The greatest compliment that can be received is knowing that someone's used my stuff :) That's why I write here, and it inspires me to write again. Thanks Father Stabbingston! I would love to know how it's received! Go to Comment
So cool, Moon. You've re-created a post-apocalyptic world under the sea; have you played Bioshock? It seems to have influences of it in here.
I'm sure each settlement will become more and more unique as time goes on, with their own lifestyles and superstitions - the ones without rail access will probably become especially eccentric with less access to other folk. This way, new religions and cults and societies can be forged out of the settlements; if the pcs have to visit a settlement that has been isolated for decades they may find themselves attacked as heretics!
You've flipped the world upside down with this: as the sea becomes more well known and mapped, it is the land which becomes like the ocean, unexplored and mysterious! Go to Comment
It is what it is: an in depth and sensible calendar and time system for dwarvish folk.
I would say that it would be unlikely that there are geysers in every dwarven population that burst every hour; which leads me to think that the way around this is making the time largely subjective and having the adaptability that dwarves have with changing time systems (and their stubbornness) if a dwarf goes to another locale with a geydir that actually erupts 1 1\3 hours, they would simply deny that the time is different and say that it is correct, even though the day technically is a fair bit longer.
just like when they are on the surface and adapt to the surface time, they will adapt to different variable dwarf-locale times. Go to Comment
I read through all of this thinking 'hey, this guy is pretty cool!', and then I saw your disclaimer at the end and Gossamer's comment about it being very similar to a lot of things she had already seen :(
whellp, I'm not as well versed as others in this stuff, and this sounded fun to me, so I'll give you that extra bit of score! Go to Comment
Will Matteus Carter be a recurring character in future transcriptions? :p
I like the way you structured this sub; what we are reading is Matteus's interpretation of this poem and it may not be correct, which means if anything is wrong about this sub for your own dwarves in your specific game, you can explain it away due to the interpretation.
Hoo hah! The demons in Atheus are the people of Atheus! That's twisted! So in effect, without knowing it they are enslaving their own ancestors as slaves! Really interesting take on demons and hell, Caesar; I like very much!
Jacob Latris has unwittingly come upon the source of magic in Atheus itself, not to mention the means to manufacture demons for his own purpose! A dangerous gift to bestow on someone if his questionable morals and sanity!
I like that the idea of the afterlife and congeria are nothing like what Atheans expect. What a demoralizing thing to know if they ever find out that when they die they may just be processed and turn into chaotic monsters. Go to Comment
I absolutely love everything about this; I think it's incredible that you came up with your own warped versions of each of these (I especially like the cacodemon and how it has a body in an alternate plane.
im probably swayed by the fact that i'm playing doom 3 through again at the moment: it isnt as fantastic as the first games and it doesn't have the nostalgia value, but it's still nice in its own right.
Thanks for writing this up as a companion for Retribution!
I call dibs on writing up an idea for the Arch-Vile (My favourite of the doom-world beasties!) Go to Comment
A predictable power, but it has a nice cursed touch to it and is well written up!
Even though the curse is very potent and life threatening, I still feel it is a red overpowered because it may be exploitable: should the pc's ever find a way to reverse their age, or ever have a chance at immortality this would more or less turn them into gods.
To help limit this exploitation, Personally, I would make it a one-use or maybe several-use item before it breaks (perhaps ages as well, and ends up turning to dust).
All in all, a very solid first sub; welcome to the citadel and keep on writing! :D Go to Comment
A useful weapon! They should make kids version of it in real life; im sure it could be used effectively in todays world!
as for being stabbed by one, I would think a reflex/dexterity/speed or equivalent save would be applicable. Critically failing means it explodes in the wound. Failing means it explodes in the hand, passing means you throw it randomly away in time and a natural 20 or equivalent means you throw it and pierce the target of your choice (such as the one who stabbed you in the first place, or at least a wall near where they stand.