Great plot because it allows multiple options depending on how far you want to take it. As I read it I came up with the same plot split offs that Almar wrote so I was happily surprised when they were mentioned.
While not a great fan of cold weather campaigns, this one can be easily modified to fit with any giants in any scenerio.
A refreshingly outstanding submission!
....what does that damn stone do???!!! (I mean that in a good way) It is a rather important point especially if the PCs get a hold of it by rescuing it. You know they are going to HAVE to use it. Go to Comment
I love the whole feeling of the small, rough town. Reminds me of the cliche rough western town. Colorful inhabitants, small population so anybody new is immediately noticed. Very secure because of the constant threat and the idea of everybody always ready to defend themselves puts an awesome atmosphere on the entire place.
That is is backed with believeable resources and a reason to exist as well as an excellent background to describe its creation.
A fun one for a beginning party is how I invisioned it. The new adventurers go out on their first Quest. Little do they know they were sent to their death by Mr. X for Important Reasons. So they are met on the way by our friend Bualgathor who knows all about their hopeless plight but sees it as a perfect opportunity. They get there, PCs are nearly destroyed, Bualgathor is revealed, it works out that the PCs return for paybacks. Go to Comment
I would probably have the two NPCs be player characters, and if not plan something ahead of time to befriend the owl and get some potions of animal speak or something. Wouldn't detract from the overall flow since the prince could speak dark elf (hmmmm why?) and get stabbed. Might even send a wild man with them before they meat the dark elves as fodder for the murder episode, maybe allowing him to speak their language...past bad encounters that the dark elf held a grudge about or something...
The one thing that I want to know through all this was why steal the moonstones in the first place? What was the motive? unless they planned on making their own barrier against non-humans somewhere? If so, why didn't they get all three? Knowing the why could probably help explain why they went against each other after they had the stones as well.
I think the poisoning of the father line needs strengthening though.
What poison were the orcs using?
Where did they get it?
Stuff along that line.
Could develop into a good villian behind the scenes if set up well and ensure that it makes more sense why behing poisoned by orcs requires an epic quest. Might be a quest to find out what poison was used in the first place by capturing the person behind the orcs...etc. Go to Comment
Definately a good start and I already like the character.
Fear of being stole from her? She is a thief. The safest place for things would be in her control I would think. And a key wouldn't be good enough if she is that paranoid. Needs a story behind it, stuff stolen in the past and such. There would probably and elaborate cache of her most valued possessions too since she loves the manuscripts. (Probably my pettiness but I like these kind of details about characters)
The rest is pretty good, I am probably picky because I like the character and want to know more. Got me hooked, now reel me in. Go to Comment
Sure kill weapons really don't leave a lot to play with. A weapon that never misses isn't that fun.
I love the background on the creation of them though but the actual weapon itself needs something that makes it more real and fun to use in a campaign.
Instead of always hitting the heart, I would say a more feasible power for them would be the ability to penetrate armor much easier then any other weapon. Perhaps it can go through chain mail like nothing and only is slightly slowed by plate, a minus to the damage. The accuracy should be left to the skill but the power the weapon holds should be more appropriate. The holder could also be protected from the dragon's breathe weapon, or perhaps the weapon itslef has added damage of the breath weapon of the dragon or something. Go to Comment
That is a good twist at the end and the fact that our heroes are going on a farmer's word is fun as well.
What would happen if the farmer dies? (which tends to happen) For lack of another baffoon, Vrin may settle on trying to con the players. Might do this near the end, allow Vrin to choose the weakest PC, mentally, to be able to pick up the knife. Have a battle of wills, let the players lose for a change, and release Vrin as advertised knowing that they released him. Let them explain what happened to the world and now they have to save their pride as well as the world. Vrin may spread some rumors about how he outsmarted them as well at the same time trying to rebuild his army.
The PCs turn into "The Bubbling Adventureres" that get no respect. Might be fun not being outlaws but still haveing to hide who they are because of embarassment. Stories told in taverns laughing at and dreading the incident at the same time. Go to Comment
Maybe is she holds somebody else's hand when she has a vision, she can share that vision with them. Might help her cope a little, but also makes her a rag doll to somebody that may just want to use her. Go to Comment
I really like these seemingly mundane magic items.
A favorite of assassins as well. What better to remove any blood spatter from a kill on your clothing and put yourself back into a perfectly presentable state. Also remove the telltale blood area on the victim if you wish to try and hide the act for those few extra precious seconds. Not to mention remove and muddy/bloody footprints. Do they clean metal? hmmm Go to Comment
Very nice. A chia pet that eats its host if you don't feed it. Sweeeeet! Fire would be a very bad thing, same with prolonged direct sunlight without lots of water. Even though it is inbetween layers, the moss may not like the excessive heat. Would consume a lot of water.
Awkward too perhaps. Having to drench your armor and then wear it wet. Might be fun to give it a little bonus when totally saturated. Lead to town battles and the player jumping into a horse trough to get it wet for the fight, or always jumping into streams when they present themselves. Could add a lot of color to a game. I like it! Go to Comment
Loved the intro, probably wouldn't use some of the actual description. I would be trying to fit it into my world and to do that I would want to stick with the main idea of a floating city that goes where it may vs a lot of them and being able to control themselves. Unless I was basing a campaign/world around it of course, then I would jump on it all.
I love it as an explanation of where the 'legendary' magic items may come from or perhaps explain where a certain vein of magic items come from. Perhaps they all have style about them or a signature that makes it obvious it is from Caulderon.
Its return could be fated and a new series of magic items enter the world just in time for a fun battle. They trade with evil or good since they don't know the politics of the lands they travel through or something. Will think some more on it. Go to Comment
I think I would make the arrow dissappear on impact. Hate for anybody else get their hands on it, not to mention it opens up more possibilities.
I would also make this cult, while not peaceful, not wanting kill anybody either. Thier lot in life would be to put the fear of hell into others. They would have successfully caused fear of their area for all that go near it catch the stinging hell of their arrows. I would say that they would also go out on 'missions' where they would go out and search down certain people to shoot them with the arrows. The group would probably make awesom assassins if they ever chose to actually kill anybody, but their mission, and perhaps promise to the demon that gave them the power, was to cause pain in the world.
The arrows could make normal people appear possessed and cause a Salem Witch Trial type thing which may be their purpose. They could cause high ranking people to be distrusted because of a sudden madness, especially if the cult ranged farther then normal where nobody has heard of these arrows so the witnessed results would be a mystery. A whole village could be inflicted...
Lots of possibilities for this cult and item and lots of results that could come from it. Would like to see a write-up for the cult. Go to Comment
Alrighty Cap'n. I increased the Title and Detailed blocks to hold 40 characters so you can fix your stuff. It was set at 25 to keep the titles and stuff smaller just because they probably should be. :) But, for you....anything. Go to Comment