Strolen\s Citadel content. 
Ylithain, the Drowned Queen
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-24 10:57 PM
Mmmm, A misunderstood eel-woman!

This tale has a very epic, legendary feel to it; it sucks you in. Very good, Echo! Go to Comment
Demon Rum
Items  (Potion)   (Combat)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-23 11:02 PM
Oooooooooh, Misery!

This holds a special place in my heart, for as I type, I am suffering from a hangover :D

A short, but good submission. The only additional information I'd like to know is what exactly is Demon rum made from, and why does "his judgment goes straight to hell somewhat literally". Go to Comment
Stolvi the Screever
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-24 10:16 AM
Once again, Wulfhere shines above the plebians!
I love how images can provoke thoughts and emotions. Hell, all advertisments use imagery to make us want something or think a certain way about something.
The Screever takes this into a different step - provoking emotions and causing change in the hearts of those who watch.
Anyway. Good sub ;) Go to Comment
Compall Fowle
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-21 10:16 PM
"The curse allegedly causes cramps, fever, and vomiting so severe that healthy men have died from it."

Ah, sounds like a case of severe salmonella poisoning from poorly cooked fowl!
I like this submission - it's not often enough that we get simply a believable lifeform that isn't all-powerful or with some strange quirk.
This is easily something you could find on planet earth. Go to Comment
The Cutsman
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (City/ Ruin)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-20 11:27 PM
I salute thee, captain, for setting this loose upon the citadel.

Aah, the betrayer is betrayed by the creature he was going to use to do the betrayal!
There are two points of this submission that I like most: First bieng the fact that the Cutsman was 'awake' during it's macabre creation, and I especially like how it mimics the remnants of its creators, right down to kneeling before statues and sleeping.

I'd both love and hate to be in a roleplay where the party is slowly walking through these deserted, bloodstained halls, and they turn a corner to see this blademan knelt before the statue of a god, softly gargling and chirring a prayer.

The Man of Blades. The Knife Demon... The terrible and feared CUTSMAN! Go to Comment
Kranno the Skulker and Vonyich Festelgabber
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-20 11:54 AM
Aah, the mis-matched duo!

I really like this - And I love the thought of a master thief calling himself the greatest thief in in kingdom bieng succesfully stalked by a goblin simply to have this 'great thief's' tale published. Go to Comment
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-17 09:30 AM
Can I just say that out of all of this, I like the idea of the "Lost" Plot most. The thought of the only way to kill the zombies is by shattering that which was their 'life' while they were alive. Very nice!

On top of all that: A good, solid mythical weapon: I can imagine only several places that this item could be in current time: Unused, in a temple devoted to Axtrami. Lost somewhere in or beneath the desert; perhaps at the site of a great battlefield. Stolen and hoarded by the "Sect of the shattered orb". Or in a foreigners private collection of artefacts, after having stolen it from the Ouzquin Dremorix at one stage.

Anyway. I know my vote is a bit biased. Either way, 4.5/5. Go to Comment
The King of Hingrad
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-19 04:30 AM
Let me just say one thing, Abock: Your attitude towards criticism is very commendable. We get people that join this site once in a while who make a poor post, and then when we pick it to pieces, they get upset and leave. Your positive learning attitude will help you become a great poster with practice, so thumbs up to that! :) Now! Onto the submission:

Please pay attention to where things should be posted. This should be posted in the NPC section. An NPC is a "Non Player Character", which basically is any specific intelligent lifeform.
Here's an example of the differences between NPC's and Lifeforms.
NPC's: King Arthur, Merlin, George Bush, Count Dracula.
Lifeforms: Homo Sapien, Felines, dragons, vampires.

The grammar and sentence structure of your posts make reading it feel a bit awkward. What I suggest to fix this, is that you should write out your entire submission, then submit is as "In work: Hidden". Leave it for a day, then come back to it and read over it. If it doesn't make sense, THEN edit it and post it. You tend to find a lot more mistakes when your ideas and thoughts aren't in your head.
Furthermore, this website comes with a 'spell check' button - it's there for a reason, and it's better to use it than to have someone take points off a submission because of a few silly mistakes.

Now, apart from those problems, it's obvious you have some good ideas in you - I can see where you're going with this submission, and it's not a bad idea.

Anyway. Don't be discouraged by low marks - we all start somewhere; some of us at the very bottom! Good luck in future ideas! Go to Comment
King Arkon
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-18 08:47 AM
This post got progressively better each line I read. It started off as average at best, but by the end of it, I was fairly interested. There's nothing like solitary confinement to gnaw at one's mind. Go to Comment
Goodman Slatterbite
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-17 09:18 AM
I like this, in a very morbid way :)

Nothing like a bit of scorn and hatred to complete one's day. Go to Comment
The Wrath of Anut-Khanut
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Mystical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-18 08:27 AM
I don't tend to give em out, but hey: 5/5. This submission really appeals to me.

Wulfhere: What I like about your submissions, is that they are a fresh breath: After so long here, you begin to subconsiously pick up the writing styles of the people who post often. This is not those subs a BAD thing; on the contrary, most of the people in this site make top-quality material, but having a new person in with great ideas and a fresh way of presenting them makes posts all the more interesting. Go to Comment
The Incomplete Enchantments of Agarn
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Magical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-12 10:41 PM
"I throw the powder at the bars of the cage!"
- "In midair, the powder turns to a sticky slime substance and lands on the bars with a 'Splork!'. A steady trail of smoke appears as the slime eats away at the bars. After three seconds, the slime slides off the bars and begins slowly slipping towards you, rythmically making disgusting sounds reminiscent of bodily functions. The cement floor begins eating away slowly wherever the slime touches it."

"I .. er... uh... RUN!"

I like the powder :)
I nice little compendium of unintentionally dangerous items. Go to Comment
Magic of the Lesser Creatures
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-09 02:46 PM
Opens more opportunities for Druids and Necromancers. :)
Druids may pursuade the groups of animals to share that magic with them, so when they are around a pack of creatures, perhaps they can cast more powerful spells more easily.

And as for necromancers, crushing the life out of each of these creatures and absorbing their life force as their own (Such as my soul mage, Tarquin, does), could mean more power for them. Which could also be a plot idea, in that in a community of druids, an unnamed foe is destroying all animal life around, the adventurers are either druids who used to share life with these creatures, or are outsiders hired by the druids to put a stop to it.

A nice thought - would be good for Mojena: what if plants had the same thing - as more of them grow in groups, woodcutters may find forest trees more difficult to cut down than lone trees. Or large bunches of poison ivy more irritating to the skin than small amounts.

Perhaps, in the focus of Mojena - a group of trees together casts an increased growth on themselves, meaning that the more they are, the more powerful this spell is. Perhaps this is how the Mojen'lar tree spread throughout the entire world - they grow exponentially as more arise. Go to Comment
The Eternal Witness
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-12 10:46 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Kessen Family Blade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-06 04:49 AM
I think this item is beautiful - not the actual enchantments or what it is, but simply because of its history. I like the idea of the blade, originally something feared as evil that could steal your soul against your will, bieng something used by a noble knight willingly to inspire and guide. Uses of such thing lie in the eye of the beholder, eh? 4.5 from me Go to Comment
30 Tomes
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-09-15 12:22 PM
Haha, Good work on the various links, Muro!
it's obvious you put forethought and depth into each of these books, and they certainly are a believable thing you might find sitting, dog-eared on a table.

Favourite tome: Red Horse Hill- Tonas Undrepya Go to Comment
30 People in a Tavern Crowd
NPCs  (Extras)   (Domestic/ Craft)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-08-31 11:08 PM
A standard bundle of believable tavern-goers. Just as it should be. Go to Comment
Valeras the Forgotten, Lord of Vengeance
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-08-31 07:04 AM
Mmm, what a friendly fellow this Valeras is. Everything seems in order here: Horrid mutations, flesh-ravaging fury and vengeance against those nasty close-minded gods who banished one of their own because they were different. I could like to see the rest of the gods fleshed out, actually. I'd especially enjoy writing up a god who fell victim to Valeras's potent toxins. :) Go to Comment
Plenty O' Enterprizes
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-08-31 07:59 AM
Aah, A nice compendium of your average businesses. Good for someone trying to fill out a city with your average shops(Which, funnily enough, is exactly what i'm in the process of doing, so thank you!) Go to Comment
Where the Road May Take You
Plots  (Travel)   (Encounter)
Shadoweagle's comment on 2006-08-31 07:20 AM
You know... for all the other new posts which have 4's and 5's and are supposed to be brilliant, I found THIS to be the easiest post to read in months.
I'm definitely not saying the other posts are bad, i'm just saying that this post piqued my curiousity and kept me going with little, interesting tidbits. Any of these submissions can be used at any time and with ease.
In conclusion, this is a useful post, plain and simple. Go to Comment
Total Comments:

Join Now!!

Witness Protection Ring

       By: Cheka Man

Like a Binding Oath Ring but it stops anyone under witness protection from revealing his or her true identity to anyone. I might make this into a submission one day.

Ideas  ( Items ) | January 4, 2009 | View | UpVote 0xp