Clever is right. That is a really cool idea. And there is a very large amount of skill needed to use that cane so even if it fell into the wrong hands it would be basically useless to them, even in they could engage the braille.
I like the book a lot and the way it is presented is just fine, no issues on that. The question I have is about your percieved availability of the book. From the first part I get conflicts whether it is a single book that is handed around or something that can be created by those that know how. Refering to "the creator" implies that many can be made yet it seems a somewhat specialized item that is tied to a specific circumstance that wouldn't readily be duplicated.
The other thing I felt needed a little more was on how somebody would give this as a gift if it was a single item. It seems to me that the book should effect every person that holds it, not just an intended victim? In this case then it might be difficult for the current reader to give it away in the first place unless he already knows the nature of the book and doesn't get addicted to it. Maybe I am catching that one the wrong way though. Go to Comment
Can't really vote on it as it is a somewhat confusing telling. Most of it is about the person but I am grasping at it to determine why she is legendary. Starting at "The age of 15" all the narration after that makes no sense to me and that was what I was counting on to see the legendary aspect of the character. You tell me she is the most influential but I am failing to fully understand why. I need a tale, not just a basic discussion of various bullet points. Go to Comment
I have been meh about seeing it. As far as super hero movies go, I have been burned out since the second Spiderman. However, I did watch Deadpool and enjoyed it and this one is on the list. Go to Comment
I was idly wondering if nobody was actively warring, would the sounds still reverberate as mentioned. So if this drum found its way into a humble village and they used it for celebration or ritual. They wouldn't notice much about it except it is a nice drum. But maybe 2 clans are at war not super far away and they keep hearing this mysterious beat of a drum.... Go to Comment
The mutated offspring of a forced mating have a halved lifespans. During that lifespan, however, they are basically slaves to the whore-spider. They collect food, provide protection etc. They have partial morph abilities that can cause quite an odd shape when scared or captured. They are not able to control the shifting as well as their parents so often, if seen or captured, they twist into grotesque shapes of random spiders and bugs they have come across.
If birthed away, they are bold and brazen in trying to find their way back to the sire. They will wander aimlessly and not back down from any sized barrier or danger. The poisonous types of these are most dangerous to humans who are in their path as their morphing abilities often translate into survival skills and enhanced poisons.
When two whore-spiders meet, they fall into the spell of each other's luring skills and procreate till the male dies of exhaustion. During this intense workout, a non-sticky version of their webbing is constantly being thrown out and is twisted and strewn about. Sometimes, but not often, the spiders may get entwined in it and both perish. This thread is coveted for something...
Alchemists use their venom to make love potion #9? When found with the webbing....?
I had a couple thoughts to add, let me know if they would work.
1) The only thought I had that maybe would work against magical beings, was putting a magical grip on a pole staff or club made from the main wood. A very specific tool, but could serve a purpose. I pictured a lone monk that was traveling with a bo staff with the center and both ends wrapped with a magical cloth. The only thing he can injure are magical creatures. Any hit against a mortal would simply be hit, forcefully, by a rag at the end of the stick...if anything. Unformed total thought, but that is what I had.
2) Secure the entrance to king's chambers or other areas that they want magic restrictions. By taking a door sized swath of bark or tree and extending it across an entrance you can stop all magical items from crossing. Assuming that if I was wearing a ring, then when I walk through the rest of my body would go through and then my ring would get stuck on the tree and snag there. Go to Comment
I think the payoff of this one is the quest at the end. I normally have trouble with things lasting millenniums and countless generations as I can't even comprehend the change that would/should happen in that amount of time. It really wouldn't take more than half a decade to get the same results you are looking for and then you maintain the timeline better. Once it is that old there is nobody that will know or remember any legend, just that there is a frozen kingdom. You feed enough that this is exactly what they have while we have the background so even works with my thought process...but maybe you get my point?
That said, saving the world from an endless summer is a fantastic idea! Go to Comment
Using a magnetic stone is a great idea! Otherwise, fairly typical.
The meta discussion is what really makes this special. I highly suggest carving it out and putting it in a sub of its own with a better title and category/freetext. Otherwise many others will miss the true value of it all. Go to Comment