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Thrall and Yola
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Strolen's comment on 2012-12-01 09:09 PM
It was a good read. My only personal want with the story is less time on how he put on his clothes and what he ate and more on his thoughts on how to make one hand work or how to get around the honor and then can't. Him deciding to leave and then deciding to kill her were pretty heavy handed when compared to rest of the story. Those are the key points and parts I wanted to hear a little more about to better buy into the decisions. As it is, he just does it and that is it...ya know.

But excellent read and I enjoyed it immensely! Go to Comment
The Glenbeard Tunnels
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Underground)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-25 02:30 AM
Story was great on why their are tunnel systems all over! The actually subway was more of an after thought for me. Magnets? Could have had more fun with that. You tend to weave these complicated political tales and I must say that they add a lot to what could have been a simple idea.

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Anadem of Kormak
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-25 05:33 AM
I may have to start some kind of Strolenati support group. We will meet on Tuesdays and Wednesdays at the local "Y" and discuss these deep personal issues. Go to Comment
Lillett's Needle
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-24 03:04 AM
egads

Cloak of flesh eating. Go to Comment
Scable
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (City/ Ruin)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-22 07:12 PM
So sad for him to be outcast by his mother. A typical poor orphan story where they grow up into greatness. Oh, wait, no its not. This is a twisted zombie child playing with his human food!

Not sure where you come up with this stuff, and so quickly, but I like it! Go to Comment
Ilken Lillett
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-22 07:05 PM
I don't think she is a very nice person. I would unfriend her for sure.

Crazy story that drug me right in. Hard to comprehend the ruthlessness! Welcome back SE!! Go to Comment
Hrothen's Gate
Dungeons  (Mountains)   (Doors)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-24 08:22 PM
It got loose at the end, but I loved it. Rise and fall of a Dwarven Empire. I think the end just needs to be more clear. I didn't get that nobody can go through it till one of the last lines. I just thought the place was haunted by ghosts and zombies. The place is too important to the world you created to just let lie. I see it being held still by humans. They have figured out ways to keep the undead at bay and/or lock themselves in certain safe areas after dark and can come out in the daytime. Besides the undead, I think there have to be some dwarves around (even coming in from another clan deeper in the mountains or something) that continue to have some kind of insurgency against the past with the hope of one day regaining it.

I like it a lot, the end just needs to be tightened a bit more to bring it all together in a solid understanding of the current state. I agree a solid 4 as is, but it could be upgraded with that fix and some better plot ideas.

Awesome, LOVE IT!! Go to Comment
Ashes Falling from the Sky
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-07 03:12 AM
Extra points because he took a writer's prompt from me and 10 minutes later had this done. Good visuals!! Go to Comment
The Commoner's Tools
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-04 01:35 AM
Will be cool once you get a bigger list of stuff from round the Citadel. Added one of my old ones. Go to Comment
Sealed City of Roastone
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Strolen's comment on 2012-11-09 12:23 AM
I said dwarf a bunch of times, lots...and they live in a cave with a big door. What more could you possibly need?! What, do you think Hobbits could be substituted? Blasphemy.

Also, according to the Babel Fish in my ear, reading Troachoar means "This is Dwarven so don't knock it that it can be used for other things too even if seems like it can it really can't and is really for Dwarves and concentrated on Dwarves, Dwarves, Dwarves and it says Dwarves a lot."

The actual translation says Dwarves a lot more but I paraphrased.

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Seven Wonders of the Dwarven World
Locations  (Other)   (Other)
Strolen's comment on 2012-12-31 01:44 PM
I echo Cheka. Gold cave and bridge were my favorite.

Great list that does leave me wanting more details of each but, for a list, I think it satisfies what you wanted to accomplish.......but I want more! Go to Comment
Types of Transformers
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-17 12:30 PM
I don't know much about gobots so this was interesting to me. Go to Comment
The Cartography Guild
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-17 12:28 PM
I like the change from cartographer to spy. I think you cheapened it at the end by changing it to useless information. Better, I think, to say they got too public so they stopped selling information all together (which might be an issue since those that hired them may have info on who they spied on which the CG wouldn't want out...therefore blackmail for more spying, but that is another thread to follow). So they stop selling all out, however they continue to do it for those clients that are absolutely trustworthy to not let it known that the CG continues on in its elite spying.

Also, the alcohol and woman things gets overused and loses its impact. Was funny at the top but used too much to the point of annoyance through the entire piece. Reduce that footprint a bit for better impact I think.

I like it! Go to Comment
The PottyPortal
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-14 04:31 AM
I think this is good enough to be a normal idea and get some votes! LOL Go to Comment
The PottyPortal
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-17 12:21 PM
I'll bite.

Eww, gross! Go to Comment
Headlines from the Cosmic Era
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - Genre)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-14 04:29 AM
You should split this up and add the second half as an idea above! Go to Comment
Headlines from the Cosmic Era
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - Genre)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-14 04:30 AM
How much for a unicorn? Go to Comment
Corporate Riot Shield
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-11 05:16 AM
I do like the advertising idea and the commercialism of security as another facet of the company. Cool. Go to Comment
51 Minor Mysteries
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Side-Quest)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-11 02:54 AM
Lots of these are pure gold, what an awesome list!! Go to Comment
Plains Elves
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Strolen's comment on 2012-10-11 02:49 AM
Is it bad that all I could think of is the elves creating some kind of land boat on wheels like land sailing in the desert? Windmills? I just see them using some kind of technology.

I like the idea of the split in the elves and provides a good reason they are there. I would think they accept their punishment as a sign of honor and stay in the plains, otherwise why not just move farther in another direction and find some new woods that they are used to surviving in? Go to Comment
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