Strolen\s Citadel content. 
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Space)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-16 07:44 PM
A little bonus for the just as interesting couple comments that accompany it. I am not a SF person so, aside from Godzilla, this is one of the first time the planet as an egg thing has crossed my eyes.

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Dungeons  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Rooms/ Halls)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-16 07:50 PM
Awesome adventure with a fun back story. Can see it being a perfect evening while playing the chosen music in the background (which I did as I read it).

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USSS Ticonderoga
Locations  (Other)   (Space)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-22 12:54 PM
I think there is sometimes a gap between choosing to suspend your disbelief and refusing to suspend disbelief.

Cold War? The post is vague enough that any number of scenarios could be come up from creation of another uber Earth bound weapon to create a standstill to some kind of diplomatic solution to a false sense of militaristic security that who cares if they have nukes, not going to touch us. Then the hack came...oops. Just seems narrow minded to just say no, this won't work.

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Something Weird cart
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 10:36 AM
I love the idea. Gave a vote bonus for the creativity of it as I can't recall ever hearing about a usage of current items in a situation like this. Very fun. I can see players casting all kinds of spells. Is it magical? Is it warm to the touch? etc etc. What would they do with a lava lamp. LOL!

Especially good if they don't know you are describing a current item. Then, when they finally ask the stupid question, "Is it scotch tape?" do you answer IC or OOC? LOL

I think I know the answer. Do the Blackhawks use it?

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25 Horses
Dungeons  (Any)   (Puzzles)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 09:37 AM
Had to reread it, and the comments. But once it clicked it made perfect sense. I would dump the 10-15 feet reference all together and actually describe what a knight's move is just to clear any ambiguity. When you say they have to be a knight's move from each other on each move, that is pretty clear then.

The dots and lines forcing an order are fun too. Good puzzle!

Doesn't have to be life size either, just as good on a table to open a secret door. Go to Comment
Khasikarana Island
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 11:52 AM
Random thoughts as I read the sub. Some were prior to catching the end where it seems some loose ends were hastily tied. This isn't a sign of me not liking it, my mind spins as they read these and the more it spins, the more it has entranced me so it gets more attention.

Genitals. I assumed it was going to be on the ship to clear the ship to leave. Like the blood would have to fall on the wood in order for the curse to recognized a "pardoned" ship and release it from the harbor. Doing it inland made me wonder if this eunuch could allow any ship in and out from now on. Or if they don't survive much longer after they leave. The eunuch always dies. Otherwise they may allow ships to have continuous safe passage to the island.

So the severing is for the island to alleviate the curse upon them. So why does the curse assist them in trapping the ship? Seems that the curse wouldn't care to help them, it is a curse. Does the bhakhanara cause the trapped ship and the bhakhanara releases the ship once they have the sacrifice? The islanders can't escape the curse but they can do things to assist them in fighting it. Perhaps the machimara can cause storms bringing in ships. The islanders can just say it is part of the curse makes sense of that.

The last is that they can't talk about it. If the entire crew knows about it, just can't they gag when they try and speak? do they die? do they stutter? Any number of clues would cause a concern to others.

Better would be that they lose all memory as soon as the sacrifice is given. Once the stump is healed then they all go into a fugue state where they can either safely sail their ship out without really comprehending (but also not questioning) or are brought to the village where they have been resting and wake up to another day...and the winds have died. The eunuch would be the only one with issues, but it would all be taken into account by a memory wipe to a point (or death as mentioned). All they remember is a pleasant visit to another island once back on the ocean.

The ship disappearing speaks of great magic to me which isn't justified by the limited curse. I would be looking for a great larger force of magic and/or evil to be in place to cause the vanishing of a ship due to the curse. Just seems out of place.

Don't get me wrong, really enjoyed it and it was a great write-up. Just seems like there were some things forced without proper explaining just to make it work. I can suspend disbelief, just has to make sense in context of the world....Plus, I like thinking about things. Some of this might have a better place in the idea section above if I fleshed out my thoughts a little more. Hmm. Go to Comment
The Palestra
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Any)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 12:00 PM
I am always a fan of these color type submissions. You can instantly deposit one or all into any world or location to give it some personality that makes "you enter another town" type scenarios memorable. Great additions! Go to Comment
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Any)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 12:07 PM
Good set of personalities but I did find myself wanting more with each one, especially Lywyn. I can come up with the rest that I have questions about or that need expanding on, but would be nice if some additional information was provided to help bring them more to life.

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Arachnartids, the Slaves of Felenthur
Society/ Organizations  (Unique)   (Desert)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 12:17 PM
I think I was confused through most of it. I need a family tree to understand who begots who and what that means. And if Bsuma is the only one that gives birth to hybrids then they must be very rare and probably more special?

I was waiting for a payoff for the parasites in the head. That got my attention but then there was no real benefit of having written. They get rights but then don't want them. Wasn't fleshed out very well.

Overall, I don't really get it. More of a who has sex with who sub and I couldn't complete the lineage (or importance of it) through the text. Go to Comment
Compatible Time Travel
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Players)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 12:28 PM
Very well presented and incredibly useful if you wanted to introduce time travel in a game.

I was thinking of the movie "Knowing" and trying to figure out where that would fit. Seems like a cross between the first two. I like how that movie uses the choice tree and maybe the shadows we see are him just using Presage over and over.

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Tangrams (or Seven Piece Puzzles)
Dungeons  (Any)   (Puzzles)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 12:38 PM
A great prop that can be introduced to the game. Love the idea! Go to Comment
Of Domes
Locations  (Other)   (Any)
Strolen's comment on 2015-08-02 12:45 PM
Satisfying education on domes! Go to Comment
Phantom Paths
Dungeons  (Any)   (Puzzles)
Strolen's comment on 2015-07-04 12:21 PM
Outstanding puzzle. Bonus for introducing me to Tikz.

Great graphics makes it easy to follow along. Well done!!

You could probably add this to the Old School Quest if you so desired. It would fit in there wonderfully. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Strolen's comment on 2015-07-04 12:39 PM
Just enough to peak the curiosity and let our minds wander. Pretty darn interesting...and powerful.

Wonder what motivations they have... Go to Comment
The Obliteratrix
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Campaign Defining)
Strolen's comment on 2015-07-04 12:44 PM
Good night! A self sustaining planet eater. Your destruction will be assimilated. Go to Comment
Din-Bak and Barbo's Bestiary
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Strolen's comment on 2015-07-05 12:33 PM

Did they, by chance, discover the origin of the species and confirm that a Griffon came from the mating of a lion and an eagle? Go to Comment
7 Things Wrong with Transformers: Age of Extinction
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Strolen's comment on 2015-04-07 08:03 PM
Comments removed as totally inappropriate.

You forgot a couple things in the review.

Many big bang. Show. Boom. Make big noise and much confusion. Fight, gooooooood.

I really wanted to like them but the main thing that turned me off was the huge complexity of the robots themselves. They are only Transformers in so much as they can alter themselves into any form vs. actually transforming into the form they have parts for. Might as well be Terminator and it loses the childhood enjoyment I had in the complex parts that would form the gun, truck, etc.

I love action movies, but I like them more when the effects support the story vs. the effects being the story.

I lost interest after the second one.

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The First of Cities
Locations  (City)   (Other)
Strolen's comment on 2015-09-05 07:31 AM

I think one of the main points to understand is that this submission was probably not written for you. Perhaps it is a world being fleshed out still and the backstory is important to other interconnected ideas that never made it. Or perhaps it was just an idea that was sitting in the brain and must be got out. We don't expect everything to be the pinnacle of world building.

The purpose of the site is not to provide game ready ideas and scenarios, it is "is a place of creative freedom for role players and game masters with awesome ideas. Over time, the Citadel has turned into a bottomless resource of creativity and inspiration for thousands." Obviously you have a ton of issues with it, but nothing in the writing that sparked an idea or anything else to add or share?

So, I get bothered by inflammatory comments like your opening volley. "This isn't a usable city" and "players don't give a damn." Seriously? Apparently other commenters accepted it for what it was, a shared creative idea. If the author asked for an editor to review the material, some of your other comments would be more welcome but I think you expect too much sometimes for a site that wants to be a creative outlet. This is simply somebody's idea that they were willing to share, not the next LotR, so shouldn't be condemned for sharing.

Maybe you didn't mean it as critically as you wrote. But read it from the author's perspective and some empathy and maybe you will better see how it comes across.

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The First of Cities
Locations  (City)   (Other)
Strolen's comment on 2015-09-05 11:01 AM
The First of Cities
Locations  (City)   (Other)
Strolen's comment on 2015-09-05 07:46 AM
Through the ages, the city continued to get elevated...which, to me, means TONS of dungeons, caves and secret passage ways underneath the city. Many would be destroyed and filled in but many would not be or could be excavated by enterprising folks. There would be issues with the rivers and extended systems leaving the city, but a great opportunity for yet another section of the city.

Also got me thinking about the pontoon bridge parts. Not sure I have seen much like that around. That is a fun, stealable idea for another type town built in a marsh or a Waterworld type thing. Go to Comment
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