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Tooky Bird
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-04 01:25 PM
Not bad for a first sub, perhaps going into a little bit more detail as to the evolution and mating habits of the creature, as well as any possible use an entrepreneurial adventurer might have for a young creature or the eggs. (I would imagine if they could be tamed and trained to act immediately upon an intruders presence these birds would make splendid guard animals.) Go to Comment
Tooky Bird
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-04 05:37 PM
I like the changes a lot, it fleshes out the creature nicely and makes it more useful. (Still a few spelling errors though but they're pretty minor. (Much better than it;s first draft hence my vote is being recast higher.) Go to Comment
Chasers
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (City/ Ruin)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-04 08:20 PM
I've actually spawned this into a rather dark and grim short story taking place both before, and after the diary entry. I'll give this a touch up later on this week; about the same time I give Dr. Taidani his make over. Go to Comment
Chasers
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (City/ Ruin)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-05 06:50 PM
That;s for the useful feedback everyone, I'll keep it in mind when I give this piece an overhaul later on. :) Go to Comment
Creeping Wax
Items  (Other)   (Villanous)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-03 09:04 PM
Nasty stuff, reminds me a lot of a burning wax artifact from vampire the masquerade. I like the additional details you put in the back ground history and plot ideas. Go to Comment
The Grey Skull
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-02 03:23 PM
Without a doubt one of the best npc's I've came across in a long time. Like Misanpilgrim said, he would work well in a fantasy setting with a little adjustment and be every bit as unique and interesting. (if not more so.) Go to Comment
Bridgeton Asylum
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-03 10:31 PM
Updated: Fixed the text formatting errors. Go to Comment
Bridgeton Asylum
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-29 09:14 PM
Updated: Added in a extra half page of content. Go to Comment
Bridgeton Asylum
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-02 03:29 PM
The thing is I pasted that in from notepad so I;m not sure why it;s doing that. Perhaps because I;'m using firefox instead of internet explorer? Any feedback on how to prevent that in the future would be much appreciated. Go to Comment
Candle Beetles
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-30 11:48 PM
Aye, quite magical, but they've got no particular origin I've thought of yet, although that could make for an interesting adventure for a scholar pc or npc ;) (If one could determine it's origin one could perhaps find a more adaptable species to use for alchemical purposes.) Go to Comment
Candle Beetles
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-02 03:36 PM
Aye as light, or more as a improvised fire bomb attack.. A canny adventurer could find a relatively easy way to trap a few of them in a bag without too much trouble. Go to Comment
Candle Beetles
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-02 03:43 PM
Updated: Updated with details on how these beetles can be used offensively by a savvy (or desperate) adventurer. Go to Comment
Scalies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (City/ Ruin)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-04 02:41 PM
Like I said in my previous post, they are a mutation caused by whatever biological/nuclear (or magical) weapons were used to make your favorite post apocalypse setting. So while they were not naturally created by the process of evolution, they have mutated and adapted to their environment and now are capable of successfully breeding. Go to Comment
Scalies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (City/ Ruin)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-29 08:32 PM
Updated: Clarified a few small details. Go to Comment
Scalies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (City/ Ruin)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-02 06:40 PM
Actually I was going for something that was similar to the real world parasites "scabies" and "chiggers" but more beneficial; hence the variation of the name into "Scalies." (Mutated by radiation the post apocalypse setting I used them in.)

The reference from Dune sounds vaguely familiar. I read that book ages ago, and was bored to death close to the end. If I remember right the things from Dune were ultimately lethal, irremovable, and made Leto close to invulnerable, unlike the Scalies. Go to Comment
Scalies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (City/ Ruin)
Silveressa's comment on 2012-03-01 04:14 PM


The original concept was for them to feed off a persons sweat and perhaps body hair as well; which could prove advantageous to some people. I like the idea of them becoming parasitic and consuming healthy flesh if left in place for more then a week or two, especially if they execrate an anesthetic preventing the wearer from realizing they were being slowly eaten alive until they tried to remove them...



Also in the original post apocalypse setting their main draw back was the continual perception/skill penalty from feeling the creatures crawling over your skin, making it difficult to perform complex tasks and conentrate for long, let alone get a good nights sleep.



besides the caused discomfort when set on,  wearing clothing was difficult to impossible as well as the social interaction pentaly. (Who's going to have a normal conversation with someone covered in a crawling carpet of bugs, a few of which may decide you are a more desireable host?) This alone provided enough problems to off set their advantages and keep them balanced. (they also weren't very bullet proof, making them a less then optimal armor choice for firearms conflicts.)

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Zap Flies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-30 11:51 PM
They were designed more for a post apocalypse or space faring campaign actually, hence the runaway lawnmower reference in the description. (I almost added in a bit about shotguns and flamers being the preferred weapon of choice to counter these pests but figured that pigeon holed them a bit too much as far as high tech/low tech versatility)

As for size, that includes the wing span. Go to Comment
Zap Flies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Swamp)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-02 03:50 PM
I didn't go into a whole lot of description since they are for general appearances simply an enlarged common creature so a lengthy description would have been redundant.

I'm not sure if you could tame it as a pet since like most insects, as soon as it becomes hungry it immediately goes in search of food. Anyone attempting to tame one would therefore need to keep a readily available supply of food near by. (And once it pupated the food supply would then have to be living for the insect to show any interest.)

Although; I suppose in a post apocalypse setting a sufficiently vile and crazed person could raise one or more of the creatures by feeding it scraps of meat then after pupation allowing to to feed upon a slave, or even their own body when food was scarce. Go to Comment
Dr. Tadani
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-04-30 04:30 PM
I like the ideas Misampilgrim, when i get some extra time I'll see about giving the good Dr. a bit of a makeover ;) Go to Comment
Rage protector of the streets
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-04 01:18 PM
More she'll accept contracts from the poor to remove people who are taking advantage of them or causing them harm.

As far as respecting life, she respects the lives of the poor and downtrodden, just not those who seek to abuse the poor and downtrodden, or those so much better off that do nothing to help the poor. Go to Comment
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