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NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-21 10:05 PM
Updated: fixed the punctuation and word errors. Go to Comment
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-22 11:51 PM
Updated: converting changed to converging. Go to Comment
One man's plush toy...
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-20 06:03 PM
I like this as an unrelated sub plot a sneaky gm can toss into any adventure and smile as the players try and link the two completely separate plots together somehow.

A nice touch to with the evil being created almost randomly, rather than deliberate act by some evil wizard or other. Go to Comment
Necklace of Laerthra
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-20 12:01 AM
Okay first off there's some paradoxes with this and stuff left unanswered: (aside from grammar and punctuation which I'll leave for someone else to point out)

A sapphire could be seen hanging from the necklace;

Could? does this mean the sapphire sometimes isn't able to be seen hanging from it?

She didnt create the universe, nor did she create life as we know it, she only created things that the people of the realm are able to use in their daily lives.

Laerthra only ever created necklaces, rings, and other forms of valuables. She had the ability to create other things like: swords, crossbows, chairs, doors, jars, etc. These items were then
dropped from heaven and given to the humans.

Okay so in one sentence she is capable of making everything people can use in their daily lives. In the next she only makes ever makes jewelry? Which is it? Doors jars etc or just jewelry?

Soon the humans learned how to create items much like the ones she made, and she strived to make something that could not be compared to.

Could not be compared to what? Her beauty? The beauty of the universe?

She had created a Sapphire necklace, once that could be unmatched by any other, and there was only one reason that she did this, and that was to have something that could compare to.

Once again compare to what?

The other Gods didn't take this too lightly; in fact they had banished Laerthra into the necklace that she had created, which was then hidden at the bottom of an Oasis, in the Sands of Gartuan.

What happened to the original life essence trapped within the necklace? Why did they choose to hide it at the bottom of an oasis? Last but not least what are the Sands of Gartuan? A gods holy place? A tropical island beach? A desert? What?

he noticed something in the corner of his eyes, giving off a red glow, but when he looked toward the glow it had disappeared. The man jumped into the water and pulled the necklace out.

If the glow disappeared how did he find the necklace?

Gods never transgressed with humans. They usually stuck to their own business, though Ciliantis the God of Epiphany and Inspiration had intervened quite often, in order to help the humans along with their advances in their civilization.

Okay so if they never transgressed then how did one of them intervene quite often?

He had told someone of this item, telling them of its magical ability, but never giving the entire story.

What did he tell them? and who were they? How did he tell them this? Did this one person spread the tale all over the land so it is well known legend? or is this an obscure tale one would have to hunt through scrolls of lore to hear of?

On his way back to town, the necklace had disappeared from his possession, soon after he started to feel the life being drained from his body. After a quick search of the camel, and his body, he realized that the necklace was around his neck.

So is the necklace weightless? Given it's 24 inches of solid gold with a large stone on the end of it I would imagine he would have felt it suddenly pulling down around his neck when it appeared on him.

Honestly while this piece shows some glimmer of promise it feels hurried and lacking cohesion. (along with the spelling errors and word mis uses) Perhaps reworking this piece to correct the contradictions and fleshing it out more can turn it into a worthwhile sub. Currently though it's not ready for the public imho. Go to Comment
Darkest of Winters
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-05-03 12:17 PM
Actually, I think I have a few more chapters of this kicking around on one of my back up drives somewhere, if I can find them I'll toss them later on this month, thanks for the reminder! Go to Comment
PC's- Childhood
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Players)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-19 05:07 AM
Fascinating article, although I confess, most of the players I've had the pleasure of gming for have been quite the opposite of the hack'n slash bullies that resort to violence at every opportunity. They often attempted diplomacy in situations where violence would be a more logical recourse. (Such as when dealing with a group of starving goblins raiding a villages grain stores for survival) Although there was that one sick player that decided to rape and mutilate the towns vagrant children rather than give them a few coins to survive on...

For certain though exploring the early years of a characters (or npc's) history is a great opportunity for character development and to flesh out the reasons behind those personality quirks everyone takes for the fun of it.

It can also provide the gm with some interesting background material to work with. After all, what happened to that bully that repeatedly beat up the char when he was 7 and stole his toys? Did he grow up to become leader of a prominent bandit group? Or did he see the error of his ways and make amends as a cleric of light?)

A well thought out article that can take any game in new directions and flesh out the background of any pc or npc 5/5 Go to Comment
Can you hear that sound?
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-21 01:04 AM
I too fail to see how this is related to gaming in anyway. If it was linked to an actual demon sub, or npc sub, or *something* concrete to link it to actual gaming related to the poem then it'd make sense.

Currently this poem could just as easily be about a nightmare, or a horror movie as about something gaming related. (It also feels rather repetitive but that could just be me.) Go to Comment
The Storm
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Any)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-17 06:45 PM
Excellent piece. It has primordial menace to it that just makes it so appealing. I particularly like the pic you used, it captures the storms fury perfectly. 5/5 Go to Comment
Another ghost in the graveyard?!
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-16 04:52 PM
Updated: Fixed a few small spelling errors Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-15 05:04 PM
It's nice to see a magical creature that;s useful and not overly predatory/threatening. One of these could also make an interesting familiar for a water warlock or other npc mage of the sea. Go to Comment
Bai Yu (White Death Rain)
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-15 01:49 AM
Updated: Fixed some minor html coding problems. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-17 05:31 PM
As far as I knew anytime you updated it forced you to make a comment explaining what the update was, thanks for clarifying it. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-12 06:53 PM
Update: Added an expanded/improved back-story behind the meeting of her familiar, and several plot hooks to introduce her to a prospective party of adventurers. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-14 11:42 PM
Updated: Formatting mangled some punctuation which I replaced. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-15 04:29 PM
Updated: Fixed a minor misspelling. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2008-05-16 12:03 AM
This was my first attempt at turning a pc into an npc. I did my best to keep certain parts of her nature open to interpretation to keep a gm's options open with possibilities.

I'm considering detailing the familiar in more depth as a separate sub, but not sure if it's worth it. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-12 06:55 PM
Thanks for the suggestion, I meant to get around to it years ago, the slight enhancement does make for a better background over all and less abrupt. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-15 03:39 AM
Aye, like most tragedies, they unravel quickly once events begin to unfold. In this case mostly because her mother used her as a convenient scape goat to avoid a lynching.

Good point about the scholar though, something less "luxurious" would work better in the storyline and be more believable. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-15 03:42 AM
Update: In her backstory changed the scholar tutor to a more believable/realistic local temple scribe. Go to Comment
Kisanth, Mage servant of Isis
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Silveressa's comment on 2014-05-12 03:28 AM
Update: Fixed the formatting issues (caused by a site update at some point in the past) that made the sub an eye sore to read. Go to Comment
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