You've definitely got something to work with here. Perhaps you could elaborate further on the daughter and discuss her dislike for the establishment. By doing this, you should be able to toss in plot hooks too. What about the dragon's family coming for the dragonskin? Go to Comment
Wow, this list is huge! You've obviously put a lot of work into this. Some of the towns I'm not big on, but I think that works well because you offer a large variety of themes. My favorite is Oceanburg so far and it's already given me some inspiration on something I need. Go to Comment
Not bad. I admit that I finished reading the sub wanting more to it. Whatever happened between her and Andrew? And the 3 part staff is great that it has some blood in it. Go to Comment
Very nice! I really like that you have a variety of places, even if of a sensitive nature. You got me thinking about ideas of my own too. I look forward to seeing the finished submission. Go to Comment
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