I like this as well. Very useful. One of those places in every city makes it easy and convenient in a game and I can see its merit. Useful for just starting out, clearing some woods and collecting some bounty, maybe making a name for themselves. Eventually, they may catch the eye of one of the bureaucrats in the house which will bring up their status and up the ante of their quests. Can see it working well for ongoing campaign usage and always useful to dole out some rumors or plot hints. Great idea! Go to Comment
When you talk about your standard, generic D&D magic, I don't disagree at all and you point is fairly well made. You could also say another word too: dragon.
However, if you had a game or story that required a siege then there are also tons of ways to allow the incorporation of magic (or magical creatures) without overbalancing. They are way too numerous to mention and it doesn't really detract from your point.
((Fine, I will start it. ;) We are a site that is partial to the number 30 after all))
A drunk barbarian thinks that one of the characters has stole his horse. His friends are just as drunk and are backing up his friend's words with metal.
They get their pocket picked but, when the pocket picker gets pinched, his guild is there to claim the purse and the caught pick pocket....with force.
A character's horse steps on a sharp nail in the road and bucks running into a family knocking them to the ground. The father doesn't stop to ask questions or listen to excuses, he attacks immediately. Let's see if they can be gentle with him.
Initially thinking the items were legit, a shop owner buys some of the character's booty. Soon after he finds out it is a forgery/fake/illusion and sends his brute squad after them for "compensation."
A man jumps out of a doorway and knocks the characters off their horse, punches them in the face and is off before the character knows his ups and downs. Soon after some others come out of the building and the chase is on.
A crazed leper is forcefully begging and trying to grab the players cloak to kiss> He seems legitimately sincere in his humbled comments and blissfully unaware that anything is wrong with him> After being treated rudely for a couple minutes he will suddenly turn crazed and lunge with a dagger>
Their drinks have been drugged, but not professionally. They are conscience enough through the drugged haze to realize they are being rolled and robbed. the would be thieves are as inept at fighting as they are with drugs so it isn't that hard to escape...probably.
A branch across the road. A detour through a tight trail with a trip rope. Some obvious signs of artificial camouflage on both sides of the road. Yet nobody is around.
The sound of galloping horses quickly overtake the group. It would be a mini-stampede if it wasn't for the men controlling them. They wield large pikes and menacingly attempt to push the players off the road. If the players resist, it gets physical...fast. Unfortunately for the resisting players, these are the kings men and an even larger entourage plus one each king in a very big hurry.
An interesting substance and pretty darn dangerous in the right circumstances. The signs and plot hooks pulled it all up for me.
Although I am curious if you could smoke or otherwise use the dried portions for something. Was thinking it would be more stable in its dried form and it was missing a use there. Additionally, how could I resist the thought of collecting some in pottery jugs with an ignition source and tossing them over the wall to burst into a chemical gas attack.
(For readability, I would prefer it broken up a bit so that it is easier to reference if I was to use it. It is difficult to slog through the large paragraphs to find, say what a high concentration would do and its separate stages of growth etc.) Go to Comment
With the reformat it is definitely easier to find and read! Good work with the changes. I must still agree it might be a little too heavy on the information but perhaps not. I think what is missing is a unique voice that most subs have. It is so drenched in detail that your creative style isn't coming out in it. Perhaps that is what I am sensing. But it is a great idea, just missing a little flair. I think each submission here requires fifteen pieces of flair. ;) Go to Comment
Oh boy, I am liking this idea...A LOT. Mana, yeah, OK but this ore thing is a fascinating idea. When you hit surface-ore I physically moved closer to the monitor.
Can't wait to see how it is used in the world! I think the concepts will become much clearer and make this make more sense. Now, I am intrigued and want more and will almost immediately go to your next sub I noticed.
(PS. My inner hope is that every bold word/phrase will eventually be linked to another sub. :) ) Go to Comment
Not sure what is happening as I had no issue editing it or expanding. When you paste from an outside program, use the buttons instead of just pasting. There are three Paste, Paste from Plain Text and Paste From Word. Try one of those next time as the software does some cleaning and paragraph formatting stuff for you. Also, when you edit, try and click on source and that should allow you to get to the bottom of a few things. When you use source you can see how odd the formatting is of your submissions from using a mix of paragraph, divs and line breaks. Normally all you should need is a nice paragraph tag around each paragraph. So the pasting is probably the root of the problem. Go to Comment
I understand your reasoning for finally joining! It matches the purpose we made the site in the first place.
Overall it was a great, bitter tale with an interesting twist at the end.
There are some small inconsistencies (he couldn't fathom 5000 years but you said he ruled for 3000 years for instance) and the thy's and thou's are more disrupting than mood setting to me, especially when the writing doesn't really conform to the usage (and doesn't use thine or thee instead of thou) without the rest being written towards that style. There is a certain change in language cadence when you use those words but these seem more a search & replace. It would do better without them. But practice makes perfect and I am thrilled you were brave and shared!
Overall it was a quick entertaining read for certain! Was happy to read it and greatly enjoyed it.
To further impress us, you may want to write another sub with the description of the Star Blade, the creation through the destruction, and that would be cool. Go to Comment