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The Diamond Desert
Locations  (Area)   (Desert)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-26 12:16 AM

An interesting location, with enough riches to encourage the PC's to visit it at least once.

A nice touch referencing the helspar, although it took me a minute to get the reason. (never read the helspar sub before.)

All in all a worthy desert area for nearly any setting out there, which I always like to see.


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Combusting Shrews
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-15 05:02 PM
Twisted and oddly fitting. Definitely a way to spice up a castle siege for jaded players. Go to Comment
The Courthouse
Locations  (Establishment)   (Plains)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-24 02:42 AM
Very nice idea, reminds me somewhat of the "Thunder dome" from the Mad max movie; and could easily be adjusted to fit in almost any setting.

This makes an easy plug in to spice up an otherwise dull city players find themselves traveling to, and a way to keep the hack & slash player interested during an otherwise rp oriented city visit. Go to Comment
Maelbrecht, Render of Iron
Items  (Materials)   (Combat)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-29 08:39 PM
This weapon would perhaps be better off in the hands of a goblin or orc tribe with a few minor changes. Imagine the tribes shaman perfecting this into a thick goo the warriors would coat their stone weapons in just before charging into battle.

Also expanding the description to include what this goo does to flesh and wood (if anything) would be helpful. If it only effects metal then a hollow wooden club with grooves for the goo to seep out of with every strike would be perfect. Go to Comment
Maelbrecht, Render of Iron
Items  (Materials)   (Combat)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-30 11:56 PM
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Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-04-30 12:32 AM

Against unarmored foes and animals this weapon could have a excellent demoralizing effect, in that most animals will fleet fire and heat, and a man impaled with a red hot bolt is likely to scream and writhe in agony far more so then a cold one. (Especially in the penetration is minimized from the softer hot metal.)

Practical against heavily armored knights? Probably not, (that;s what basic crossbows are good for or using this one without heating the bolt.) but when facing gryphons, or other feathered/furred beasts a heated weapon is the perfect companion.

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Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-04-30 04:10 AM
Sadly Captain Penguin hasn't been around since early April of 2009 so I wouldn't expect an answer from him anytime soon.

If you feel creative feel free to put together a sub detailing the oil and its properties, I doubt the Captain would mind as long as you give him credit for the initial idea. (It also would make a nice companion piece to his crossbow) Go to Comment
NPCs  (Extras)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-27 11:16 PM

I stumbled across this quite by accident while browsing the Npc section. While a useful bad example there is a certain amusement and poetry factor to the sub that is rather... Memorable

After a pause I thought of an actual application for the sub, as written, for my next fantasy game session. Seriously

Imagine the characters coming across an utterly devastated town, ruins and the remnants of bodies laying scattered about like an angry child might toss their toy soldiers in a fit of rage.

Shorty after searching the town for survivors they find a very young girl, maybe 3 or 4 standing amidst the wreckage still clutching her mothers severed hand and staring at the adventurers in shock.

When asked what happened she recounts the sub pretty much as written. How this little one knows even a fraction of the history of the demon is the twenty thousand dollar question.  (perhaps overheard by her demon worshipping parents? Or on the lips of a drunken bard who knew not what horrors he was about to call forth?)

Dealing with the creature as it continues its rampage of destruction would be the rest of the plot line. (As well having fun messing with the suspicious players who will likely entertain the notion the little girl is either the demon in disguise, or possessed by it somehow.)

A 1.5 and HOH, not because it's of outstanding quality, (obviously) but as a reminder to myself and others then even the worst example can be used to great effect by a creative GM with a little effort  to create an interesting session that would never have otherwise occurred to them.


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Book of Eventful Evenings
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Sentient)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-21 06:23 PM

A nice item to dump into the treasure trove of cocky adventurers, should make them think twice about the power of the written word.

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The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-05-01 05:56 AM

Would it be possible to toss in some line breaks between the paragraphs? Right now it is a solid wall of text and serious eye sore to read. (Will gladly read, vote and comment afterward.)

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The Temple of the First Man
Locations  (Establishment)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-13 12:11 PM

Apologies for the late return to vote and comment until now, but this sub got lost in the shuffle.

I;m not sure I have much unique to add beyond I really enjoy this tale and the plot hooks at the end are a nice bonus and some truly unique. (Especially the child support one)

5/5 and a HOH

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Market Brawl
Plots  (Duty)   (Side-Quest)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-16 11:11 AM

At first the plot seemed a little railroadish to me, until I got deeper into it and noticed there was a lot more freedom of choice (and consequences from those choices) then first apparent. 

The plot as written can work great to introduce a thief NPC to the parties group, or even replace the thief NPC with a player character rogue if the GM is feeling  especially creative.

The extra system less stats for the NPC's involved were a nice touch and makes it easy for a GM to quickly give them more system specific attributes without needing to come up with them from stats and the initial description.

For those running a higher tech campaign a similar basic plot concept and adventure based off of this can be used with minimal effort. (I can imagine a similar plot unfolding on one of the rim worlds of Firefly or back water markets in Star Wars.)

Nicely done, and a plot I will be using in my Warhammer Fantasy campaign rather soon.

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Troll Rations
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-06-09 01:34 PM
A neat addition to any alchemists arsenal, although I do agree it could stand to be a little longer. Go to Comment
Kanel Rull
NPCs  (Minor)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-09 08:07 PM

A great way to spice up an otherwise dreary township, and the kind of hidden in plain sight villain most players will never suspect. (or even believe when they find evidence incriminating the woman)

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Shadoweagles Twisted Christmas
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-12-25 12:29 AM
Nice Christmas themed sub. Perfect for the generous angel, and Grinch in all of us. 5/5 Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-29 09:24 PM
Interesting, however a bit more explaination into the nature of the crystal would be be nice. Can it be undone of the owner wills it? How many souls can the crystal hold? More importantly is the crystal indestructible? If it is destroyed does the soul (or souls as the case may be) return to it's original bodies or go on to the spirit planes?

(Perhaps just detailing the crystal as a separate sub would be better)

This does offer some nice adventure hooks though, especially if another thief manages to steal the guild masters greatest treasure and then accidentally break it... Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-02 03:25 PM
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Beneath the Willow
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-26 08:38 PM

A nicely adventure to spring on the party after they have become attached to a helpful NPC that accompanied them on adventures in the past. For a variation one could also substitute a relative of one of the PC's to add a more personal touch to the adventure.

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Fontis Stone
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-12-17 11:29 PM
Nice and handy, a priceless item for sea or desert based campaigns. Go to Comment
Faye Delivour
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-06 11:26 AM
Like others have said, this character has potential, although she does seem very powerful for her age.

I agree with what Ancient Gamer as far as her "perfection" is concerned. Perhaps increasing her age to 140+ (she is an elf after all) would help explain where she gained such skill with magic and steel?

The idea of her being unable to control her magic makes for a nice start, perhaps maybe add in a few minor scars from her training with a blade and battles up to this point? (maybe even an old injury that acts up once in a while?)

Some more detail into her personality and emotions would also help round out the character more.

A few questions to help inspire you:

-How did she feel about selling her self out for assassination missions? Was the first kill easy? Did it bother her she was perhaps making someone else an orphan just like she was? Has it occurred to her she has become no better than the person she is seeking vengeance upon?

-Why did she do assassinations for so little coin? (depending on the setting, usually 7 silver is barely enough to cover a hot meal.) Was it because of her morals and being choosy on the contracts? Her inexperience? (One would imagine a spelling slinging sword master for hire could command solver hundred gold a contract easily)

-Have any of her contracts effected the political atmosphere of the surrounding kingdoms? (perhaps causing the war you alluded to?)

-Where did she meet her true love and how? Did he willingly leave to fight in the war? Was he drafted? (some kingdoms were known to draft peasants into militias to defend their borders) Or were they separated when the enemy forces ransacked their town?

-Why did she not fight in the war herself? (With her combative capabilities she could have marketed herself as a mercenary with ease) Was it due to beliefs? Fear? Other obligations?

-What has she done during the years of her travels? Has she met anyone of significance that has changed her outlook on life?

If you can cover some of these questions and flesh her out into more of a fully developed
character I'll be happy to change my vote much higher. Also run the spell check option before submitting to help iron out any more spelling errors. (This character has the potential to be a 4.0 or higher with more detail and a good overhaul.) Go to Comment
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