with links they often fail eventually (i think most of the links in "magical songs" are now dead. . So in the past I have uploaded the images to the citadel and then selected the image from my catalog of images. I have been able to use that function. Go to Comment
It is the same setting. After I created this setting, which has been sitting in a notebook for years, I used the Traveller rule book to randomly generate solar systems. Those generators and tables give you a planet type, star type, star port type, population, politic situation (civil war, monarchy), tech level, and number of factions on the planet. Blackwatch started as a series of numbers that indicated a planet with low gravity, no atmosphere, no water, less than a 1000 people, a star port, three factions and a civil war. I enjoyed expanding on these Traveller randoms. I suggest you try it.
I may put together a submission region. Never done that before, wish I could do an interactive graphic like we almost did for Decathros. Go to Comment
This is a good one! I like the plot hook elements of this item tempting the eldritch beings by distorting reality. It makes the wearer seem not only "kind of invisible" but also kind of bad ass. Wearing an Utterblack cloak about town says "Not only could be I standing unseen in the corner of your bedroom with several inches to play with, but I am willing to tempt the elder gods to do it."
This line kind of shows you are though
"stylish blue and gold mage's robe exterior"
All the stylish mages are wearing animal print this season. Go to Comment
This is a nice note, and the setting has a nice mixture of the mundane and the fantastic. You laid out the bare bones of county with history, pride, mystery, unorganized power and perhaps a long history of internal strife (assuming the people at the time this writing still remember all this stuff). Are you planning to build on this? Go to Comment
This is fantastic (more people should read it). I am a fan of novel creation myths for the "D&D hetro normal" setting and this is great one. As I can see it you took the typical fantasy cannon-dwarves Dragons an so on-and worked backwards to create this myth. I also like how subtle yet dramatic the value embodied by each " diety" and instrument is, this is really great. I loved the magical song examples. Go to Comment
As series of archetypes this is solid, but I don't think adding a little specific personality or story to each guy...kind of like you did for Shipman...would take away from this. There is an argument, made by real writers not myself, that an irony of prose is that the more specific a description the more accessible it becomes. Go to Comment