I won't say it isn't heavy handed or harsh. The fact remains that I know of a small chunk of great authors that have left or took an extremely long break because of the outcome of these type discussions.
As mentioned, the hope is that there won't be much need for it. Your tangible fear :) of the message is warning enough that most will comprehend. It is more of an acknowledgement of what has happened in the past and what will not happen in the future. This also now serves as a tool to link to in order to dissuade any of these types of discussions. As far as those articles, I am still undecided and much will depend on the Strolenati. Emotion in these things are the enemy, not necessarily the topic. However, many are unable to separate the two and that is the danger in these types of topics.
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I love the overall idea. I am personally not a fan of faeries and such but even cutting them it is a great idea. Love the though of all the pretties that have been nabbed through the years and put in nests or dropped. The place could be a great lure for gold hunters or those down on their luck. Beggers will always be taunted by the lure of the hidden treasures but since nobody has ever gotten out alive it is a huge risk.
The title captured my imagination and attention but not sure the sub filled the expectations.
Was expecting to see a little detail about the person that made it and why. I guess why there was a need to trap this unexplained entity at least. They should be a bird collector of some sort (or they turned into one after) as it wouldn't be a difficult thing to have many types of birds caged in twos and bring them together as you needed the power of the amulet. If they need to be free flying that would need to be defined. Also that there would be some pattern involved, which bird was next, that could be deduced by actual migratory patterns or other ways that the players could actually discover. I guess I think it needs more about the entrapped entity and the motivations on its entrapment to explain why everything is happening the way it is.
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I like suddenly finding a crying girl in the woods. She was put there because she needed to be found by the players for purpose which could be a good opening to a side trek or adventure.
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I might be wrong on this account and am happy to be corrected, but I almost see this as 3+ different submissions that would do well to be linked together but each would probably stand well on their own.
The first, obviously, being the description of the magic and ether. That sub ended for me around where the description of the Sorcerer and The Choosing started up. With a tiny bit of work to separate them, that could be its own post and simply linked to from this one on the ether. Psionics would be the third that can be alluded to as another force available.
The only other critical critique is the mixture of things like diodes and cathodes as descriptors. While it makes perfect sense, if this is a dissertation of a living person during that time talking about diodes and sorcerers burned at the stake take me out of the sub. I may not know the rest of the world though and it might be appropriate.
All said I like the tone and voice and it is a very thorough description that I found quite complete. Nothing crazy cool or anything but it does a great job describing a rather abstract concept. Ether would prob get a 3.5 or so from me just because it is a great, solid sub.
Hope that helps! Great read!
Is it a Register or Obeilisk? Wasn't sure if you were talking about two different things. "dismiss the Register as a natural creation" sort of tells me that it is dismissed as a natural creation which I am not sure your intent? Are you suggesting it is natural?
All said...I am just simply confused by what it is and what is supposed to do. The Truth Mage part threw me all off as it seems another unexplained tangent. I need to be slowly spoonfed this as I can't readily follow it. Sorry.