A couple squirrels have escaped their keeper and met some other feral squirrels in the nearby woods. Over time, the feral squirrels adapted their ways to the trained ones and now they rob haphazardly throughout the woods. From pick pocketing sleeping travelers to taking stuff off of resting carriages, nobody is safe.
Because they have no master to take it to, and after they kept the soft things for their lair, the rest is strewn randomly throughout the forest, dropped whenever they get tired of carrying it or when it falls out of their mouth/paws.
Many children (and even more adults) have gotten very lucky finding jewelry walking through the woods so it has become a popular past-time of the locals. Whenever they hear of a new robbery, most of the locals sneak out into the woods to do a walking search. Few, if any, would ever tell those that were robbed about the situation. Go to Comment
When you say "parasites" on a beast this large, there will be nothing small about them. You could have entire cities and countries of parasite humans amid its valleys and crevices and it wouldn't even notice.
And the fact that it is awake for 400 years? What kind of disaster would it leave in its path as it makes its travels? It would be a swath of complete and devastating destruction along its path. Damage that would not repair itself through natural weather for 100s of years. I am not sure why there wouldn't be writings on it all over the world. At 30 miles high and several hundred miles long, it would cut a path of death during its 400 years that would announce itself to almost every living creature. I am trying to comprehend a creature the size of the state of Maryland walking around for 400 years and it hurts my brain.
The intro is fabulous, but I am not sure the size matches with the rest of the submission. Go to Comment
1) As a room in a dungeon crawl. It is great to have a well detailed room with descriptions of the contents and stuff. The detail would give the GM a chance to showcase the location and give the PCs something to do for a bit.
2) As a NPC this has a good baseline of who this person is and what his personality is associated with the room. Slap a submission up on Corvin and it will all come together I think. Go to Comment
I was ho-hum till the last paragraph myself. Good legends, nice thoughts, but the kicker that tied it altogether and caught me off guard was what it truly is. "until they are too wretched and tired and magic-deprived to do anything but watch"
Hackers stealing the city was the key to this one. Love that idea and the fact that all have gone so inward that those in the physical world were so scarce that there was nobody left to maintain or protect these things. Great vision of a interesting future.
Only a little confused how they think cutting of Edotown will help destroy the rest of the Poly. Would see them loading VR virii into visitors and sending them out would make more sense for that goal. But if they just wanted VR cash and grow in power in Poly, then hijacking a city makes sense. Either way, the entire idea gives tons of options to play around with so there is no right answer, just a great scenario. Go to Comment
I like the debrief too. A shame but we have all had campaigns where this has happened. Either we are wanting something shiny or the players fade to the point where you don't have the background of experience with the running game that would allow replacements.
Are you going to try and do maybe one more session with the players to do an interactive type overview and finish up the plots or just leave it? Go to Comment
I love the rune planting and delayed affect. That could be useful in dozens of ways and could really bring out some fun roleplaying. Is it only one at a time or could I run down a hallway smacking walls and the unleash mass destruction? Unsure if I would allow that but it would fun! Go to Comment
Good solid foundation as you mentioned. I like the idea that it can't work on smaller mechs and ships. I like that limitation. Since it only works on large areas, the mirror affect may still have a way of being noticed by other special technology maybe not created (or known) yet. Solid balance and believable. Go to Comment
I find it plenty logical in the context of the submission. As long as it makes sense in the boundaries of its internal logic, I can easily suspend belief. Having trouble trying to frame your argument with that in mind. Anything on the site wouldn't make sense if you imposed outside logic and beliefs into it.
Loss of space, expansion, etc would mean very little to a city that was developed to be the Holy City of Trianarianism. Go to Comment
I read it twice but was still confused as I went through it. Just general ideas seem partially explored leaving me expecting something to add clarity. It is clear you know the character but not sure we got it all. I could see this being a solid 4 with a little work. Go to Comment