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The Tower Shield
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-23 07:55 AM


It reminds me a bit too much of Daern's Instant Fortress from D&D 3.5 for my taste, that aside however it is well written and a bit more useful then the original artifact. 



I am curious though if the fortress mirrors the damage it receives when being used a shield? (Is it magically healed when shape shifting? Does the shield regenerate damage?)



What happens if the tower shield is destroyed? Is the contents of the fortress suddenly expelled?



Also, what about removing some of the items that were inside when it was created? (Such as a cloak, or books) Can it be done? If so can they be re added at a later date? What about maintenance to the furniture inside? Would reupholstering a chair or new down for the pillows expel the entire object or be considered part of the original and allowed to stay?



As it is with nothing new able to be kept inside having to lug around enough candles and/or lamp oil to light the tower could prove to be a pain for any owner that doesn't know magic for lighting. (Scavenging enough firewood to heat the thing in colder climates would be a serious hassle as well.) 

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Premonitions
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-20 11:58 PM
What happened next would be more of a (lengthy) campaign synopsis, the length of a short novel, which I could probably detail in installments if anyone was truly interested... Go to Comment
The Visit
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-15 01:14 AM


A nice galactic introduction, and provides a good backdrop of first contact history without niggling too much over the specific details.



It feels like the prelude to something more, that it stops just shy of the next chapter involving humanities first steps into the stars. (Similar to Star Trek Enterprise?) A creative Gm could easily use this as the spring board for a space faring campaign involving the crew of Earths first FTL capable starship.



Much enjoyed, and gave me lots of ideas, nicely done! 


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An Adequate Blade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-15 01:39 AM


A simple weapon perfect as a family heirloom and well suited for beginning adventurers. (Especially if the swords unique method of gaining it's magical properties still makes it appear to be a mundane weapon even when subjected to magical scrutiny and detection.)



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The Fallen
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Other)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-08 10:19 AM


Very unique, and intriguing although it does leave me with a few small questions.



Are these creatures able to reproduce like normal? (Similar to mermaids and naga) Or are they essentially asexual in nature?



From what's been observed of these creatures is their life span significantly longer or shorter then the human norm?



Is the upper torso always of human appearance or have Elven, Dwarven etc.. features been seen? (Assuming such creatures exist in the world)



These questions aside it's an interesting piece, I look forward to seeing more of the setting.


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The Chair of Malicious Truth
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Cursed)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-03 04:04 PM


A nice beginning, although I would have preferred to see some details surrounding how the chair came to be either possessed, or enchanted with the truth power.



The sub also leaves me with a lot of questions. How did this carpenter imbue the chair with such magic without his knowledge? (Or did someone else enchant it?) Why does it always tell the worst crimes a person has committed?



What is the reason for its intolerance of innocents? (It leads me to assume it's a malicious force rather then a pure truth teller?)



Can the chair only lie when innocents set upon it? Or can it mix truth and lies as it wishes to further discredit whomever sits within it?



Lastly does the chair have any sort of magical resistance to damage? (Like Mystic said, one would expect an angry sitter would have taken an ax to it well before this, or doused it in lamp oil and a torch.)



I hope to see this fleshed out more in the future, it;s got a great beginning and is a somewhat unique artifact, it just needs more back story and details to feel "complete"


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The Chair of Malicious Truth
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-06 06:13 AM
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The Keep Beneath the Dusky Star
Dungeons  (Mountains)   (Rooms/ Halls)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-02 11:50 AM


My first thought when giving this a brief once over was "Is this a sub or an excerpt from a source book supplement?



It's going to take me the better part of a day to have the time to read through it all, but so far it's of remarkable quality and one of the subs I'd love to have as a .pdf for simplicity sake.



5/5 (Will change my vote later after reading through in its entirety in the highly unlikely event that's necessary)

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The Seir and the death of the Old World
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-01 02:04 PM


An interesting creation myth with solid reasoning how it was recorded and preserved through the ages.



There are a few bits that are somewhat ill defined int he battle account, such as "devastating viral theurgies, reality-skewers and vacuum-lances." Defining these strange weapons in a separate sub might help make the battle sound more epic and less confusing. 



Another small bit that confused me: "while the heavens were rent asunder by pleromic battles" IS this to mean "God like battles" or "battles of holy light?" clarifying this as well might make it easier to envision the battle and be less jarring to readers. (That and pleromic is one of those rarely used or referenced words few will understand the potential definition of without looking it up)



Those few issues aside though the sub makes for a good creation myth to add in to a fantasy game easily, or even as recovered scrolls of a long dead civilization in a sci-fi setting, nicely done.



Edit:

Oh and on a side note, it might work better to leave the article as "in work advice requested" then putting it as a normal sub with the *In work* in the intro.

Also, since this sub is more of a archeological/historical text then about an actual lifeform a category other then Lifeforms Intelligent Species Any would be more appropriate and helpful to the readers. Go to Comment
The Seir and the death of the Old World
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-02-01 02:07 PM
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93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-21 11:59 AM


31. With a scroll containing the giant growth spell you have giant beast more then the equal of a small band of brigands.



32. Keeping unruly prisoners under control won't be a problem any longer. (Interrogations will be much easier as well with a hungry croc at hand.)



33. Haggling with shopkeepers will be easier then ever before!



34. You can impress anyone in town by "wrestling" the croc into submission.



35. If properly trained, a mini catapult can turn your pet into a deadly airborne projectile!



36. "My Croc ate it." The perfect excuse for forgetting to bring along any item on a quest. (Also good for explaining what happened to that small pouch of gems, or magic ring you'd just as soon keep for yourself.)



 

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93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-21 12:01 PM


Fun sub, 36/101 over 1/3rd there already. :)


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93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-21 01:48 PM


37. Makes purse cutting in a crowd tons easier. (People are far more likely to watch the croc in their midst then their coin purse and your hands.)



38. Can easily bust open any small locked treasure chests you come across.



39. Room service at any inn is guaranteed to knock before entering your room.



40.  A perfect guardian for night watch that will easily blend in with the fallen logs in the forest near your camp. (Or anywhere else with a little paint/dye and some skill)



41. Cuts down on ration wasting. (Any rancid and rotten meats your party owns can be fed to the croc rather then thrown away.)



42. If you're a gal, a croc at your side is guaranteed to keep anyone from feeling you up in a crowded market.



43.  Anyone who owes you money is sure to pay up after the first visit.


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93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-21 01:49 PM
Added in #37-#43. Go to Comment
93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-21 02:38 PM
Thanks! :) Go to Comment
93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-21 04:09 PM


44. Every adventurer will want to buy you a drink and maybe even dinner to hear the tale behind how you acquired such a rare pet. 



45. Bards will want to compose songs about such a legendary warrior and their croc pet!



46. Worrying about muggers while staggering back to the inn blind drunk is no longer a concern!



47. Add a makeshift bearskin rug over the top of your croc and you have a crazed beast of legend sure to frighten dim witted barbarian and goblin tribes!



48. With a little ventriloquism you have a reliable witness/interrogator no ones going to second guess.



49. Assuming the croc's female and has mated you have priceless baby crocs to sell. Who wouldn't be willing to pay a fortune for a croc pet of their own?



50. If possessing fewer scruples then the average person you can also regularly sell ostrich or other monster eggs for a hefty profit, claiming they're the fertile eggs of your croc. (And when they never hatch, well gee, that's too bad, must be the new owner didn't care for the egg properly, not your fault, too late now!)



51. With some special training a saltwater croc can make one seriously wicked surfboard. Go to Comment
93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-01-21 04:11 PM
#44-#51 taken care of! Go to Comment
93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-22 11:24 PM


67. It's a ready made (if rough) canvas for your artwork, paint on some ancent war cries in orcish and stick figures and you have some  "fracking voodoo magic mon" sure to terrify the ignorant enemies.



68. Collect the droppings and sell them as fertilizer to the farmers.



69. Or dry them for fire wood!



70. Those little birds that love to pick the bits of flesh out of the crocs mouth (Egyptian plover) can be tasty in a stew.



71. The bird feathers can be nice for blow guns or small arrows too.



72. Evasion: Rub up against the crocidle and you'll have a musky scent to keep those blood hounds off your trail.


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93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-22 11:25 PM


Aye, and helped inspire me to add 67-73, many thanks!

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93 Benefits to owning a pet Crocodile
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Silveressa's comment on 2011-07-22 11:31 PM


73. Smear soem croc droppings on your weapon/arrow head and you can make some nasty wounds sure to get infected and kill or slow down an enemy over time.


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