Was wondering why there weren't any comments yet. I fear they are being nice right now. Give it a good read. Maybe read it out loud. Many ideas bounce in and out and I had difficulty following the third paragraph. I understand what you are saying in that first sentence...but you aren't saying it.
I don't really see any need for the rape/sex parts at all and it threw the entire sub off for me. What PC party is going to do that? Maybe rape is used as a long ago back story but I have yet to see it used in a game...if I did, well, that would just be weird. I would change that to something more entertaining or difficult to resist. Maybe simply that he always had a deep respect for women so he would be gentlemanny polite to females and that continued in the knife.
Needs a bit of work before you get some attention on it I think.
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Not sure why there aren't any comments but I couldn't take seeing it without anymore.
Fairly basic creationalism with all the race stereotypes. That might be why the lack of comments. I will admit I haven't dug into the others but this just doesn't draw me in. There is no hook or uniqueness that really sets it apart and it makes it difficult to comment on.
I am certain once I dig farther there will be those things, but this main post doesn't draw me in.
Yeah, basically...I want more!!
You had me hooked. Awesome intro and great mood set. Now I just want a few details on how you invision it and how to use. As is I can definitely do some things with it but I want your spin. On target, just want to be spoon fed a little bit more! Feed me more blood!
Random thoughts: Wonder why the god didn't come back and save his loyal priests or put some kind of order against their killing. But it could always be said that the god was in a juvenile temper and made his curse in haste...but then that is not a very worthy god if he didn't try to correct his mistakes. Followers dying might not be the greatest propaganda.
As for getting new bodies for their armor, would think they might want to shed the body once it started getting hard to manage (falling apart). It would make sense, if they are intelligent, that they would place themselves (armor) somewhere they will be picked up and utilized in a rather quick manner. So was thinking that they would have some means to throw off the body away from the armor. Finding empty armor might be more appealing to some than one with random body parts in it....maybe. :) Otherwise I would work the buddy system. Need a new body, go get one and have a friend help put you on it.
#22 Just because it is called The Sword of Dragon Slaying doesn't mean it will.
#23 Don't challenge a GMs ruling with a rule. GM is always right and he will prove it to you the hard way if you wish.
#24 Never trust that the dead are dead...even when they are burned and their ashes are scattered to the four winds.
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#25 Magic doesn't play favorites. Get out of the way of anybody trying a new spell or testing a new item.