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Demonic Pipe Organ
Dungeons  (Underground)   (Puzzles)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2014-05-19 05:52 AM
The greatest compliment that can be received is knowing that someone's used my stuff :) That's why I write here, and it inspires me to write again. Thanks Father Stabbingston! I would love to know how it's received! Go to Comment
Refuge Beneath the Waves
Locations  (Regional)   (Water)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-10 12:09 AM
So cool, Moon. You've re-created a post-apocalyptic world under the sea; have you played Bioshock? It seems to have influences of it in here.

I'm sure each settlement will become more and more unique as time goes on, with their own lifestyles and superstitions - the ones without rail access will probably become especially eccentric with less access to other folk. This way, new religions and cults and societies can be forged out of the settlements; if the pcs have to visit a settlement that has been isolated for decades they may find themselves attacked as heretics!

You've flipped the world upside down with this: as the sea becomes more well known and mapped, it is the land which becomes like the ocean, unexplored and mysterious! Go to Comment
The Most Serene and Devoted Temple of the Moon
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-07 05:11 PM
This is nice, and i think would fit more as a fairy tale in a game about the sun and moon, than an actual physical place.

Short and sweet, and with good imagery. Go to Comment
Dwarven Calendar
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (Specific)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-06 09:02 PM
It is what it is: an in depth and sensible calendar and time system for dwarvish folk.

I would say that it would be unlikely that there are geysers in every dwarven population that burst every hour; which leads me to think that the way around this is making the time largely subjective and having the adaptability that dwarves have with changing time systems (and their stubbornness) if a dwarf goes to another locale with a geydir that actually erupts 1 1\3 hours, they would simply deny that the time is different and say that it is correct, even though the day technically is a fair bit longer.
just like when they are on the surface and adapt to the surface time, they will adapt to different variable dwarf-locale times. Go to Comment
All Quiet on the West Third Street Front
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-05 07:40 PM
This tale made me smile. I enjoyed the parallels you presented between the simple snow-fight and war. A well written short tale.

I'm somewhat at a loss as how to vote on it though, since I don't really see a lot of short stories in here. Nevertheless, I'll give it a 4 - well written and made me smile. Go to Comment
Stout Lagerale
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-05 07:53 PM
I read through all of this thinking 'hey, this guy is pretty cool!', and then I saw your disclaimer at the end and Gossamer's comment about it being very similar to a lot of things she had already seen :(

whellp, I'm not as well versed as others in this stuff, and this sounded fun to me, so I'll give you that extra bit of score! Go to Comment
The Hedge Maze
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Plains)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-05 08:05 PM
Its a handy maze which can be slotted into any number of campaigns, just by slapping whatever goal the party needs to accomplish in the tower in the middle. Go to Comment
Hell Knight: The Tragedy of Celsia Rimeheart.
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-05 02:19 AM
It appears I am having issues with spacing and paragraphs when I write up submissions directly in the editor; apologies if this makes it a more difficult read! Go to Comment
Hell Knight: The Tragedy of Celsia Rimeheart.
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-06 06:15 PM
Fair call, Gossamer. I get caught up in expanding the story and then it just grows too much. I think I will try and set myself a limit for some future subs. Go to Comment
What Is A Dwarf
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-05 08:50 PM
Will Matteus Carter be a recurring character in future transcriptions? :p

I like the way you structured this sub; what we are reading is Matteus's interpretation of this poem and it may not be correct, which means if anything is wrong about this sub for your own dwarves in your specific game, you can explain it away due to the interpretation.

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The Needwain
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Local)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-02 06:38 PM
A nice snippet which is vague enough to be adapted into many games! Go to Comment
Congeria
Locations  (World)   (Any)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-31 05:09 PM
Hoo hah! The demons in Atheus are the people of Atheus! That's twisted! So in effect, without knowing it they are enslaving their own ancestors as slaves! Really interesting take on demons and hell, Caesar; I like very much!

Jacob Latris has unwittingly come upon the source of magic in Atheus itself, not to mention the means to manufacture demons for his own purpose! A dangerous gift to bestow on someone if his questionable morals and sanity!

I like that the idea of the afterlife and congeria are nothing like what Atheans expect. What a demoralizing thing to know if they ever find out that when they die they may just be processed and turn into chaotic monsters. Go to Comment
She Who Dreams
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-31 05:37 PM
This sub is worthy!

I think this is great, LS! This would be great for a historical npc, and snippits of it can be used in multiple games.

it has a very nice storytelling aspect to it, reminds me of the old CaptainPenguin Subs from years ago. Go to Comment
OSF-05 - Wasp's Nest
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-09-02 06:44 PM
I love the idea of the wasp venom missiles; so they are designed to get within a proximity of the target and explode in a shotgun style scatter? Really devastating! Go to Comment
Cosmic Era: Doom Bestiary
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Any)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-31 06:05 PM
I absolutely love everything about this; I think it's incredible that you came up with your own warped versions of each of these (I especially like the cacodemon and how it has a body in an alternate plane.

im probably swayed by the fact that i'm playing doom 3 through again at the moment: it isnt as fantastic as the first games and it doesn't have the nostalgia value, but it's still nice in its own right.

Thanks for writing this up as a companion for Retribution!

I call dibs on writing up an idea for the Arch-Vile (My favourite of the doom-world beasties!)
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The Timeless Pocket Watch
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-29 05:55 PM
A predictable power, but it has a nice cursed touch to it and is well written up!

Even though the curse is very potent and life threatening, I still feel it is a red overpowered because it may be exploitable: should the pc's ever find a way to reverse their age, or ever have a chance at immortality this would more or less turn them into gods.

To help limit this exploitation, Personally, I would make it a one-use or maybe several-use item before it breaks (perhaps ages as well, and ends up turning to dust).

All in all, a very solid first sub; welcome to the citadel and keep on writing! :D Go to Comment
Lover's Downfall
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-29 05:15 PM
I'd enjoy hearing more on the backstory of the necromancer and his mad lover; I think that would be worth a dub all in itself. Also, the Council of Five sounds like an interesting organization!

As for the object itself; it's beat, and knowing where you got the inspiration from, I can't help but picture zombies dancing to a fiddle. Go to Comment
Oscv 02 Baleful Eye
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Combat)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-29 06:23 PM
I like them! Ominous sensory eyes gloating in the dead of space! Val's thoughts on adding mines in conjunction with the eyes is a great idea. Go to Comment
Progressive Stiletto
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-23 04:40 PM
Stab Stab *Boom!*

A useful weapon! They should make kids version of it in real life; im sure it could be used effectively in todays world!

as for being stabbed by one, I would think a reflex/dexterity/speed or equivalent save would be applicable. Critically failing means it explodes in the wound. Failing means it explodes in the hand, passing means you throw it randomly away in time and a natural 20 or equivalent means you throw it and pierce the target of your choice (such as the one who stabbed you in the first place, or at least a wall near where they stand.



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Progressive Stiletto
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2013-08-23 06:47 PM
Fair enough. I was thinking it was pretty powerful if there was little defence available once you're stuck, but then again in a world filled to the brim with ranged weaponry, advanced radar and sensors and such, getting close enough to use one is a feat in itself, so perhaps it is somewhat balanced. Go to Comment
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