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Law of the Hammer
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Citadel Help)
Strolen's comment on 2011-08-08 11:57 PM
Commenters can volunteer whatever information they want when it directly relates in some way to the submission they are commenting on. This is really aimed more at the Author responses that start questioning the commenter's way of doing things. Although voting low for grammar is a bit taboo so that might be a bad example anyway. ;) Go to Comment
The Ten-Second Story
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
Strolen's comment on 2011-08-03 12:02 PM


Great idea that forces the DM to think about these NPCs to get that history. Then, when introduced or used, they will be invested in that NPC and be self-obligated to use the info. I like it!


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The Badger Patch
Locations  (Area)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Strolen's comment on 2011-08-04 10:52 AM


I love the overall idea. I am personally not a fan of faeries and such but even cutting them it is a great idea. Love the though of all the pretties that have been nabbed through the years and put in nests or dropped. The place could be a great lure for gold hunters or those down on their luck. Beggers will always be taunted by the lure of the hidden treasures but since nobody has ever gotten out alive it is a huge risk.


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The Badger Patch
Locations  (Area)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Strolen's comment on 2012-05-13 11:29 AM
Still a good one! Go to Comment
History Can be Fun
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Game Mastering)
Strolen's comment on 2011-07-25 01:42 PM


I absolutely agree!!  Maybe I should write this one up and link it to this! 


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The Leech Cloth, or The Cloth of Souls
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Strolen's comment on 2011-08-14 08:06 AM


The cloth is pretty neat but I will say that the blood duelist part is what sticks out in my mind with. That is a pretty cool idea.


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The Philadelphia Shipyards
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Strolen's comment on 2011-07-17 07:27 AM
Please visit the forum topic A Discussion on Personal Rating Standards to continue any replies on this thread. We should try to keep a majority of comments directly related to the submission.

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The Philadelphia Shipyards
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Strolen's comment on 2011-08-14 08:15 AM


Could be used as the birth of a zombie invasion!



Addition of all the ships and the many plot ideas were great.


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What Lies Beyond Death
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Strolen's comment on 2012-05-13 11:31 AM
Really awesome and it really set the mood well. Cheka with the assist!! Go to Comment
The Amulet of "Oh Flock."
Items  (Jewelry)   (Sentient)
Strolen's comment on 2011-07-04 08:58 AM


The title captured my imagination and attention but not sure the sub filled the expectations.



Was expecting to see a little detail about the person that made it and why. I guess why there was a need to trap this unexplained entity at least. They should be a bird collector of some sort (or they turned into one after) as it wouldn't be a difficult thing to have many types of birds caged in twos and bring them together as you needed the power of the amulet. If they need to be free flying that would need to be defined. Also that there would be some pattern involved, which bird was next, that could be deduced by actual migratory patterns or other ways that the players could actually discover. I guess I think it needs more about the entrapped entity and the motivations on its entrapment to explain why everything is happening the way it is. 



I like suddenly finding a crying girl in the woods. She was put there because she needed to be found by the players for purpose which could be a good opening to a side trek or adventure.

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The Amulet of "Oh Flock."
Items  (Jewelry)   (Sentient)
Strolen's comment on 2011-07-05 12:35 PM


Don't take it personally, Raptyr!  We very much appreciate the time you took to put in a submission. Most of us witheld our votes because we want you to succeed and are looking forward to continued interaction!  PM us if you don't want to reply publically or refute our opinions if you think we are wrong. We thrive on feedback and are only trying to help so please don't take it any other way.


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30 Small Town Horror Threads
Plots  (Mystical)   (Encounter)
Strolen's comment on 2011-06-27 12:38 PM


I loved this one. There were quite a few that were downright creepy. Most would make great Twilight Zone episodes!!


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Ether and Ethereal Magicks
Systems  (Mystical)   (Defining)
Strolen's comment on 2011-06-16 01:55 PM


I might be wrong on this account and am happy to be corrected, but I almost see this as 3+ different submissions that would do well to be linked together but each would probably stand well on their own.



The first, obviously, being the description of the magic and ether. That sub ended for me around where the description of the Sorcerer and The Choosing started up. With a tiny bit of work to separate them, that could be its own post and simply linked to from this one on the ether. Psionics would be the third that can be alluded to as another force available.



The only other critical critique is the mixture of things like diodes and cathodes as descriptors. While it makes perfect sense, if this is a dissertation of a living person during that time talking about diodes and sorcerers burned at the stake take me out of the sub. I may not know the rest of the world though and it might be appropriate.



All said I like the tone and voice and it is a very thorough description that I found quite complete. Nothing crazy cool or anything but it does a great job describing a rather abstract concept. Ether would prob get a 3.5 or so from me just because it is a great, solid sub.



Hope that helps! Great read!


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30 Alchemists
NPCs  (Extras)   (Mystical)
Strolen's comment on 2011-06-01 07:14 AM
Wouldn't be a 30 without 30. Better reference with them all together too I think! A little formatting magic will make it a breeze to read and it is currently set up well. (I reduced the font to the page default so it didn't look so big) Go to Comment
The Registers
Locations  (Other)   (Other)
Strolen's comment on 2011-05-21 11:55 AM


Is it a Register or Obeilisk? Wasn't sure if you were talking about two different things. "dismiss the Register as a natural creation" sort of tells me that it is dismissed as a natural creation which I am not sure your intent? Are you suggesting it is natural?



All said...I am just simply confused by what it is and what is supposed to do. The Truth Mage part threw me all off as it seems another unexplained tangent. I need to be slowly spoonfed this as I can't readily follow it. Sorry.


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Lawbane
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
Strolen's comment on 2011-05-07 10:45 PM


Was wondering why there weren't any comments yet. I fear they are being nice right now. Give it a good read. Maybe read it out loud. Many ideas bounce in and out and I had difficulty following the third paragraph. I understand what you are saying in that first sentence...but you aren't saying it.



I don't really see any need for the rape/sex parts at all and it threw the entire sub off for me. What PC party is going to do that? Maybe rape is used as a long ago back story but I have yet to see it used in a game...if I did, well, that would just be weird. I would change that to something more entertaining or difficult to resist. Maybe simply that he always had a deep respect for women so he would be gentlemanny polite to females and that continued in the knife.



Needs a bit of work before you get some attention on it I think.


I do like the premise. Good backstory that holds the item up and all that. Will be good!

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Lawbane
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
Strolen's comment on 2011-05-18 02:57 AM


Is this the same post? Welly, welly. Say Brother, viddy a kind bit of the old ultraviolence on the chelloveck.



My keeshkas said a 5 and I am sticking to it. Love it!


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CSS Demonstration Sub
Articles  (Resource)   (Citadel Help)
Strolen's comment on 2011-05-15 02:07 PM


Going to be fine tuning this to make it a little more useful. I think we can get much more organized and useful with some of this!


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CSS Demonstration Sub
Articles  (Resource)   (Citadel Help)
Strolen's comment on 2011-05-16 01:01 AM


It is a wiki so feel free to mess around with it a little bit and put up some other demonstrations. If you want something changed, just let me know. Figure this would be a decent start. Much better than the old anyway.


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CSS Demonstration Sub
Articles  (Resource)   (Citadel Help)
Strolen's comment on 2011-05-16 02:41 PM
Oh dear. Cursory glance. Is this going to spur a redesign? Go to Comment
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