Its simple, but it does wrap it up nicely. I'd like to know the physical description of the demon - all we gather is that its form differs from humans, but not so much he cant hide them, and that he also has chains of some sort grafted to him...?
Quite a simple item, and cloaks of hiding are fairly common, unless Im mistaken. Though, if this were given a good background and a more in-depth description I think it could do well. One thing, however - posts in the citadel are supposed to be non-system, so people can adapt it to whatever they wish. please keep it in mind in the future :)
Don't be discouraged, however - keep trying, and im sure you'll make some great items before long. Perhaps looking at some of our 5-rated items will give an idea on the depth and detail needed to get a good mark.
Wow, this gives an idea for something similar for me, but I won't post it because its just a variation of this, plus I'd have to come up with a background for it.
How about, when a certain pair of gloves are worn, Metal, and ONLY metal, is able to be shaped like warm clay. This could mean some brilliant masterpieces by someone good with their hands, but also, if someone forgets about their gloves, then grips their sword (which was passed for generations through the family) too hard, they bend the steel and ruin it completely. If someones dangling off the end of a cliff with these gloves on, and the only thing which the fellow adventurers can reach down for him to grab was a metal mace, the man could grasp it, and the metal will tear apart like clay, the person falling to their dooms :D
:) Yep. Karamus made this item for a noble cause, but that does not mean people with darker intents won't use it for desctruction. But destroying a forest is gonna take a hell of a lot of bows if it destroys one per firing. Go to Comment
lol - if it's plantlife, it will slaughter it, Echo :) So in a world with dangerous plants, entrapping vines which suck your blood and and bulbs that uproot themselves and chase you, these arrows would be quite useful. Go to Comment
True, Anonymous. But even still, a decent sized forest will take a lifetime to raze. Say one walks at a leisurely pace, and does not stop for any rests, 10 hours a day. The average person walks at 3-5 km/h so at their best, that is 50 kilometers IN A STRAIGHT LINE. If they are going to take out a small line, this would mean zig-zagging around. Forests can be hundreds of kilometers squared. It would take a lifetime to take out an entire forest. And dont think you could get 200 people to do this - there were only 200 arrows ever made and they have since been divided over the world, between millions of people. You might get 2-3 arrows, tops. The best thing in terms of destroying a forest I can think of, is that it would be good to make a small clearing (like the loggers did) in a very short amount of time, which would stop anything from coming at you from above.
So once this bird eats these seeds, not even their owner can approach them, lest they be burned to a crisp? An interesting idea nonetheless - A nice, more mundane item, than those we have been seeing lately.
Imagine throwing these seeds into a flock of pigeons, then running through the pigeons to scatter them away - it would be a good way of burning down a town ;)
I'd give this a 3.5/5, but since I cant do that, I'll give it a 4/5 Go to Comment
Very nice - extremely powerful in the imaginative hands, but obviously this wasnt meant to be carried around by just anyone.
I can imagine an item coming from it - Made by a dark lord who was skilled in the art of poetry. A transparent crystal, tinged with a black essence swirling within - this is a poem of dispair caught within. Since the poet has already seen it, he would be immune to its effects, but if this is used on an enemy, the enemy may drop their weapons and wail in distress of the dispair on which they hear, leaving them entirely at the users mercy.
This item is both detailed and yet vague, as we know what it is capable of, but yet there are so many capabilities yet to imagine. 5/5 for a good story :) Go to Comment
Not a bad item, powerful, but not uber-powerful, and one must be in need to reshape the armor, so there IS a catch of sorts. A curious background that, though could be expanded and explained in more detail, is sound, and works fairly well.
I think this, though perhaps not as good as it could be, is not a bad item.
Your typical maddened slughterer :)
Ok, usability: 3/5 - He can be used as a section in a quest for adventurers, or perhaps if you were campaigning as thieves and assassins, he could be part of the party, but mind he doesnt kill you first.
Background: 2/5 - Not bad, but a bit bland.
Appearance: 1/5 - Very basic appearance. The appearance should include personality traits, likes and dislikes, hair colour basic habits and the like.
All in all, I'll give it a 2/5. It does show some promise. Go to Comment
I like the idea behind it, but more emphasis on the background would be very good.
Is there, perhaps, a particular incident which made the harper king have need of this cup? Maybe he was almost assassinated by someone he thought his friend, so now he gets all who are close to him to drink from the goblet while 'rue' is in effect.
"Yes, I plan to kill you, king." (Three minutes up) "Uh... hm? Sorry, I must have blanked out there for a moment.."
"No problem" Smiled the king, "Let me refill that cup for you" The king takes the goblet, refilling it with wine and pressing on the emerald. "Har!"
"Oh, nothing, sorry. Here is your wine"
Whilst the assassin is laughing uncontrollably, the king simply slides a dagger through his ribs.
even if the past is supposed to be hidden, or if nobody knows of the past, you should still fill in the background, because DMs should have a right to know what they are dealing with. Plus if people who know this character don't know the past, they won't be able to roleplay him properly, based on his life. :)
Either way, think on your posts and keep up the good work ;) Go to Comment