I like the idea and it's a good setting. Jousts and fairs are commonly used in rpg's, but I've never been to an rpg horse race, which makes this seem neat to me. I've never been to a real horse race either, but this doesn't sound to me like it has much that is original. I take aaway a concept I like "let's put an adventure in a horse race setting" and it adds an element of reality to the world (townspeople arent always selling swords to passers-by and farming) but I don't get much more than if the whole post had been "horse race setting." Go to Comment
I like it. It's a lot of work to put into a house-building hammer, but maybe it was a big ceremony and a historical peace between the races (I mean, to be a great hammer, and also magic to make it ghost through people.. the second part of that isnt trivial) Go to Comment
I like it. Not too powerful (depending on how often the wind shield comes up and how strong it is... I would make it probably very good against missles, but not so effective against melee strikes wind will effect a sword less than an arrow) and subtle. It also carries with it a penalty, and a creative one at that. The detachment seems to fit with the item. Go to Comment
I like the underlying idea a good amount, but would have to change a lot to use it. The beginnng is a good story, but presupposes a fair amount about the party. It would be cool to have more info about Mes - why is he there, what does he want (ultimately and on lesser levels), how was he created? what tactics will he use? but like i said , the underlying idea is nice and provides a good place for jumping-off. Go to Comment
I like the idea. As Ylorea says, the item doesn't quite make sense (even a person at 6 times the size still has a density WAY more than air, and coins, blocks, swords, etc. are much denser... But ignoring science is fine for a good idea.
The intro is good, but jumps aroudn a little to me. Especially the transition from 1st to 2nd paragraph seems sudden.
Nice history. I like where you suggest the madness could be magical.. or not. How did Niavon come to find human and elf advisors? Is the land multi-racial, or is this unusual (and how is it seen by others). Why does Niavon want to defeat Siluria (before he went crazy)? Does he feel it is unfinished business? Do they have riches? Is it revenge? He took over for people who waged war carelessly, and then did so himself... so I guess he was more upset at the council for losing than for philosophy... Go to Comment
The items are pretty plain, but you did a really good job with the back story, which adds a lot in my book. I especially like the names you gave the swords - they sound very elvish to me :-) Go to Comment
I really like the idea of a local weather system over a small geography. Any players wandering upon that should immediately be curious ... and afraid. It's a pretty simple idea so I don't know why I like it so much, but I really do. Go to Comment
I like the background a lot. The powers seem a bit much (hasting and bezerking a large number of people... etc.) But I can always change them to my pleasure and other people seem to like them more :o) Go to Comment
Solid item with open-ended (aka DM controlled) powers. I think it would be very nice to make it clear to the PC this was dangerous, but not give him/her what was possible... the PCs might be afraid to use it even to do simple things like light a campfire... that's a great way to control it.. better than actually punishing them for overuse is to make them so afraid they dont use it much ;-p Go to Comment
I love this idea. I think I might have been one of the barbarian horde comments, because I wanted to comment on it even before I had joined the citadel. In addition to being joyfully evil I think it can help players develop their skill at role-playing... sometimes it's always the same old. One thing I have tried is to let players switch characters is they want, or even to switch roles with NPCs. Most players don't do this, they really like their character. But some people like to act and like the chance to change roles, and are more about the story than seeing "their" character get stronger and develop. As GM, it's easy to wind the story around such that a player who decides to start role-playing what used to be an NPC can become more important (at least for a while). Of course this only works with a mature group of people... but it can be fun when it works. Go to Comment
Tämbourine is firmly placed on my back ,to unsheathe this sword I simply have to say "re clouse" meaning come to me or i can just reach over and unsheathe it the old fashioned way. This sword was created to my liking tambourine is made of raw-like metals I found in different regions as I begun to forge the metals together, I’ve noticed that the raw metal materials were different pieces to a wide variety of swords that were used the past and present, being so most blades have a sheer grey texture Tambourine’s blade became black as the depths of the oceans. The blade expands to 6” which weighs 426lbs the sapphire jewel placed on the tip of hilt (upper middle center of the base) it emits a aura texture of purple which weighs 24lbs the jewel is un-breakable it negates magic for tambourine has a mind of its own only belonging to me it finds a worthy opponents who doesn’t use magic or any type of power to their liking which I can agree with(who would want an opponent that abuses their powers to kill for no reason or to avoid dying by honor tambourine fights with honor and accepts its glory or defeat) I’ve named the sapphire Sophia because not only that its rare and radiant it resembles my burning passion for my love Sophia. I made the hilt to be a length of 15 inches its frame is created with fine katchin (very thick and heavy metal) it alone weighs 50 pounds its texture is black like mixture of, I made it to be a cruciform hilt so it has room for two hands. I I made the blades hilt aprox. 2”, the blade is double-edged but the left side of the swords frame can block and or negate ones attack if needed, it weights 500lbs making it nearly unmovable. To go up against this sword is to quickly find your own death. Tambourine is a twin sword to Terra.