Excellent setting location with a nicely detailed history that really brings it to life. Tis place can fit perfectly into any fantasy game with a little tweaking, and is the perfect location for those scholar and historians to investigate. (Either as pc's or by hiring the pc's for protection)
I would definitely like to see Deneb written up as a separate sub since she woudl make a great ally for the serpent to conjure up to help any adventure restore the kingdom to it's former glory. (Or as a reward for a job well done to keep the heroine/hero company on the nights there after.)
(on a small note I think the "Atlantic Awaits" woudl read better if it was "Atlantis Awaits" ) Go to Comment
An interesting weapon, but of limited usefulness if it can only be wielded by frost giants. Within a campaign the weapon could always be wielded by a frost giant villain, making him even more dangerous then normal. As long as such a ruler lorded over the icy mountain ranges it would give all but the most capable adventurers pause for thought. Go to Comment
I agree with what Scras said, this sub could use more to it or perhaps less. Maybe cut out the throne, making it it's own separate sub, and focus on the glacier with a more complete history of what it is, how it came to be, etc..
Lovely start though, I look forward to seeing it more fleshed out. Go to Comment
That's the pivotal point of most campaigns, either attempting to reactivate the ships main drive or find a way off the otherwise doomed Ark. (Possibly something they can only achieve with the help of their hated rivals in another dome, or enemy tech priests.
You're right though, I should update it and add a few extra bits on escape. Go to Comment
Nice idea, but like others said it could use a little polishing for consistency. (Mainly where it;s already been mentioned)
Also your lines: After a period of five days the eggs hatch and the offspring squirm out. Upon hatching, the first thing the beetles do is to latch themselves onto the stomach walls using the suction pads on their legs.
After 5 days the would have most likely traveled entirely through the digestive track and been expelled with the rest of the bodily waste. Perhaps having the hatching time be a couple of hours rather than days would be better. (it takes approx 2-6 hours to digest a meal depending on what and how much was eaten)
Otherwise it fits nicely into any squalor and slum area, although I am curious how it denotes the difference between under cooked /raw meat and an open bloody wound on a person/creature. The other question I have is if they can swell to rat sized, what happens when a person has 5 or more of these things inside them? Does it rupture the stomach lining in the last stages of growth? Prevent consumption of any food do to filling the stomach?
Also any treatment/cure to alleviate the symptoms would be nice to see. (With it directly in the stomach I would imagine digestion of a large quantity of hard alcohol would serve to paralyze or possibly kill it) Does vomiting effect the creature? Is it possible to throw one up if you heave with sufficient force? (Especially if paralyzed by alcohol
Oh and the name seems a little incongruous with the description, since it spends the majority of it's life as a larvae in the hosts stomach)
Sorry to nit pick, but this has the potential be a neat sub with a bit more cleaning up. Go to Comment
I've found gummi bears to be pretty popular with most people, or honey roasted peanuts. (Individual chocolate chips or mini marshmallows work well too and are relatively cheap by the bag full.)
If you're running a combat heavy session though switching to nuts/dried fruits is highly recommended to prevent that sickly sweet feeling in players stomachs from cutting the adventure short. (Banana chips work great for something sweet, yet not overly sweet even when consumed in bulk.) Go to Comment
Nicely done, a excellent sub section that can be plugged into any fantasy city description. I'm a little puzzled what you mean by lead-salted ale though; but over all it's a great red-light district that offer plenty of adventure opportunities.
I'll make a couple scroll subs for this later on when I have time, nicely done! Go to Comment