I think there might be some confusion on what to do with this. It is a start, but doesn't go that deep into anything and is slightly vague.

You have creative license. Don't hold back. Go ahead and go crazy on it. I like the idea of fleshing out a physical Citadel. It could turn into a lot of fun!

(PS. There are some Citadel roleplaying threads in the forum where some groundwork may have slightly been laid out) Go to Comment

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Read it but don't really want to vote on it in the current state. More of a stub in its current form, even though there is a lot of information it doesn't tell us anything. Even if we were running a pirate campaign or something. Not like we could get water from the place and the pull of turtles is the only thing a ship might find useful, but could say any island has turtles in fewer words. I would say maybe a 2.5 in its current state because, honestly (and I am sorry) there really isn't much to use. Like Dossta said, even if you disagree, each island needs a hook of some sort to make it useful to us. Yes, they all need to be PC orientated, that is our purpose here. We aren't wikipedia, we want stuff to use in our games.

That is why I suggest a stub. If that is your thought process for these, for it to be an island in the distance with nothing worth mentioning on it, it should probably be a stub to save you some low votes. Go to Comment

Man. Could only think how bad that would really suck.

And this only goes to prove that Mourn is a closet Dwarf lover that won't admit it. That is what it tells me axle. It could count as a Necro for the post and Dwarf Guild points for comments and upvotes. :) Go to Comment

I will flip #11 entirely around. I think they are in the wrong order. :)

I love this idea. I would have given a +1 magic sword of fairy slaying to have this list back in the day to add so much flavor to the Dwarves. I want to play one now just so I can chime off some of these! Go to Comment

I will flip #11 entirely around. I think they are in the wrong order. :)

I love this idea. I would have given a +1 magic sword of fairy slaying to have this list back in the day to add so much flavor to the Dwarves. I want to play one now just so I can chime off some of these! Go to Comment

Can't stop myself!! Leave me alone on my web tangent. I was hoping they were going to be the spiders that braided the beard. There is so much opportunity there. Lots of dwarves braid their beard. Having these spiders make "webs" out of their beard could be such and awesome thing to use!

Beard braid/web contests.


Stature could be based on the intricacies of the beard.


Certain patterns could even determine their rank, job or position in the church.


Dwarves with the best patter could sell their Beard Spiders for a high premium. However, each one sold would change the overall braid/web.


Malicious spiders (or a bad batch) could cause all kinds of mayhem. Tie knots, tie beard to bed posts at night. Grapple onto any grass or strings or anything that gets into the beard and just be a general pain in the ass.


Spilled ale into the beard would intoxicate the spiders. Some would improve, some would cause mayhem. Either way, they would have issues with the ale somehow.


Embarrassing is the dwarf who can't control his beard spiders and they go up into his hair.


Even worse is when his Dwarven lover has the same braids in her beard


Maybe that isn't bad, maybe that is a sign of relationship, the same web/braids


Hey, that Elf has the same Braids as Dunder the ThunderHammer. What in Hurl's Hammer!?


Hey, that sheep has the same...


Ok, enough, getting weird.

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Didn't realize I didn't vote. Extra points for any sub that gives my own creative juices a work out. Go to Comment

Can't stop myself!!

Leave me alone on my web tangent. I was hoping they were going to be the spiders that braided the beard. There is so much opportunity there. Lots of dwarves braid their beard. Having these spiders make "webs" out of their beard could be such and awesome thing to use!

1. Beard braid/web contests.
2. Stature could be based on the intricacies of the beard.
3. Certain patterns could even determine their rank, job or position in the church.
4. Dwarves with the best patter could sell their Beard Spiders for a high premium. However, each one sold would change the overall braid/web.
5. Malicious spiders (or a bad batch) could cause all kinds of mayhem. Tie knots, tie beard to bed posts at night. Grapple onto any grass or strings or anything that gets into the beard and just be a general pain in the ass.
6. Spilled ale into the beard would intoxicate the spiders. Some would improve, some would cause mayhem. Either way, they would have issues with the ale somehow.
7. Embarrassing is the dwarf who can't control his beard spiders and they go up into his hair.
8. Even worse is when his Dwarven lover has the same braids in her beard
9. Maybe that isn't bad, maybe that is a sign of relationship, the same web/braids
10. Hey, that Elf has the same Braids as Dunder the ThunderHammer. What in Hurl's Hammer!?
11. Hey, that sheep has the same...
Ok, enough, getting weird. Go to Comment

2 and 6 were my favorites. Great list, 10 is plenty to work with and leaves it open for some great additions by others! Go to Comment

Technically it is the "L" and it is elevated...more or less. But it goes under occasionally, if only into darkness in many cases. I grew up there and memory is fog as you take some things for granted. Go to Comment

Some I just didn't get. Others were plainly obviously. At first I didn't like it, then I accepted it, then I enjoyed it. Go to Comment

Man, that was really cool. The backstory went against my thinking too but I think it is all the better for it. Just shows what you can turn a simple idea into. A knife that makes zombies. And look at the level you brought it too. Sweet! Go to Comment

I like the church war plot aspect of it. Having a demi-god, of that sort, actively going against his Aunt's church makes for great indirect conflict in the world! PCs would be affected by odd parts of this war and may, in scenarios, even get involved. Decent history and reason for coming into being as well. I find this very usable. Go to Comment

Normally I try and leave comments about spelling and structure alone but this is a rough draft. An excellent rough draft, but in dire need of another read through. I see the voice you are trying to get out and I love it, however if you read it out loud you will find many errors that make it difficult for me to get through.

I think you can up this .5 to a point with a quick rewrite to make things more clear! Go to Comment

Crumb, out of votes for the day. Wondering why that was. "I'll be back." Go to Comment

Got my votes!! Go to Comment

Took me a second to get the hang of it but your description explained it very well. Will have to put this together with my eldest and see how it turns out!

Excellent background on the game as well. Felt it was perfect and gave a lot of personality to it. Great sub! Go to Comment

How can you not like Bacon?! Go to Comment

I would call this more of a "General Submission template". We would do well if we all followed them to a point...or at least asked all those questions.
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