Can't really vote on it as it is a somewhat confusing telling. Most of it is about the person but I am grasping at it to determine why she is legendary. Starting at "The age of 15" all the narration after that makes no sense to me and that was what I was counting on to see the legendary aspect of the character. You tell me she is the most influential but I am failing to fully understand why. I need a tale, not just a basic discussion of various bullet points. Go to Comment
I have been meh about seeing it. As far as super hero movies go, I have been burned out since the second Spiderman. However, I did watch Deadpool and enjoyed it and this one is on the list. Go to Comment
I was idly wondering if nobody was actively warring, would the sounds still reverberate as mentioned. So if this drum found its way into a humble village and they used it for celebration or ritual. They wouldn't notice much about it except it is a nice drum. But maybe 2 clans are at war not super far away and they keep hearing this mysterious beat of a drum.... Go to Comment
The mutated offspring of a forced mating have a halved lifespans. During that lifespan, however, they are basically slaves to the whore-spider. They collect food, provide protection etc. They have partial morph abilities that can cause quite an odd shape when scared or captured. They are not able to control the shifting as well as their parents so often, if seen or captured, they twist into grotesque shapes of random spiders and bugs they have come across.
If birthed away, they are bold and brazen in trying to find their way back to the sire. They will wander aimlessly and not back down from any sized barrier or danger. The poisonous types of these are most dangerous to humans who are in their path as their morphing abilities often translate into survival skills and enhanced poisons.
When two whore-spiders meet, they fall into the spell of each other's luring skills and procreate till the male dies of exhaustion. During this intense workout, a non-sticky version of their webbing is constantly being thrown out and is twisted and strewn about. Sometimes, but not often, the spiders may get entwined in it and both perish. This thread is coveted for something...
Alchemists use their venom to make love potion #9? When found with the webbing....?
I had a couple thoughts to add, let me know if they would work.
1) The only thought I had that maybe would work against magical beings, was putting a magical grip on a pole staff or club made from the main wood. A very specific tool, but could serve a purpose. I pictured a lone monk that was traveling with a bo staff with the center and both ends wrapped with a magical cloth. The only thing he can injure are magical creatures. Any hit against a mortal would simply be hit, forcefully, by a rag at the end of the stick...if anything. Unformed total thought, but that is what I had.
2) Secure the entrance to king's chambers or other areas that they want magic restrictions. By taking a door sized swath of bark or tree and extending it across an entrance you can stop all magical items from crossing. Assuming that if I was wearing a ring, then when I walk through the rest of my body would go through and then my ring would get stuck on the tree and snag there. Go to Comment
I think the payoff of this one is the quest at the end. I normally have trouble with things lasting millenniums and countless generations as I can't even comprehend the change that would/should happen in that amount of time. It really wouldn't take more than half a decade to get the same results you are looking for and then you maintain the timeline better. Once it is that old there is nobody that will know or remember any legend, just that there is a frozen kingdom. You feed enough that this is exactly what they have while we have the background so even works with my thought process...but maybe you get my point?
That said, saving the world from an endless summer is a fantastic idea! Go to Comment
Using a magnetic stone is a great idea! Otherwise, fairly typical.
The meta discussion is what really makes this special. I highly suggest carving it out and putting it in a sub of its own with a better title and category/freetext. Otherwise many others will miss the true value of it all. Go to Comment
Nerd alert. In high school I had a study hour so decided to reread LotR again. Another person there was doing the same thing. So over the course of the semester we memorized the ruins and were able to write runes as letters and translate them on the fly without a key. We didn't use any of the combined letters, just straight letters. So I like that this is put together so simply and well to just grab. It was in the appendix of the version I had. Go to Comment
A few of these are brilliant and dig right into the core motivations that I am all too familiar with! I could relate my experiences with quite a few of them correlating to actual officers I have worked for over my years. Really outstanding!
You just opened up another world of creativity for me actually. I keep my military very much out of my personal life but, man, there are so many eccentric personalities I have worked for and got to know very well....what a waste that I haven't used them before. Just odd it took this to totally refocus my POV on it all! Go to Comment